The Other Dame

Happy was I

in your warm cocoon.

Giggling and smiling,

shining like

the silver moon.

Sang songs did we,

Dancing to

unheard tunes.

Hugging and kissing

in the silence of your room.

So sure was I

when I met

you, my dearie,

I thought you were

my one true love fairie.

Madly in love

with you, my darling,

I drew out our future

With six kids,

a house with striped awning.

Time ticked by

and bitter did you turn

To me, my love,

all that you burned.

No cocoon, no songs,

Dancing, that was gone.

No hugs and no kisses,

They did not belong.

Cried did I, my dear.

Saddened by grief,

I erased our kids,

Tore the awning

Your relief?

I drew out my heart,

To wash out the pain.

Heartless and thoughtless,

My madness, your gain?

Not once I knew,

The reason for your

Change,

You didn't breathe a word,

Of the other dame.

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

According to me a person has a good & bad side...
most of the times we love someone after seeing their good side...
and make strong bonding..
later we get to know their bad side,when it is already late..
so,before going further than friendship ..try to see their bad side..
Poem is perfectly fine...
ending is sad as i expected...
Keep writing!! :)

[Tai Ryens]

I really enjoyed this, especially the last three stanza's. Those three amazed me, especially the line: "My madness, your gain?" Something about madness just intrigues me. Well done.

[just is]

This is really good, enjoyed the read.

[Emrick]

Nice ryhme scheme from stanza 1 to 3.
its a sad but a nice poem.

[Nayan]

Your poem is one of a flowing river - each word and phrase are short and simple, and that adds to the beautiful rhyme!

The intent is clear, and beautifully expressed through these lines. Love it!

[MoriartyMesa]

The love, emotion, image for thought and sadness. The work speaks for itself.




Nicely, Nice....

[Kes]

So sad!
Great write.
K

[eeoopig]

nice, but sad - poor girl :) great job!

[SUGATA M]

Lovely, but don't be so depressed about a conjugal life. I still enjoyed it after 17 years of marraige and coccoon is still intact. Good luck always