Better

Better

A Poem by David
"

. self awareness is the secret to improvement .

"

to his progeny,


"never resemble me."


said the despicable man,


to his beautiful family.






© 2018 David



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Short yet tells an intricate story. It also indicates a really important detail about growth, and understanding ones own weaknesses. I like how you say “beautiful family”. I personally can see this line in two ways, the disposable man’s nature has not seeped into his family, suggesting he has not completely failed them, or his own image of family is one of utmost adoration. However, there seems to be endless directions one could take with this poems meaning. It is meaningful, yet open to interpretation.
Enjoyed contemplating it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H L Rose

1 Year Ago

I see that, and thanks for the clarification. I like that interpretation, and it is so true.
David

1 Year Ago

I kinda liked your interpretation better. It's a very good thing this poetry s**t is completely arb.. read more
H L Rose

1 Year Ago

You can never beat the original intention of the poet. Many things are open to interpretation. I agr.. read more



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This sort of paraphrases all the words of warning, fathers have given sons and daughters, throughout time. Nice.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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David

12 Months Ago

Not all fathers.

Have you seen some of those son's of b*****s these days? Animals I .. read more
Self awareness is key to change, once you change, so does everything around you!
Very inspiring verse..... mistakes we make in life often regretted, can create wisdom to pass on.


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David

1 Year Ago

I really do believe that evolution is not simply restricted to physical traits. Neanderthal's never .. read more
Hebe

1 Year Ago

True I agree, but we can never be so sure of ourselves there are many ways we can become extinct. ... read more
David

12 Months Ago

Come now... that outcome, while very miserable, would not cause the extinction of life or even mank.. read more
Short yet tells an intricate story. It also indicates a really important detail about growth, and understanding ones own weaknesses. I like how you say “beautiful family”. I personally can see this line in two ways, the disposable man’s nature has not seeped into his family, suggesting he has not completely failed them, or his own image of family is one of utmost adoration. However, there seems to be endless directions one could take with this poems meaning. It is meaningful, yet open to interpretation.
Enjoyed contemplating it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H L Rose

1 Year Ago

I see that, and thanks for the clarification. I like that interpretation, and it is so true.
David

1 Year Ago

I kinda liked your interpretation better. It's a very good thing this poetry s**t is completely arb.. read more
H L Rose

1 Year Ago

You can never beat the original intention of the poet. Many things are open to interpretation. I agr.. read more
Change must always be welcomed for growth but what we show others is what we allow to be seen🌹choices echo out forever🦋

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

1 Year Ago

It takes a lot to use hurtful words but kindness it overcomes all🌹
David

1 Year Ago

Yeah... something like that. I like your style lady face.
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

1 Year Ago

A bit of this and a bit of that that’s how it all works out, thanking you kind sir🌹
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Gee
My father was a grade A arsehole who cleared off when we were but kids with bums the size of shirt buttons. Now a dad myself I have been to my daughter all that I would have wished for from my old man if he had stuck around. She is a beautiful young lady and we are the best of mates.


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David

1 Year Ago

That's a good thing man, a real good thing. And not as common as you'd think.

You br.. read more
Gee

1 Year Ago

From past experience I know it is a lot less taxing on the heart and mind to be easy going rather t.. read more
David

1 Year Ago

in my experience too much good is what makes the bad so very enticing. even angels get bored I thin.. read more
I like this! And it's so awesome that you attached a song! That's like the best!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

David

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you liked it. Rilo Kiley is an underrated band; I do love the way Jenny Lewis sings.
TK, you've nailed it! I've told my kids (now 21 and 23) since they were teenagers to model the behavior they want to see from their children (not what they see from me or other family members). You've said that more succinctly and poetically here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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David

1 Year Ago

That's high praise.
the two sides of life is clearly displayed in this four line poem, the joy and pain so well hidden that sometimes we forget why it exists in our lives. this is only my interpretation of the poem.

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David

1 Year Ago

It's more about species refinement than any particular side of life. If you are a bad person with c.. read more
sette

1 Year Ago

parents being the model of the children
Nice poem. Really hits home a solid point. Thanks for sharing.

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David

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading.
Well and succinctly put. The gentleman probably should have no worries in that regard.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

David

1 Year Ago

Indeed. And thanks for stopping by.

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