Burn

Burn

A Poem by Neal S

“It was the time we burned the night” she said
Liquid dreams 
Moments in time captured on paper
Like bad lyrics eched on the mind
We walked the dirty streets like giants that day
In a fairy tale unknown to most 
But this was no mushroom to make you small
It was reality
We lived in the frighting beauty of the light
Blinded by its fury 
And we loved

© 2016 Neal S



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Dam, this captivated me and took me to another place and time, a realm of poetic thought that creates reader memories, a pleasure to read!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Neal S

3 Months Ago

I'm really glad you liked it!
Powerful, worthwhile and honest poetry. My favorite kind.
"It was reality
We lived in the frighting beauty of the light
Blinded by its fury
And we loved"
The above lines. Words to live by. Thank you Neal for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


Neal S

5 Months Ago

Thank you Sir..
Coyote Poetry

5 Months Ago

You are welcome Neal.
Really powerful use of words. loved this line "walked the dirty streets like giants that day" - This really does make you think about the world in which we live in. Really powerful usage of words.

I have never been a poet myself but form what i have been reading - you poets seem to capture the imagination with such little words. I really don't know how you do it. A talent thats for sure.

Mark.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thank you Sir.
Neal S,
Powerful, Gave a reality to the job of living and all it entails especially the imprint of love on our lives. Nice job kathy

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Again, thank you so much for taking the time to read my work.
I love the Alice in Wonderland line about the mushroom, and the fantasy tone of your piece! I also really like the beginning line, very poetic. Awesome poem!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thanks Alyssa. Very cool of you to take the time to read it.
this poem is BURNING!! loved this one! I knew you're a great writer! Good Job! Keep it up!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thanks man. Very cool of you to say so. Really glad you liked it!
Oooo, I really like this one! Walking the streets like giants, blinded by our own light and burning through the night, loving every minute of this reality that no one else knows. Makes me think of when I was a teenager, just.... BURNING

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Had me spell-bound with words. An enchanting read. Mixing the real with the surreal. I love it! Took me on a journey through the night. Captivated 'til the end!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thank you very much!
Superb. This reads to me like an old tv show, which started each week with a voiceover saying "There are a thousand stories in the naked city, this is but one of them."...or something very similar along those lines.I can't explain why, but it also played in my head in black and white, with a neutral voice, which only expressed the passion and life in your words all the more. Perfectly captured.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Neal S

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much. Almost like one of those old film noir detective shows. Interesting way of lookin.. read more

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