deprssion II

a message from the hardest week of my life in which I did try and kill myself. it is an attempt to show how people suffering from depression feel in their worst moments suicide is never the answer!!!

leave me Satan's shadow 

hounds that rip apart my skin 

I can not stand to see 

my light fade so dim 

stop the light from seeming night 

stop the cold from reaching my soul 

stop the anger beyond others sight 

stop the hate of who's in control  

stop the need to moan alone  

stop the world looking down on me 

stop the frustration and anxiety

stop the fake happiness in mirror i see

do this so I may live 

and not whilst not caring 

about anything I ever did 

and not whilst slowly drowning 

in a glass box with closed lid 

I hate myself for who I am 

I wish to lay upon my death bed 

for when you don't care if you live or die 

you may as well be dead 

god let me feel something other then despair 

Reviews

[Frank Purcell]

Excellent emotion capture, and as smarie said, this is exactly the raw emotion people feel when they feel depressed. And the last line is a good ending, because it shows that you are not giving up, and you have hope that something other than despair will come along. Stay optomistic, and keep writing brilliantly.

[Dove]

This poem says exactly how people feel when they are depressed. I have been depressed many times in my life but one particular time, where the depression lasted almost a year was the worst. I wanted to kill myself, I tried to kill myself. So I can relate to this poem and it hits right on the spot for me.