Summertime Waltz

Summertime Waltz

A Poem by mandy
"

lyrics to a song i wrote

"

 

 

A few weeks back, I took a bride

in the early part of June.

And now I'm waltzing by her side

beneath the Summertime moon.

 

There's nothing like a Summertime waltz,

the flowery scent of the air,

the soft glow of the lantern light,

and moonlight touching her hair.

 

Well, my wife and I kept waltzing

all through our married years.

We've lived a life of happiness,

many laughs, and a few tears.

 

But now we're old, and not so strong,

we can't two-step any more.

So we just hold each other close

and stand swaying on the floor.

 

 

There's nothing like a Summertime waltz,

the flowery scent of the air.

The soft glow of the lantern light

and moonlight touching her hair.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


© 2012 mandy



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This really made me smile. It was beautiful. The romance in this piece is so pure and perfect. I enjoyed reading this so much.

I must point out that in some stanzas like in the third of the first verse or the third in the fifth verse you don't capitalize the first word although you're starting a new sentence. You also end every line with a punctuation mark which is unnecessary.

Other than the technicalities of a few grammar mistakes, this poem was beautiful.

Cheers.
100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

mandy

5 Years Ago

thank you..you are correct....it's a habit i have when typing not to use caps. i must try to remedy .. read more
mandy

5 Years Ago

fixed it, i think
gloomysundays

5 Years Ago

Yes, everything is perfect.

Cheers.
100/100



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Well done.... A picture of two happy life as one.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This really made me smile. It was beautiful. The romance in this piece is so pure and perfect. I enjoyed reading this so much.

I must point out that in some stanzas like in the third of the first verse or the third in the fifth verse you don't capitalize the first word although you're starting a new sentence. You also end every line with a punctuation mark which is unnecessary.

Other than the technicalities of a few grammar mistakes, this poem was beautiful.

Cheers.
100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

mandy

5 Years Ago

thank you..you are correct....it's a habit i have when typing not to use caps. i must try to remedy .. read more
mandy

5 Years Ago

fixed it, i think
gloomysundays

5 Years Ago

Yes, everything is perfect.

Cheers.
100/100
the romance simmers beautifully, joyfully in this piece, who wouldn't want to dance to this song, a lovingly crafted gem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

thank you, circe
Wonderful made me smile

Posted 5 Years Ago


I like this a lot but when I began it, I really thought it would be longer and more developed. I'm not saying you did wrong but it feels incomplete.
ANF

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mandy

5 Years Ago

thank you, andrew. i thought i took them through marriage, through their lives and to old age, stil.. read more
mandy

5 Years Ago

on the other hand, after thinking about it, i think it is about the right length for song lyrics, an.. read more
What a beautiful, loving glimpse of two lives blended into one! Saw the title and just had to read it... been so cold here. Was just perfect!

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

thank u so much craig.
Very deeply written. It is not my favorite but I still like it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

thank you, curiosity makes me ask,,,which one is your favorite? i'm guessing it is,,,THE OLD COOKI.. read more
TheLastEclipse

5 Years Ago

Lol yes indeed
I like how you compare everlasting love to a dance.

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

lol,,i hadn't thought of that,,in context with,,,can't two step anymore,,,,lol..no sex?
Enid Blake

5 Years Ago

Sorry, I obviously missed that subtlety lol! I read it more as reflecting the dance of a life shared.. read more
mandy

5 Years Ago

it sure is,,,i am always afraid that in my reviews, i get it wrong!! lol. actually, there is no "w.. read more
I love your idea of love being an enduring thing. This poem has a nice rhythm like the waltz.

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

thanks claire. it is a song, my husband kept running the strings, playing the same chord progressio.. read more
very nicely written, tender and sweet. A love of a lifetime! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


mandy

5 Years Ago

i visualized it in a long ago setting, when balls were held, and decorations included using outdoor .. read more

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Added on October 4, 2012
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i have lived in michigan and florida. married to a guitar playing man. i enjoy writing poems and songs. also, bowling and card playing..am a big nascar fan, and like hockey. more..

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