Garden Of The Deep

With a poets awkward grin 

I pull your words within 

The here 

And the now

I brush the hair from your brow

In the wounded shadows we dance

Our walls

Our weapons 

Crumble with a glance 

Love-sick children 

Abandoned sleep

Our souls become one 

In the garden of the deep 

Reviews

[Robert]

You have a way with words Neal. I liked this little meaningful poem. I just shoot from the hip and hope that I hit something.

[Neal S]

Thanks Robert. Maybe poetry is just a collection of wet noodles that poets throw at the wall and hope they stick! lol

[Robert]

I think you are right there my friend.

[barleygirl]

This poem is creative & thought-provoking. Nice word-crafting ("poet's awkward grin" . . . "wounded shadows" . . . "abandoned sleep") & rhyming.

[Neal S]

Thanks so much.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I admire the way you write!
It's honestly mesmerizing and embedded with reality..
Title is well chosen
"Garden of the Deep"

[Neal S]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoy it!

[Lorry]

We build those walls with concrete, only to see them crumble like dust, effortlessly, when we find ourselves in the right garden of the deep. When we find it though, it is a release that the walls built so high were not made as strongly as we thought, our guarded so well. Another excellent piece my friend. You're on fire.

[Neal S]

lol..Thanks man.

[Valentine]

I really like the 4 lined grouping. You do well with free verse. Valentine

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!! :)

[Ken Simm.]

Tender and achingly beautiful is the thread that runs through this Neal. Lovely is an often misused word but here it fits so well.

[Neal S]

Thank you Ken. You always have such kind words my friend. Thanks

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Really lovely Neal, a nice energy in your words.
I think Ana summed up my own feelings on this quite well. Starz x

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!

[Ana Papaya]

There's a real tenderness to the brush of hair from the brow. This poems makes me think of two people who have darkness in them but are joined in love, and as one they venture off to bloom together.

[Neal S]

Thank you :)..I always like when you stop by.

[Ana Papaya]

My pleasure!

[T.S. Sky]

Beautifully written. I love it.

[Neal S]

Thank you so much! :)

[HeyJadeXO]

I like this Neal.Very pretty !

[Neal S]

Thanks so much!