Strength Test

 

 

Trouble murking under frozen waters

Breath of warning

Whispered in the rustle of

Late winters leaf’s

It will be here soon

I stand

In a field of tall swaying grasses

With the chilled wind

Howling into my porcelain unprotected face

I stand

Awaiting the trials

That were promised

Waiting for the steady earth

To rumble and shake

A battle

I prepare

With a sailors legs

Eyes of an eagle

And a Shamans insight

I await

Standing

Prepared

Holding the  ground I stand on

Waiting

For my strength to be tested.

 

Reviews

[Blakprinze (Vincent J.)]

I pictured someone standing on a high place/at a high point waiting for the next challenge life would bring them. Very nice writing here. Enjoyed much!

[KAREN]

Very nice! I like the way it flowed! And the frist half the way you described winter was great! You showed great emotion in this piece!!

[Dr. Robert]

Great use of vocabulary to convey the emotion of this piece. This is what poetry is about - using those words and your surroundings to convey that emotion. I found no real issues with the poem itself though i did get a little caught up on some of the verses, i.e. "howling into my porcelain unprotected face", seems like it was put in there because of a lack of better words to use. Still, it did not distract from the overall excellence of the poem. Kudos and keep up the awesome work! this displays much potential.

[Serend1p1ty]

Ah, this is lovely.
The description, the use of words.
Really good, I so enjoyed reading this.
"Eyes of an eagle
And a Shamans insight" - These two lines appealed to me, dunno why but it just jumped out at me.
Wonderful work Parker.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Jim Clarke]

Great ambiguity. This makes me think of a farmer facing a harsh environment or a Viking waiting for the fight to come to him.