The other side of me

There is a darkness

Swirling inside me

That yearns to have its freedom

I can feel its metallic taint

Even now

Hammering inside my head

So when it all gets to be too much

When pain and lies overcome all reason

I'll run outside, try to escape before it hits

The storm

The one that leaves me shaking

In fright, horrified at what I have done

This isn't me, I try to convince myself

But I know it's all false

So I shut it all out

And wait for the sun to come back

Reviews

[Aly]

This is an interesting write.
But I do know we all have different sides of ourselves. For me I know that with well...someone people say the word "certain" but I use the word "special" when I'm with Special people, I am different. Sometimes for the better, sometimes for the worst.

Good job. I could see everything.

[disheveledApathy]

Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it! ;)

[Phillitup]

I feel like we all have a different side to ourselves that doesn't seem normal or maybe feels way different to us, that no one can see. Life is different from every direction, turn, corner, and perspective. We have to learn to find ourselves in the nooks and crannies of our minds, our thoughts, our dreams. We must search every piece of ourselves to look at the full picture. I think you have expressed this confusion and discovery perfectly in your eloquent and elegant poem. This poem was obviously poured out using not only mind and intellect but also soul. The hope pervades the poem like a knife, slicing the deceit and horror into one flicker of a candle. Nicely and poetically penned my dear friend! Best regards, Dell

[disheveledApathy]

Did you just write that in the few minutes since I sent you that request? I'm amazed. Thank you, Dell, and I really don't feel I deserve all that. Lovely review ;)
-Mer

[Phillitup]

Aww...thanks for the appreciation! I always feel obliged to leave you a particularly thought out review, more so then others, because I feel an utter connection with all of your writing. Stunning work! Yes, I always tend to leap when I see a name that doesn't send a million read requests before I get to the people who ask me to read stuff ALL THE TIME. I hear/see more of their writing and I prefer to read stuff that I don't look at every day. LOVE YOUR WRITING!

-Dell

[disheveledApathy]

Again: thank you so much, you have no idea how happy this makes me feel! And for that appreciation, I really don't think you get enough. (am trying not to gush, I apologize if I am) Same goes for your writing, I LOVE your style.
Oh, I did gush, didn't I? Sorry.
-Mer

[Phillitup]

Thanks, no worries...:)P

[Andorianskye]

i think we might all have this, some more than others though. it's one of those things you can not even tell your family or closets friends. a thing you try but can not escape.


( wow that was a poem within itself.)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

sometimes we have to. beautifully written Mercanta

[disheveledApathy]

Thank you ;)