Emotional Pain

So, how do you describe emotional pain? This is how I describe it!

Her chest, carrying the weight of the world

Her breaths, producing a staccato rhythm

Her eyes, about to greet her face with a storm

Her every muscle, growing tight and firm

 

It felt as if he had been stabbed

Right through his chest, right through his heart

He could not speak a word,

His throat, blocked by a dart
His mouth, too dry to allow that

 

Her palms started crying
Her body started shivering

Her neck begging for relief

Her stomach pleading for peace

 

Emotions, emotions

Only emotions could do this
How miserable it is

For one to be tormented

By such elusive pain

Being injected

In their veins

It was truly

A shame

 

Author's Note

I actually felt some sort of emotional pain when writing this. Not a pleasant experience but I had to put this out there. :)

Reviews

[H L Rose]

I like the switching between her and he, and I think the third stanza is brilliant.

In the first stanza, I especially like “her eyes, about to greet her face with a storm”. I enjoy the imagery here.

In the second stanza, I think “his throat blocked by a dart” is unique wording. I will say that the last line of this stanza seems a little bit confusing with “that”. What is it that “that” is referring to? But I of course could just be missing something obvious.

Like I said before, the third stanza is my favorite. I love the line “her palms started crying”.

In the fourth stanza I like the line “By such elusive pain”. I think “elusive” is great word choice.

Overall, I love the sentiment and I find this poem provoking. There’s a lot of emotion.

I enjoyed reading it!

[Nisha M.]

Hi Hannah! Thanks for taking the time to thoroughly go through my poem, this makes me happy! "that" refers to him being unable to speak a word but I understand that it might cause some confusion! Again, thank you so much for this kind review!

[H L Rose]

Of course!

[¿]

Emotions.....I've heard so many definitions of it till now.
Every time I got to know something new and here I'm feeling it!!
Well written Nisha!!

[Nisha M.]

Ah! I'm glad you enjoyed it!!! Thanks for the kind review!

[sette]

and it is healthy to be able to express it good luck with the contest

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much!

[sette]

you are welcome