Kitten

Calling the felines name
In abundant shape or form
The kitten jumps on its toes in glee
Fluffy and small
Forcing the maiden to hold the fluff ball with love and care
Playing around with its sensitive hair
Meowing, persistently around the child's leg purring
She plays games with the well groomed kitten

Kisses for the departure
She must slumber, for her everlasting beauty of youth
Placing the kitten gently onto the wooden floor
Kissing it farewell and for good rest
Wishing the feline for the best
The angelic child glides her tiny fingers upon the wooden rail

Alone and scared
It is too dark for a kitten!
The house is too big!
Where can the kitten settle calmly and not get lost!
The animal finally views light from the outside world
Curious and invited with glee
The feline with a bow on its head finds a dog door yet, there is no sign of them anyone
The kitten carefully looks both ways and walks with grace
Impusingingly jumping out to the backyard...

'Morrow reaches the maiden eyes
calling out to the precious gift from above
Looking at the bottom of tables
Inside baskets
The tiniest of places!

Staring outside the dusted window
A fluff ball catches her eye !
Grabbing her dirty boots in a flash , sinless and innocent
Stooping her feet onto the snow
"No no no..."

Finding her kitten stiff and dead.

Reviews

[Praveeta]

Nice story telling where words succeed in changing the reader's mood from cheerful and playful to gloomy one.

[Saddam]

very dearful poem of a kitten. Blinking world attracts every body, but when they face it they say the world is not a bed of roses. Poor kitten... but very nice story.
Staring outside the dusted window
A fluff ball catches her eye !
Grabbing her dirty boots in a flash , sinless and innocent
Stooping her feet onto the snow
"No no no..."

Finding her kitten stiff and dead.

LOVE THISLOT. thanks.

[Chris]

I saw the title at the Pet Story Contest page.

Some think the author controls the story and some KNOW the story controls its teller. You explored your emotions with the penning of these words. And I think you held back... it is ok to put YOU into your writing, THAT is what makes it ...yours.

[Julie Spade]

Thank You, Chris for the feedback! Yet, I must ask in what aspect do you think "I held back"....in the storyline, the climax, the maiden and the kittens lack of chacterization, the emotion, the format ? Not really sure what you were implying but I hope for a response. When i read a review that states i lack in something i try to make sure i fix it and for that i praise you for telling me the truth instead of just saying you "like it". Thank you for noticing it and reading it !

[Chris]

The personal feeling wasn't there for me. You told the story but I didn't feel the YOU in it. Ever notice the reporters on the evening news? They speak but few of them really seem to "feel" what they talk about. That help?

[Julie Spade]

Ohhh, I understand what you mean now yet I have to respectfully say that I strongly disagree with you because ALL of my works are from personal thoughts, pure emotion, present/ past memory or even curiosity! I do not create crafts just for recognition from people since you compared this situation to a reporter feeling numb to what they say is extremely false for what I intend for my readers to feel . Thank you for your comment .

I shall take your information to add a little more emotion. Thank You

[Chris]

My comment is specifically to this piece - not your entire body of work. Just making sure you understand.

The presenting of the reporter reporting was meant to express my comment in a way more understandably for you - NOT as ding toward your works. And I am glad you disagree - even strongly because a comment (even a critique) is an opinion and not a law handed down from on-high. I look forward to listening to your next work.

Take care.
Chris