Ruffled Memories

A crease here

A fold there

Whom to be blamed for the theft?

Last night passed in a blur

But the fabric wont forget 

the marks you left.

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really really good. I have been reading your work after a very long time, I assume - and I can see from this piece, how much you have grown as a writer and as an individual.
It is such a mature piece of writing and it hits you home. It hits you hard, right at the core of everything that resides inside of you. There is sense of pain and grief in this piece, especially in the last couplet - a sense of longing and the sense of being incomplete.
Beautifully written!

[S]

Even I felt like I've raised a bar from the kiddish love songs after writing this piece. I'm so happy that others feel the same way about it.

[Daydreamer]

The impact of this poem is without a doubt exceptional. Well done.

[S]

Thank you :)

[Stonz P.]

The brevity of this piece hits home is like a comet. It will be in sight for a short while but the length of its memory is lasting.
I hope this is enough.
Good write. Glad I stumbled upon this.

[S]

I am so glad it could leave an impact on the mind. :)

[Daydreamer]

You've used a few words yet, they could convectionally show versatility! There's no definite or standard way to read this special poem, but it's very captivating however you intended for it to be!💜💜💜💜

[S]

It does grab your attention for a while. I hope you could perceive your own version of story in it. :)

[Pól]

Very clever- good write.
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[S]

Thank you paulo :)

[Sourav]

I liked it because in a very few words you've expressed a lot in this poem. It can be interpreted in quite a few ways. Nice construction of the lines and a good free flowing poem.

[S]

Thank you Sourav :)

[Rahul]

I've read this poem keeping two perspective in my mind .. the first perspective says, "someone or the special one you love the most in the life, with whom you spend some time making memories..left you alone putting into the world of loneliness where you find nothing but his memories with his marks he left on you. And now the second perspective say, "All the emotions, the pain coming through the darkness ..from behind in your present, no matter what but to make you feel alone ..taking you to the world of misery. Time's what which brings memories and the life's what that brings time and the same thing happening here with you, you brought happiness, happiness brought you life but when you brought your someone, he brought you nothing but "Ruffled-Memories" .. that's all what I find from this piece ..this's short but the words ain't less than any big stuff.

Heyy, be smiley and let it go ;) By the way, heyy, i've again given ya 100/100 for this beautiful write!

[S]

Thanks rahul :)

[Rahul]

It's my pleasure, Sayrandhri ;) Your stuffs're really well penned. You really should try to give a shot to your writing someday .. your cool at writing ;)

[S]

i'd like to do that someday :)

[Rahul]

Lovely.. you make me refresh now. Am glad, you've got a way to accept good things ...and heyy..if you ever get published then don't forget to let me know..i'd love to read your novels holding in my hands reading them all with a cup of tea or coffee all night.. ok? ;)

[MAC]

what a brilliant and very original write. certainly worth a double WOW.

[S]

Thank you so much :)

[Sami Khalil]

The creases of the fabrics and skin can be marks of time or stiffness. Excellent...:)...........

[S]

Thanks Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)................

[BlueDreams]

Oh! wow a short poem captures very intense emotions is a sign of real talent !! Especially these lines
" Last night passed in a blur
But the fabric wont forget
the marks you left " were so captivating :) A great write :)

[S]

Thank you:)