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Serves Him Right....

Serves Him Right....

A Poem by Dawn

The boy racer drives like a nutter
down the high street
then onto the motorway
gets off the motorway.

Drives along some country roads
then into some seaside
town.

And starts to make a
twit of himself in the
resort.

Blasting his annoying air horn.
And revving his engine to
show off.
And starting to chatting up
some local lassies.

Saying you like my ride?

And the old folk of the town.
Are thinking.
Moron, twit, show off.

Later on in the evening.
Some local resident
Called Charlie.
Heard about this guy.
So came to offer him
a drag race along the quiet
seaside towns promenade.
At 1 am.

When everything is closed
and the streets are clear.
And if he lost.
He had to clear off and never
come back.

Unknown to this "boy racer".
Charlie's father had a Porsche.
And at 1 am he arrives in it.
Ready for the race.

And the racer boy was sitting in
his Volkswagon Polo.
With his flash wheel trims and mad two toned
the coloured car with his annoying airhorn of course.
With his fluffy car seat covers
and hanging dice from the windscreen mirror.

And of course.
Charlie the local lad
Kicked his arse into touch.
And this other lad
had to leave and never
return to that seaside town again.

I guess the moral of
this tale.
Is stop annoying
locals of a place
you don't know.

As someone will come along and
outsmart you and
kick your butt.
As they did to this boy racer.




© 2019 Dawn



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I love the voice you've developed in this poem, casual, conversational and authentic. It truly feels as though it is drawn from experience, and I know exactly the kind of individual that you're discussing here, having encountered similar people myself. Your use of repetition to drive home your point is wonderful, as is the line 'kicked his arse in to touch'. Basically I really enjoyed this, well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

2 Months Ago

Thanks Patrick that was really nice of you. Dawn.



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I agree dear Dawn. My father told me often. A strong man. If you believe, you are the baddest man in the city. Yell, it out. Someone will appear stronger and badder. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing tale and poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Thank you Coyote.
Oh yes. A great moralistic tale. And I so enjoy hearing about someone else get their comeuppance.Smirk.
And so well written.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Thank you ken, that was so kind of you to say. Dawn.
A cool and imaginative tale, narrated with a lot of flair and made for a great read, dear Dawn. Loved it. Loved the message!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Thank you Dear DIVYA, for your kindness. Dawn.
DIVYA

1 Month Ago

You’re welcome dear Dawn...🌷
Very well - quite familiar to me. Reminds me my college days, i guess. Bloody anger, raged outlets, passion of being a badass, and kicking out kiddo's little butts including tiny asses as well, and certainly receive the honor - the luxury - of being kissed, smooched, and tightly cuddled and surrounded by beautiful vanilla pies , short skits, high heels, wow rainbow gurls, married, divorced and all kinda breed - the varieties of ladies. Ah, that time!!

Nicely put. You have an unique way to make someone as nocturnal as me having your valentine-heart between my sharpen but sweeten teeth. Delighted and honored once again to revisit the terrace of your profile. Always worth taking some slight walks around your streets, and leaving you some formal and friendly "WOW" - a "Wine Of Wishes". Cheers, my love.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Well Dear Adams, so glad you enjoy this read, and brought back reminders of your youth. Your a sweet.. read more
The way you write makes the reader feel like they are there witnessing the event

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Thanks for the compliment. :)
Haaa!!! You're damn right they will. I've seen this play out a million times. You always have such a great look at things Dawn. This one made me laugh.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

1 Month Ago

Nice to hear you enjoyed this one Crowley.
Very interesting poem about the consequences of someone's actions. Many of us have done sometyhing stupid and may cost someone's life or our own.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JungLee

1 Month Ago

You're welcome c: Please check out my new poem if yoy're able to
Dawn

1 Month Ago

Just did Junglee. :)
JungLee

1 Month Ago

Thank you!
I feel like I know this kind of show-off all too well! really enjoyed this one 🤗

Posted 1 Month Ago


As you read through this vivid journey there is such a sweet sense of victory. I grew up in a small farm town in California, and so I could relate... Teams from other towns would always make fun of us. Till we'd kick their arses.

Posted 1 Month Ago


I really like your style in this one, great story telling.
Perfect ending, bravo to the locals.

Posted 1 Month Ago



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Added on February 4, 2019
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Tags: Moral, tale, boyracer, Charlie

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Dawn

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