Time Marches On

it is taking my hair
dulling my passions
culling my arrogance
stealing my jump shot
circumscribing ambitions
subtracting my loved ones
betraying my dreams

vilifying my muses

accumulating accomplishments 

leaving me wealthy
with nothing to spend upon

as time marches on and on

day by day month by month

leaving less of whats left of me

year by year

as i slowly disappear 

into the abyss of whats past

toward the inevitability of an ending

like nothing ever did happen. . .

i'll still love every f*****g second of it

until that very last f*****g moment of it

when there is nothing left there to be taken

still... i will always be grateful 

that there was ever anything at all 

to be taken from me to begin with

Author's Note

Reviews

[H L Rose]

I love that first line.

“leaving me wealthy
with nothing to spend upon”
I think these lines are super interesting as well.
Most every line packs a punch that could be a thesis statement to an essay about the passing of time. I can literally imagine writing an essay about time “steeling my jump shots”.

I much enjoyed reading it. Don't agree with the end, but hey I'm just religious and we disagree on a bunch of stuff. I think the entire thing's written fantastically anyways and the “still...i will always be grateful” line is pretty impactful. "year by year / as I slowly disappear" may be my favorite lines.

[The dark Hydra]

Daddyyyyyyyyyyyyyy Bleach is bad for you I drink whisky insted.

[The dark Hydra]

Daddy, love meeee. Love me hard.

[Davidgeo]

Drink bleach... time: now.

[The dark Hydra]

I tried. it didn't work

[John the Baptist]

As what is now politely called an "older gentleman," I can identify with this work. The speaker begins by listing physical losses and quickly accelerates into a full fledged existential crisis. He views himself as an island being steadily erased by the sea, and in the end it will be as though he had never been here. Still, at the end he can be grateful for what he has had. Gratitude puts us in the present moment, and that is all any of us have ever really had.

[Chris Shaw]

This reads to me like someone who has lost already most of what there was to lose. That doesn't bode well for the times ahead and yet your words say you have loved and will love every second remaining in your life. There is optimism in your words, I liked that.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

optimisim is everywhere, the problem is letting yourself see it... because negativity is also something you can see anywhere. we all have our predispositions and proclivities toward one side or the another. But objectively speaking, negativity is funnier and far more easier to see in its element... but, it's also unpleasant, self serving and counterproductive most of the time.

Our brains are wired to see and take advantage of weakness (it is always easier to eat the weak). I have great respect for people that can rationally and genuinely see the bright side of life from the darkest of corners. But I wanna donkey punch every faux upbeat person as hard as i can. Too many people are only "happy' because it's fashionable… and that's created an entire industry and social media self help guru for pay and/or attention.

Eh, in short... I'd rather converse with a real jerk-a*s than a faux nice person any day.

It's been awhile Chris... I hope your well. (i'd review more of your work but some of your friends here think I'm cancer and have no problem making a big thing over it ... I don't want you to have to deal with that bullshit.)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

great poem david loved it esp the hair bit in the beginning
love your stuff most of the time anyway so raw and honest and true to yourself

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Julie. That's high praise. I'm not as honest as you'd think though. I'd be in prison if people knew how I really felt about the world.

[Ookpik]

Well said, the last three lines especially.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks man. That means a lot coming from you. You're one of the few people here who can intimately identify with that. I hope your weekend treats you well.

[Ookpik]

It’s a strong sentiment and it was spoken well. Likewise to your weekend.