Him and Her...no me

A poem about a broken love...a pain in which we all feel...

They are always together;

never are they separate.

They would follow each other to

the ends of the earth.

 

They speak their words of love,

and say not what thy are,

for shan't we already know.

 

It is always Him and Her...no me.

 

A picture perfect couple,

in love with one another.

Peace andharmony rotate

their world of "love"

 

Shame on I for thinking,

or even imagining for a simple

meek moment that "I" could

ever be with Him.

 

It all rips me apart ,

emotionally;

mentally.

 

I know my eyes deceive

me when I see them together.

I cry myself to sleep each night

inviting the demons into my dreams.

 

I pray each day that they will

both end their silly relationship

and end this pain they

drown me end each minute

of each day.

Author's Note

Well, my friend was telling me about this thing about a guy, and BAM!, it kind of hit me. SO, just read it and tell me what you think about it. Please and thank you!

Reviews

[Sarah]

I really like this, I think it's a pain we can all relate to - the loneliness that is felt when two friends (or even just one friend) are in love with each other. :( You seem to no longer be important, and it's even harder if you like the guy yourself. o= I really loved the second to last verse the best, especially the line "inviting the demons into my dreams." Very pretty. Great job!

[Steffi]

I thought the message was very clear and nice. It is a sad tragic topic that we can all relate too.
The only things I can say, other than a few spelling issues that we all face, it that the rhythm seemed to be a tad off in certain sections that made it a little hard to fully get pulled in by the piece. But other than that this was a very well penned piece. Good write! :D

[Brenda Sue]

Very creative. It needs a little work with the spelling but the message is clear. Wonderfully penned. Keep up the good work.

[Mariana Silva]

You may want to go back and run this through a spell-check and read it aloud so you can work on your rhythm. Its a good topic but you seem a little rushed in the writing.