On the Wing

Hearts and music fill the air

everywhere I turn there is magic flare.

I will climb,

I will reach for the stars and I will shine.

I will shine .

I am not alone.

I can stand with my hand in your hand.

I can fly with you as my wings.

I can dream dreams.

I will go to the ends of the earth,

just to find the things that you need to survive.

With you as my wings I can fly.

I will touch the sky.

You will fill my heart.

see the magic in you eyes.

Try to reach,

dream with me and feel the wind,

blowing strongly.

Fly to the world that we want to be in.

 Find in me want I see.

Can it be,

 I might love you more than me.

Author's Note

Whatcha think

Reviews

[Sunny]

I really love the flow of this poem! It's very good :]

[J. C. Koch]

Love poems are my favorite, and i like the story this one tells. The text being centered really grabs attention.

[Rachel U.]

Okay, first to point out a few problems:
1)// I am ot alone.// - I'm assuming you need an "n" before the "ot". Just a typo. And another here: //see the magic in you eyes//
2)// I can stand with my hand and your hand. //- This wording is strange. You might want to say "in" your hand, or something of that sort.
3) You have a problem with your verb tenses here. Note:
//everywhere I turn there is magic flare.
I will climb,//
You begin in the present, but turn into a future tense. In this poem, it's not too much of an issue, but be wary of switching back and forth too often.

Overall, cutely written. :)

[Erin Lee]

awwww. that's such a sweet depiction of young love! so innocent and totally willing to give of oneself! i love this. thank you for sharing it! you have one typo up toward the top with too many spaces before the period.....

[Mary]

great poem, really hope it isn't about u know who! cause they are very bad news!!:) it isn't right!?! but great write and PLEASE let it be fictional!!!^^

[Micah_s5]

It's a nice message your putting across. Not bad.