Olivia Rose

Olivia Rose

A Screenplay by ScottTheScreenwriter
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After eight years in captivity, a traumatized young girl seeks vengeance against those that would prey on the innocence of children. All copyright belongs to the author, Scott Turner.

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               INT. DILLAN'S HOUSE - DAY

               OVER BLACK:

               A MAN GRUNTS LOUDLY and SCREAMS in short, scattered bursts
               of noise.

               GLASS SHATTERS.

               A GIRL SCREAMS in anger before a loud CRASH.  Ragged GASPS
               for breath.

               A beat.

               The sickening CRUNCH of METAL on BONE.

               A MAN SCREAMS in pain.

               FADE IN:

               KITCHEN

               A thin MAN in his thirties with a thinning head of black
               wispy hair is convulsing on the floor of a poorly maintained
               kitchen.

               Various kitchen gadgets are strewn about the floor.  Glass
               is scattered across the room, and a large chunk is missing
               from the side of the kitchen counter.

               The back of a GIRL'S head comes INTO FRAME.  She is about
               sixteen years old with a thin build and long black flowing
               hair.  She is tall for her age, about 5 foot 10.

               The girl stares at the man on the floor as he winces in
               pain.  As the CAMERA PULLS BACK, we see that she is holding
               a crowbar in her left hand.

               With her one free hand, she reaches into her pocket and
               pulls out two long plastic zip ties.

               The girl moves toward the man.  She places the crowbar on
               the floor and binds his legs together with the zip ties.

                                     MAN
                         Who the f**k are you?

               The girl moves cautiously towards the man's upper body with
               the other zip tie in hand.

               The man takes a swing at her.  The girl quickly moves back,
               grabs the crowbar, and swings it in retaliation, hitting him
               in the left hand.  The man screams and the girl takes the
               opportunity to tie his hands together.

               The girl stands up and moves back two paces.  She stares
               down at the man, admiring her work.

                                     MAN
                               (sobbing)
                         You're insane.  Who are you?

               For the first time, we see the girl's face.  She has a
               crooked smile.  Her face is littered with small cuts and
               gashes.  Blood is trickling down her cheek from a wound near
               her left eye.

               The girl laughs quietly to herself as the man whimpers and
               struggles weakly at his bindings.

                                     MAN
                         Who the f**k are you?!

               The girl moves around the man's body to his face and kneels
               down in front of him.

                                     GIRL
                         Shhh.

               The girl stands back up, swinging the crowbar around
               playfully.

                                     MAN
                         Please, whatever you want, just
                         take it.  Just take it and get the
                         f**k out of here!

               The girl lets out a quiet snicker.

                                     GIRL
                         I already have.  My present is all
                         wrapped up for me.

                                     MAN
                         You're crazy.  Listen, I don't
                         know what you think --

               The girl puts her foot on the man's broken leg and slowly
               applies pressure.  He howls in pain.

                                     GIRL
                         You've done more than enough
                         talking.  Dillan Miller.

                                     DILLAN MILLER (MAN)
                               (shocked)
                         How do you know my name?

                                     GIRL
                         I know a lot about you.  Things
                         that you wish no one else knew.  I
                         know that you like to visit your
                         cousin's daycare and... take care
                         of the children.

               DILLAN'S eyes go wide as the accusation is made and his face
               flushes red.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         That was... YEARS ago!  I paid the
                         price for what I did!  If my
                         cousin sent you, I --

                                     GIRL
                         No one sent me.

               A beat.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Let's just talk this over.  I'm a
                         reasonable guy, I can give you
                         anything you want.  Just talk to
                         me.

               Dillan squints his eyes and a look of realization washes
               over his face.

                                     GIRL
                         You know who I am, don't you?

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Everyone knows who you are.

                                     GIRL
                         No they don't.  They know my name.
                          They don't know me.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         OK.
                         (a beat)
                         OK, well why don't you put that
                         down and tell me?
                         (motioning to crowbar)
                         I'm listening, we can talk this
                         over.

               A RUMBLE of THUNDER in the distance.

               The girl looks out the window at the sky.  Storm clouds are
               moving in.

               CLOSE ON GIRL'S EYE

               A look of fear.  A tear forms in the corner.

                                     GIRL
                         It rained that day, too.

               A flash of lightning.

                                     GIRL
                         It rained hard.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. ARIZONA DESERT - MORNING

               SUPER: "EIGHT YEARS EARLIER."

               WIDE ON ARIZONA LANDSCAPE

               The sky is dark and cacti litter the mountainous terrain.

               The sun makes its first appearance of the day, an orange
               ball of fire illuminating everything in its path with an
               amber glow.

               CLOSE ON ROUND-TAILED SQUIRREL

               The squirrel emerges to greet the day from its hiding spot
               beneath a tall cactus.

               WIDE ON HIGHWAY

               The highway stretches out beyond the horizon with a vast
               desert to each side.

               CLOSE ON ROAD SIGN

               "WELCOME TO SCOTTSDALE - MOST LIVEABLE CITY".


               EXT. ROSE HARDWARE - MORNING

               An old, well-used Buick is driving down a busy downtown
               street.  The car pulls up to the curb and the door swings
               open.  An elderly man steps out of the car on the passenger
               side.

                                     ELDERLY WOMAN
                               (O.S.)
                         Don't be long, Fred, I still need
                         to get to the post office and the
                         bank.  Don't make me late again,
                         you know I hate it when you --

               FRED closes the door behind him, silencing the unbearable
               noise coming from within.  He hobbles, a cane in one
               arthritic hand, towards a store with a large wooden rose for
               a sign.  It reads "ROSE HARDWARE".


               INT. ROSE HARDWARE - MORNING

               The DOOR JINGLES as he opens it and Fred waves at the man at
               the counter and smiles.

               The man looks up from his magazine and smiles back.  He is
               KEVIN ROSE, the owner of the store. He's a middle-aged man,
               about 5 foot 11 with a thin build and a full head of brown
               wavy hair.  A very youthful-looking man.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Hey there Fred, how ya doin'?

                                     FRED
                         Oh, I'm doin' all right.  Just
                         runnin' around.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         That right?  Bernie out there?

               Kevin leans forward to peer out the window.  He waves at the
               woman in the car, who frowns back, but returns the gesture
               all the same.

                                     FRED
                         Yeah, she's out there.

               Fred leans forward stiffly and extends a shaky hand towards
               a rack of nails and screws.  He struggles pulling a package
               off the shelf.

                                     FRED
                         These should do.

               Fred hobbles over towards the front desk.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         What's she have you workin' on
                         this week?

                                     FRED
                         Oh, gotta fix the damn railing
                         again. She holds onto that thing
                         so damn tight... pretty sure it's
                         just gonna pop off one of these
                         days and that'll be the story of
                         her.

               Fred is leafing through his wallet, collecting change.

                                     FRED
                         Sorry, what was that?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Didn't say anything.  Just the
                         screws? That'll be a buck fifty
                         five.

               Fred places exact change on the counter and grabs the
               screws, not waiting for a receipt.

                                     FRED
                         How the girls doin'?  Haven't seen
                         'em in here much lately.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Great, really great.  They turn
                         eight next week.  Interesting
                         age... I hear it gets worse
                         though.

                                     FRED
                         Oh, you bet.  Won't be long before
                         they start bringin' boys home for
                         dinner.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         That reminds me, I've been meaning
                         to buy a shotgun.

               The two men share a quick laugh.

                                     FRED
                         Take care, say hi to 'em for me.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Yeah, you bet.

               Fred leaves and Kevin looks around the empty store, exhaling
               loudly.

               Kevin walks into his office at the back of the store and
               picks up a phone.  Beside the phone is a picture of his
               family - Kevin, his wife, and their twin daughters.


               INT. ROSE HOME - CONTINUOUS

               KITCHEN

               OLIVIA and her twin sister, ELENA, are sitting at the
               breakfast table across from one another.  The girls are both
               rosy-cheeked seven-year-olds with long black hair that falls
               down below their shoulders.

               Elena is staring at the back of a cereal box while eating
               her Cheerios.  She's using her finger to trace her way
               through a maze on the back of the box.

               Olivia is eating her cereal while staring mischievously at
               Elena.  Olivia takes a piece of cereal and tries to throw it
               in her sister's glass of orange juice.

               The piece of cereal misses and whizzes past Elena's arm.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Cut it out, Liv.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (mimicking her
                               sister)
                         Cut it out, Liiiiiv.

               Olivia picks up another soggy Cheerio and tosses it.  It
               CLINKS off the rim of the GLASS.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                               (yelling into
                               another room)
                         Mom, Olivia's being a pain again!

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (O.S.)
                         Olivia, don't bother your sister.

               Olivia makes a face at her sister.  Elena goes back to
               reading the back of the cereal box.

               Olivia lines up another shot, carefully adjusts her aim with
               one eye closed and lets it fly.  The CHEERIO lands directly
               in Elena's glass with a SOFT PLOP.

               Olivia covers her mouth in surprise and suppresses her
               laughter.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         I'm going to kill you!

               Elena and Olivia both push their chairs aside quickly and
               get up from the table.  Elena chases after her sister
               through the kitchen and into the dining room.  Olivia pulls
               out a chair as she whizzes through the room, blocking her
               sister's path.

               Suddenly the PHONE RINGS.  Elena, defeated, sulks back into
               the kitchen.  She looks at the call display and then picks
               up the receiver, forgetting about her sister for the time
               being.

               INTERCUT telephone conversation.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                               (glumly)
                         Hey, Dad.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Hi sweetie, what's wrong?

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Olivia's being a jerk, she put a
                         Cheerio in my juice.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Oh boy.  I'm sure she didn't mean
                         to make you angry, hun, she just
                         likes to get you going.  Is Mom
                         around?

                                     ELENA ROSE
                               (yelling into
                               another room)
                         Mom! It's Daddy!

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         You and your sister have a great
                         day at school today, all right?
                         Tell Olivia I said good luck on
                         her math test.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         I don't know where she went, she's
                         running around like a crazy
                         person.

               Julia takes the phone from her daughter.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Hey sweetie, what's up?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Ah, not much, really.  Fred says
                         hi.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Which one's he again?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         The guy that keeps the lights on
                         in this place.  You've met him
                         before.  His wife is --

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Bernie.  Right.  Lovely woman.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Yeah... girls need a ride home
                         after school?

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Nah, they like to walk home with
                         their friends.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         I still think they're too young,
                         Jule.  Seven is --

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         They're almost eight.  Their
                         friends walk with them, it's good
                         for them.

               Olivia runs by Julia at break-neck speed.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         LIV!  Hey, slow down!  Go get
                         ready for school!

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         That's my cue to go.  Love you,
                         hun, have a good day.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Love you too.

               Julia hangs up the phone.  Behind her the weather report is
               playing on the TV.

                                     WEATHERMAN
                               (O.S.)
                         Sunny skies this morning, an
                         average temperature of 80 degrees,
                         but watch out, those rain clouds
                         are rolling right on in!  Don't
                         forget that umbrella, it's gonna
                         be cats and dogs alllll afternoon.
                          Back to you, Paul.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Girls, don't forget your
                         umbrellas!

               Both girls pop into the room at the same time equipped with
               backpacks.

               While Elena is picking up her umbrella, Olivia notices that
               the zipper on her sister's backpack is slightly ajar and a
               book is about to fall out of it.  She leans over and unzips
               it, causing her BOOKS to fall all over the floor with a
               CRASH.  Olivia laughs with giddy glee.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         LIV!

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Olivia!  What's wrong with you?
                         Pick up all those books right now!

               Olivia sticks her tongue out at her sister before bending
               down to pick up the books.  She gathers them up and puts
               them back in her sister's backpack.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         ... And you're grounded, I want
                         you to come right home after
                         school. We've talked about you
                         being mean to your sister.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Mom, what?!  That's not fair!  I'm
                         only goofing around. Why is
                         everyone so serious around here? I
                         hate living here.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Come ON Olivia, we're going to be
                         late again.  I got in trouble
                         yesterday because of you, enough
                         is enough.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (quietly)
                         I hate living here.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Bye Mom, love you!

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I love you too, hunny.

               Elena heads out the door while Olivia scowls at her mother.
               Without saying goodbye, she SLAMS the DOOR behind her.

               Julia rubs her face with both hands in frustration.


               EXT. NEIGHBOURHOOD STREET - MORNING

               Elena is walking well ahead of Olivia on their way to
               school.  Elena turns around and sees how far back her sister
               is lagging.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Seriously, Liv, hurry up!  Why are
                         you always so slow?

               Olivia kicks a crumpled up pop can and it goes flying into
               the middle of the road.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         And you forgot your umbrella, by
                         the way.  You're gonna get soaked.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't care.

               Elena huffs in frustration and continues walking ahead of
               her sister.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. NEIGHBOURHOOD STREET - MOMENTS LATER

               Olivia and her sister come to a crosswalk a block away from
               the school. The light is red and they both stop.

                                     GIRL
                         Hey Ellie!

               TAYLOR, a girl with short curly blonde hair walks up next to
               Elena and Olivia with a great big smile on her face.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Hey Taylor.

                                     TAYLOR
                         Do you wanna come over tonight? My
                         Mom said you're invited for dinner
                         and... oh my God, did I tell you?
                         My dad is thinking of taking us to
                         Florida this summer!  It's going
                         to be so...

               Olivia rolls her eyes as she stops paying attention to the
               conversation between the two girls and her focus wanders to
               a car sitting at the red light.  The car has a small candle
               sticker on the bumper with an inscription that's difficult
               to read.

               Olivia glances from the sticker up to the driver and
               realizes that he's staring back at her. He smiles when she
               catches his gaze.  Olivia gives him a queer look.

               The light turns green and the man drives off slowly, staring
               at Olivia in his side mirror.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Olivia, let's GO!

               Olivia turns to see that her sister is halfway across the
               crosswalk already.  Olivia turns and runs to catch up.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               INT. SCHOOL - CLASSROOM - DAY

               A loud classroom full of eight year olds.

               A teacher is walking down an aisle of the classroom,
               observing her students during arts and crafts.  She's a
               large woman with broad shoulders and an unforgiving face.
               Very harsh features.

               The students are making seashell necklaces.  Most of them
               are coming along nicely, except for one being manhandled by
               a large, overweight BOY.

               The teacher stops next to him and knocks lightly on his
               small wooden desk.

                                     TEACHER
                         Clean them first, then glue them,
                         like we discussed. And don't put
                         the glue in your mouth, Thomas
                         Anderson.  I can see you doing it
                         from the front of the room.

               Thomas sadly looks down at his unimpressive necklace.

                                     THOMAS ANDERSON(BOY)
                         Yes, Mrs. Mallozzi...

               As MRS. MALLOZZI passes, Thomas looks over his shoulder and
               cautiously licks some glue from his finger.

               Mrs. Mallozzi continues down the aisle, past Olivia.  The
               CAMERA STAYS FOCUSED on Olivia, as she works on her project.

               Her necklace is lopsided and covered with glue, not much
               better than the one being worked on by the glue-eater in
               front of her.

               Suddenly, Olivia becomes frustrated and she drops her
               necklace on the top of the desk.  She turns to the skinny,
               somewhat dweeby-looking BOY seated next to her.  He's
               wearing glasses and has shaggy brown hair.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Why do I get in trouble for
                         everything?  Elena does just as
                         much bad stuff as I do, but I'm
                         the only one that ever gets yelled
                         at.  Why am I the one that gets
                         grounded?

               The boy turns to Olivia, breaking his focus from the very
               impressive seashell necklace in front of him.

                                     BOY
                         Maybe it's because she can't tell
                         who starts the trouble.  You guys
                         look exactly the same, Liv.
                         Sometimes I can't even tell you
                         apart, seriously.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Oh Alex, you always know which one
                         I am because I'm the cuuuute one.

               Olivia smiles at ALEX and he puts his head down and blushes.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN (BOY)
                         Are you still allowed to have your
                         birthday party next week?

               Mrs. Mallozzi walks up next to Alex and clears her throat at
               him.

                                     MRS. MALLOZZI (TEACHER)
                         You can be social at recess, Mr.
                         Kaplan, for now please concentrate
                         on your project.

               Alex and Olivia roll their eyes at each other and wait until
               the teacher is far enough away that she can't hear them.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't know, probably not.  I'm
                         sure my sister will get to invite
                         anyone she wants and I'll just
                         have to sit in my room all night.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Why do you have to be such a
                         troublemaker?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I am not!  I told you, she does
                         just as much bad stuff as I do.
                         Don't be mean to me.

               Olivia pouts and goes back to gluing a large shell to her
               necklace.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I'm sorry.

               Alex turns his necklace over in his hands a few times.  He
               takes it and offers it to Olivia.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What?

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I want you to have this.  Like a
                         present.  Just in case you don't
                         get your birthday party.

               Olivia smiles and takes it, putting it around her neck.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (smiling)
                         Thank you.

               Olivia leans over and gives Alex a peck on the cheek.

               Alex blushes again and starts making a new necklace.


               EXT. ARIZONA DESERT - DAY

               The bright yellow sun rises higher in the Arizona sky,
               illuminating the harsh desert below.  Clouds whiz by,
               indicating the passage of time.

               The brown rattlesnake slithers across the desert.

               The round-tailed squirrel has found a small pile of seeds
               and is munching away on them.


               INT. SCHOOL - CLASSROOM - AFTERNOON

               The students in the classroom all have their heads down.  As
               the CAMERA MOVE IN to Olivia, we see that she is writing a
               math test.

               Olivia puts her hands on her face, clearly frustrated.

               CLOSE ON TEST PAPER

               "Question 5: Divide 325 by 20, showing your work and any
               reminder".

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia peers over at Alex, who is writing feverishly.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         psst.

               Alex peers over at her, giving her a face full of confusion.

               Olivia holds up five fingers in front of her face.

               Alex shakes his head no.

               Olivia puts her hands together, as if to beg for the answer.

               Alex looks to the front of the room.  Mrs. Mallozzi has her
               head down, grading papers.

               Alex quickly scribbles down the answer on scrap PAPER and
               begins to rip the answer off slowly.  It makes a QUIET
               TEARING noise, but in the classroom full of silence, it
               sounds like an earthquake.

               Mrs. Mallozzi looks up and clears her throat, as if to
               remind Alex to be quiet.

               Alex fakes a cough and RIPS the rest of the PAPER off.  He
               then slowly and carefully passes the scrap of paper to
               Olivia.  As their hands meet, Mrs. Mallozzi looks up and
               gives Alex a look that could curdle milk.

                                     MRS. MALLOZZI
                         Mr. Kaplan!  This is a test,
                         passing notes will not be
                         tolerated.  See me after class for
                         detention.

               Mrs. Mallozzi gets up from her seat, takes the note from
               Alex's hand and throws it in the garbage.

               Olivia gives a sorrowful look to Alex and mouths the words
               "I'm sorry".

               Alex looks away from her angrily, his face beet red.  He
               continues writing his test as Olivia pouts in his direction.

               Olivia turns her head and stares out the window.  Dark storm
               clouds are moving in on the otherwise sunny day, and distant
               RUMBLES of THUNDER can be heard.


               EXT. SCHOOL - AFTERNOON

               The rain is coming down hard.  The distant RUMBLES of
               THUNDER have now gained a more imposing presence.

               The BELL RINGS LOUDLY and kids begin streaming out of the
               building, equipped with raincoats, rubber boots and
               umbrellas.

               Olivia and her twin sister both leave the school at the same
               time, backpacks flung over their shoulders.  They both stop
               next to the wall of the school where the rain can't reach
               them and stare out at the terrible weather.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Oh man...

               Elena turns to her sister with a grin on her face.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Mom told you to bring your
                         umbrella.  If you hadn't been such
                         a pain in the butt, maybe you
                         would have remembered.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Shut up, Elena.

               Elena's friend, Taylor rushes over.

                                     TAYLOR
                         Hey, you're still coming over
                         tonight, right?

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Yeah for sure, let's go.

               Elena turns to her sister.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Are you gonna walk home with Alex?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Alex has detention.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Alex?  Are you serious?  Your
                         boyfriend has detention?  I don't
                         believe it!

               Olivia rolls her eyes.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         He's not my boyfriend.  Don't
                         forget to call Mom.  She hates it
                         when you don't call.

               Before her sister can respond, Olivia darts out into the
               pouring rain.

               Elena walks away with her friend, looking over her shoulder
               as her sister disappears from view.


               EXT. NEIGHBOURHOOD STREET - AFTERNOON

               Olivia is running through the pouring rain with her backpack
               held high over her head.  Her feet splash in large puddles
               that soak her already drenched shoes and pants.

               Olivia lowers the backpack and stands in the rain, still as
               stone, realizing that she can't get any more wet.

               After a few moments and a loud sigh later, she begins
               walking down the street at a slow pace with her head down.

               Suddenly, a car pulls up next to Olivia.  She recognizes the
               bumper sticker of the candle.  There are words around the
               image of the candle that read "Always In Our Hearts".

               The STRANGER driving the car rolls his window down.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Oh geez, you're gonna catch
                         yourself a cold walking around in
                         this sort of weather.  Do you live
                         around here?  I can give you a
                         lift.  I'm just on my way home
                         myself.

               Olivia eyes the STRANGER suspiciously.  He appears to be in
               his mid-twenties, attractive, with a full head of brown
               hair.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'm not supposed to.  I don't know
                         you.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Well that's OK, as it happens, I
                         know your folks.  They asked me to
                         keep a watch out for you and your
                         sister, you know.  I'm lucky I
                         found you out here like this. Like
                         I said, you could catch pneumonia
                         in this weather.

               Olivia gives the man a sidelong glance.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         You really know my parents?

               The man nods, smiling warmly.

               Olivia walks up to the passenger door of the car and opens
               it.  She pauses, rethinking the situation.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         If you know my parents, why don't
                         you know where I live?

               The man smiles at her, ignoring her question.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I gotta go.

               Olivia slams the door and begins walking quickly down the
               sidewalk, glancing nervously from side to side with her
               peripheral vision, not wanting to turn her head.

               The car begins to inch forward, following her.  She walks
               faster in response.

               Olivia turns down an unfamiliar side street and begins
               jogging.

               The car turns down the street and speeds up.

               The CAR RUMBLES along behind Olivia and suddenly the noise
               stops.

               Olivia continues walking forward at a brisk pace.  She
               glances over her shoulder.

               The Stranger is right on top of her.

               With one hand, he lifts her by the waist, covering her mouth
               with the other.

                                                       CUT TO BLACK.


               INT. ROSE HOME - AFTERNOON

               Julia walks through the front door of her home, soaked from
               the rain, and carrying bags of groceries. She sees Olivia's
               pink umbrella on the floor next to the door.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (yelling)
                         Olivia, I'm home!  What do you
                         want for dinner, sweetie?
                         (a beat)
                         Is your sister at Taylor's again?

               Silence.

               KITCHEN

               Julia begins unloading groceries into the freezer and
               fridge.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (yelling)
                         I can do pork, or I can do a
                         stir-fry, which one?

               Silence.

               Julia puts the frozen meat down on the counter and begins
               searching the house for her daughter.

               BASEMENT DEN

               Julia peers around the corner where the couch is located in
               the basement.  The lights are off and nobody's there.

               SECOND FLOOR

               Julia walks to the top of the stairs.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Olivia?

               OLIVIA'S ROOM

               Julia pops her head into her daughter's room.  Posters of
               Care Bears and other cartoon characters line the walls. They
               all seem to stare back at her, silent and wide-eyed.

               Suddenly the PHONE RINGS and Julia jumps.  She takes a
               moment to collect herself as the PHONE RINGS again.

               MASTER BEDROOM

               Julia picks up the phone.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Hello?


               INT. TAYLOR'S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Hey Mom, I'm staying at Taylor's
                         for dinner, her Mom said it was
                         OK.

               INTERCUT TELEPHONE CONVERSATION.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         OK, that's fine, sweetie.  Make
                         sure to thank her for dinner.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Mom, I always do, you know that.

               A beat.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Is your sister there with you?

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         At Taylor's?  Hello, Mom, Olivia
                         doesn't like any of my friends.
                         She never has.

               Julia has a distracted look on her face as Elena is talking.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I know, I just...
                         (a beat)
                         Enjoy your dinner sweetie, I'll
                         pick you up at 7:30.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Can you pick me up at eight,
                         because I really --


               INT. ROSE HOME - CONTINUOUS

               MASTER BEDROOM

               Julia hangs up the phone quickly as her daughter continues
               talking.

               Julia quickly dials a well-known number and waits for a
               response.


               INT. ALEX'S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS

               A portly WOMAN waddles over to the telephone and picks it
               up.

                                     WOMAN
                         Hello?

               INTERCUT TELEPHONE CONVERSATION.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Marie, it's Julia, is Olivia there
                         with Alex?

                                     MARIE KAPLAN (WOMAN)
                         Funny you should mention, I just
                         got a call from the school.  My
                         Alex got detention, can you
                         believe that?  Of all the kids,
                         they have to pick on the one that
                         least deserves it.  I just don't
                         know what they are thinking over
                         there, I'm gonna meet with that
                         Mrs. Mallozzi and give her a piece
                         of my --


               INT. ROSE HOME - CONTINUOUS

               MASTER BEDROOM

               The PHONE RECEIVER lands on the table next to the cradle
               with a THUNK.

               STAIRS/FOYER

               Julia flies down the stairs, throws her raincoat back on and
               runs out the door, stumbling on Olivia's umbrella as she
               goes.

                                                       CUT TO BLACK.


               INT. ROSE HOME - EVENING

               CLOSE ON TELEVISION

               A "breaking news" graphic flashes over the screen
               accompanied by FAST, DRAMATIC MUSIC.

                                     KEN THOMPSON
                         Good evening, this is Ken
                         Thompson.  Breaking news out of
                         Scottsdale this evening.  An Amber
                         Alert was issued moments ago for a
                         young girl whose been missing
                         since she left her school this
                         afternoon around 3pm.

               KITCHEN

               Julia, Kevin and Elena are crowded around the kitchen table
               talking to police officers.  Nothing can be heard, just the
               voice from the television.

                                     KEN THOMPSON
                               (O.S.)
                         Police are treating this as a
                         potential child abduction.  Anyone
                         with any information is asked to
                         call the police.


               INT. THE STRANGER'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - EVENING

               Darkness.  A RUSTLING NOISE.

                                     KEN THOMPSON
                               (V.O.)
                         Police are reaching out to the
                         public on this case, so far they
                         have no leads and there is no
                         motive in the case.

                                     THE STRANGER
                               (O.S.)
                         It's OK, it's OK.  You're home
                         now.  Just a few more steps. There
                         you go.

               More RUSTLING is accompanied by a LOW WHIMPERING.

                                     KEN THOMPSON
                               (V.O.)
                         Oliva is four-foot-seven, with a
                         thin build and black hair. She has
                         green eyes. She was wearing a grey
                         jacket and dark pants.

               OLIVIA'S POV

               Suddenly a piece of cloth is pulled back to reveal a dark,
               dingy basement and the face of the man that took her.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Welcome home.

               The man smiles at Olivia.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. ARIZONA DESERT - EVENING

               As the sun slips behind the horizon, blanketing the desert
               in darkness, the brown rattlesnake slithers across the
               desert.  It suddenly freezes, poised for a kill.

               The squirrel never saw it coming.

               The rattlesnake slithers away with its prey.

               The LOW HUM of DESERT WILDLIFE consumes the otherwise quiet
               evening.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. POLICE STATION - DAY

               MEDIUM SHOT - A MICROPHONE ATTACHED TO A PODIUM.

               Police officers are standing to either side of the podium.

               Julia Rose steps INTO FRAME and approaches the microphone.
               Her eyes are red and she looks exhausted.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         First of all, I just wanted to
                         say, once again, thank you from
                         the bottom of my heart to the men
                         and women of the Scottsdale police
                         force.  You have given me and my
                         family an unbelievable amount of
                         hope and courage throughout this
                         entire ordeal.  Thank you.

               A beat.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Three days ago, our daughter was
                         taken from us.  At approximately
                         3:35pm on Thursday, May 30th,
                         Olivia left her school, alone, to
                         come home to us.  She never made
                         it.

               Julia breaks down into tears.  Kevin steps INTO FRAME and
               puts a hand around his wife as she struggles with the words.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Somebody out there knows where she
                         is or who she's with.  We ask that
                         you please think of her and her
                         family.  To the person that took
                         her...

               A beat.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         ... please, bring her home to us.
                         Call the police anonymously and
                         drop her off somewhere safe. We
                         aren't interested in laying
                         criminal charges, we just want our
                         daughter back, that's all.  That's
                         all we want.

               A beat.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Thank you.

               Julia and Kevin walk OUT OF FRAME, as cameras illuminate the
               podium in flashes of bright white.


               EXT. CITY PARK - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         They looked for me for months. The
                         first few weeks were the most
                         intense.  I must have been on
                         every news channel in the country.

               Police are searching a city park.  Leashed dogs are
               following along with them, sniffing for any scent of the
               missing girl.


               EXT. COFFEE SHOP - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         He would listen to the news
                         reports, constantly.  He would
                         have the volume so loud that I
                         could hear it in the basement.  I
                         think he wanted me to hear it.

               Patrons of a coffee shop are entering the building and
               taking note of a "Missing" poster taped to the door.

               CLOSE ON POSTER

               "Olivia Rose: Missing since Thursday, May 30th.  Anyone with
               any information is asked to call police at 480-555-0715."


               EXT. BUS STOP - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         In the beginning, I was sure that
                         someone would find me. Someone had
                         to have seen something.  How could
                         such a thing happen in the middle
                         of the day with no witnesses?  As
                         the days turned to weeks, and the
                         weeks to months, I knew that
                         having any hope was pointless.

               A man is sitting at a bus stop reading a newspaper.  He's
               reading an article about Olivia's abduction.  It's no longer
               front-page news, the article is on the fifth page in the
               bottom corner.

               CLOSE ON ARTICLE

               "Still no break in case of missing Scottsdale girl."


               INT. ROSE HOME - NIGHT

               MASTER BEDROOM

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         The worst part was knowing that my
                         family still had hope for me.  I
                         heard my mom and dad on the news
                         many times in the first few
                         months.  They kept telling me that
                         they loved me and that I'd be home
                         soon.

               Julia and Kevin are lying in bed.  Kevin has his arm around
               his wife.  Julia is red-eyed and looks very frail.  Kevin
               looks like a broken man.  Both are staring out into the
               darkness, wide-eyed.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         My sister never made it on TV, I
                         don't think my parents would have
                         wanted her to.  At the time I
                         thought it was because she was
                         still mad at me.

               ELENA'S BEDROOM

               Elena is crying herself to sleep, holding onto one of
               Olivia's favorite stuffed animals, a Care Bear with Olivia's
               named stitched on the stomach in fancy lettering.


               INT. THE STRANGER'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         And Alex... I missed him most of
                         all.

               The Stranger slips the seashell necklace off of Olivia while
               she sleeps.  He inspects it curiously, flipping it over in
               his hands.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         But it wasn't long before they
                         were all just a distant memory of
                         a life I used to know.  Nothing
                         more than a whisper of a dream
                         that I may have once had.


               EXT. COFFEE SHOP - EVENING

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         The search was called off after a
                         few months.  I started to hear
                         less and less about myself on the
                         news, and after a while, he
                         stopped turning the TV on at all.

               A woman with a red apron removes Olivia's 'missing' poster
               from the door of the cafe.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. DILLAN'S HOME - DAY

               Dillan is lying on the floor of his kitchen, his face a
               bloody, bruised mess.

               The RAIN is coming down hard outside, POUNDING against the
               side of the house.  There are RUMBLES of THUNDER in the
               distance.

               Olivia is sitting in a chair near Dillan.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         They never found me.

               Dillan is staring back her with a troubled look on his face.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         You're not that different from
                         him.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         I didn't kidnap anyone.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No, you just molest young boys.
                         You're a saint.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         I keep telling you.  I turned
                         myself around a long time ago.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         People like you don't change.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Let me go right now and I won't
                         press charges, I swear to God.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Let me finish and I'll think about
                         it.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Dillan gives her a cold look.

               Olivia reaches over to the counter and grabs her crowbar.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (quietly)
                         I insist.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               INT. THE STRANGER'S HOUSE - DAY

               KITCHEN

               CLOSE ON BIRTHDAY CAKE

               A knife comes INTO FRAME and cuts a large piece of cake.
               It's carefully lifted OUT OF FRAME.

               BASEMENT

               The Stranger walks down the stairs with the plate in one
               hand.

               He walks across the length of the basement.  He walks past
               bright, discarded wrapping paper that's been littered about
               the floor.  A "Happy Birthday" banner is hanging from the
               ceiling pipes.  Balloons have been placed in the corner of
               the room.  Stuffed animals and piles of clothes litter the
               floor.

               In the middle of the room next to a metal pipe is a small
               mattress.  On it sits OLIVIA, propped up by a pillow.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         "Happy birthday to you.
                         Happy birthday to you."

               Olivia stares at the cement floor with a dead look in her
               eyes. She doesn't make eye contact with her captor.  She
               appears to be in her mid-teens and is malnourished and pale.
                Her hair is very long, and would reach her feet if she were
               standing. Her left arm is bound to a large metal pipe with a
               plastic zip tie.

               The Stranger places the plate down in front of Olivia.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Vanilla.  Your favourite.

               He stares at her until she reaches forward and pulls the
               plate toward herself.   She slowly and lifelessly picks away
               at the cake, nibbling at it and not daring to make eye
               contact with the man in front of her.

               The Stranger smiles as he watches her eat.

               KITCHEN

               The Stranger is cleaning dishes.  He scrubs several plates
               and bowls, and then lets the water out of the sink.  He
               stares down as the water swirls into the sink.  He then
               looks over his shoulder and stares at something unseen to
               the camera.

               He removes his bright yellow rubber gloves and walks into
               the living room.

               LIVING ROOM

               He approaches the wall and stares at something OUT OF FRAME.

               CLOSE ON PICTURE FRAME

               A framed picture of a smiling young girl with long black
               hair, presumably Olivia before she was taken.

               BACK TO SCENE

               The Stranger reaches out and removes the frame from the
               wall. He brings it close to his face.

               Tears begin welling up in the man's eyes as he touches the
               framed photo, attempting to caress the girl's hair.

               The DOORBELL RINGS.

               Startled, he wipes away his tears.  He hangs the frame back
               on the wall and moves to the front door, peering out the
               window. A GIRL SCOUT and the GIRL SCOUT'S MOTHER are
               standing at the front door.

               The DOORBELL RINGS again.

               The Stranger wipes away the last of his tears and clears his
               throat.

               BASEMENT

               Olivia is startled by the ringing of the doorbell.  Her eyes
               have a sudden energy in them.  She makes a low murmuring
               noise to herself.

               FRONT DOOR

               The Stranger opens the front door of the house.

                                     GIRL SCOUT
                         Hello sir, I am trying to raise
                         money for the Girl Scouts of
                         America, would you like to buy
                         some cookies?

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Uh, yeah.  Sure.  I would love to.
                          How much are they?

                                     GIRL SCOUT'S MOTHER
                         Four dollars.

               The Stranger smiles at the mother and looks through his
               wallet.  He produces a $10 bill and hands it to the young
               girl.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         I'll take two, and you can keep
                         the change.

               The young girl opens her mouth in surprise and looks at her
               mother.

                                     GIRL SCOUT'S MOTHER
                         What do we say?

                                     GIRL SCOUT
                         Thank you!

                                     THE STRANGER
                         You're very welcome.  It's
                         actually my sister's birthday
                         today.  I bet she'd love a box of
                         cookies for her birthday party.

               BASEMENT

               Olivia weakly struggles with her plastic bindings, but it's
               no use.

               Olivia tries yelling again, but her throat is too parched to
               produce anything above a slight yelp.

               FRONT DOOR

               The Girl Scout fumbles through her bag for the cookies.

               The mother, hearing the NOISE, peers inside discreetly.

               The Stranger catches her glance.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         My cat...

               The woman nods her head.

               The Girl Scout hands the man two boxes of cookies.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Thank you!

                                     GIRL SCOUT
                         You're welcome.

                                     GIRL SCOUT'S MOTHER
                         Thank you.

               The Stranger smiles at her and closes the door as the woman
               leads her child on to the next house.

               BASEMENT

               Olivia attempts to scream again.  Another muted noise fills
               the basement. Tears run down her face as she hears the door
               closing.

               The Stranger walks down the stairs and towards Olivia with
               his hands behind his back.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Have I got a surprise for you.

               He reveals the box of cookies.

               Olivia glances at him with an emotionless glare as she wipes
               the tears from her face.

               The Stranger places the box of cookies down next to Olivia.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Happy Birthday.

               He turns around and walks back up the stairs.

               Olivia opens the box and grabs a cookie.  She chews it
               slowly, closing her eyes and enjoying the taste.  After
               finishing it, she reaches for a second when a plastic card
               falls out of the box onto her lap.

               Olivia picks it up and inspects it.

               CLOSE ON PLASTIC CARD

               "Your Girl Guide Donation Card - Never leave home without
               it!"

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia's eyes go wide as she stares at the card.  She turns
               it over in her hands and inspects the sharp plastic edges.

               Olivia puts the card behind her back and makes contact with
               the plastic tie that binds her left hand.  With what little
               strength she has, she moves the card back and forth across
               the plastic surface.  She moves frantically with excitement,
               dropping the card several times in the process.

               CLOSE ON PLASTIC TIE

               Olivia's fingers rub across the plastic tie.  No progress is
               being made, the tie is still fully intact.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Frustrated, she BANGS her HEAD against the pipe and kicks
               the box of cookies away from herself.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. DOWNTOWN SCOTTSDALE - EVENING

               A full moon rises above downtown Scottsdale.   It
               illuminates the city streets and buildings.  The horses of
               the Bronze Horse Fountain stare eerily into in the
               moonlight.


               INT. THE STRANGER'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - EVENING

               Olivia stares into space with red, puffy eyes.  Moonlight is
               streaming into the basement through the small window above
               her.

               She reaches into her pocket and pulls out the card, turning
               it over in her hands.  She places it against the plastic tie
               again and resumes the sawing motion.  She works much more
               slowly now, closing her eyes as she appears to sleep while
               working on her bindings.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. THE STRANGER'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - MORNING

               A stream of light pours in through the basement window,
               hitting Olivia's closed eyelid.  She wakes up slowly.

               Suddenly realizing that she stopped working on her bindings,
               she touches the plastic tie with her free hand.

               CLOSE ON PLASTIC TIE

               Olivia's finger finds a small groove in the plastic tie.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia's eyes go wide and her mouth is ajar.  She feels
               around the cement floor for the card and grips it strongly.
               She immediately gets back to work, setting the card in the
               notch and sawing away feverishly.

               While sawing, Olivia closes her eyes and raises her face to
               the ceiling.  She grimaces and squints as she works, the
               action of moving her arm taking all the energy she has in
               her frail body.

               CLOSE ON her clenched hand gripping the card.

               CLOSE ON her arm moving back and forth.

               CLOSE ON her eyes, shut tightly closed.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Suddenly, Olivia opens her eyes wide.  Her body shakes
               uncontrollably.

               CLOSE ON her arm, now free of the zip tie.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia brings her wrist up to her face in amazement.  She
               rubs the red mark where the bindings have been cutting into
               her wrist for so many years.  She brings her shaking hands
               up to her face, overcome with emotion.  Her mouth is ajar,
               looking as though loud sobs should be escaping her lips, yet
               only a slight whimper emerges.

               Olivia attempts to get on her feet but collapses.  Her legs
               are numb.

               She rubs her legs dramatically, up and down, trying to
               regain feeling.  After several moments, she tries again,
               using the wall to prop herself up.  This time, she is able
               to stay up.

               She walks along the wall, leaning against it the whole time,
               inching her way toward the staircase.

               As she approaches the staircase, she peers her head around
               the corner.  She sees a door at the top of the stairs.  The
               light coming through the window of the door is almost
               blinding, making her squint.

               Olivia slowly releases her grip from the wall, and stumbles
               forward.

               Suddenly, and without warning, FOOTSTEPS can be heard from
               upstairs.  Olivia looks at the door at the top of the stairs
               and then back at the pipe she was attached to.  She curses
               to herself and quickly hurries back to her spot on the
               floor. She puts her left hand behind the pipe, awaiting her
               captor.

               The CREAKING of the STAIRS can be heard as Olivia realizes
               that the card and broken plastic binding are both in plain
               sight.

               She looks at them in horror and then at the stairs as she
               sees the legs of The Stranger appear.

               She quickly scurries across the floor to grab them, but
               she's too late.  As The Stranger's face comes into view,
               Olivia moves quickly back to the metal pipe, putting her
               left hand behind her back again.

               The Stranger comes into full view and looks at Olivia
               suspiciously.  Olivia is panting and gasping for air as her
               heart flutters from her near-escape.  She tries to control
               her breathing and stares at the floor, daring not to make
               eye contact with The Stranger.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         You OK?

               Olivia remains silent, her chest heaving in and out.

               The Stranger hands her an unwrapped breakfast bar.  She
               doesn't take it from him.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         What's up with you?

               The Stranger comes closer and kneels down in front of her.
               He looks at her panicked face.  Sweat is rolling down
               Olivia's forehead.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         You're sick again, aren't you?
                         I'll pick up something for you
                         when I'm out.  Try to get some
                         rest.  No more cookies.

               The Stranger stands up and walks toward the stairs.  A
               CRUNCH can be heard as The Stranger walks away.  He stops
               suddenly.  He lifts up his left foot to see...

               CLOSE ON BROKEN PLASTIC TIE

               The plastic tie is laying on the floor, the plastic card a
               few inches away from it.

               BACK TO SCENE

               By the time he turns around, Olivia is already running past
               him.

               The Stranger spins around to find Olivia scrambling up the
               stairs on all fours.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         No!  Don't! STOP!!!

               BACK DOOR

               Olivia  reaches the top of the stairs and attempts to open
               the back door of the house.  She turns the handle
               frantically, but it won't budge.

               The Stranger rounds the corner and starts up the stairs,
               taking them two at a time.

                                     THE STRANGER
                         Rachel, stop!

               Olivia frantically struggles with the lock and flips it to
               the unlocked position.  As The Stranger reaches the top of
               the stairs and reaches out for her, Olivia swings the door
               open, striking him in the HEAD with a loud THUNK.

               The Stranger stumbles backwards and falls down the stairs.
               As he lays motionless on the cement floor, blood pours from
               the open wound on his forehead.

               CLOSE ON THE STRANGER'S HAND

               A finger twitches.


               EXT. NEIGHBOURHOOD STREET - CONTINUOUS

               Bright white light blinds the CAMERA.  HEAVY BREATHING and
               SHOES SLAPPING against pavement can be heard.

               The blinding white light slowly FADES AWAY to reveal a
               neighbourhood street..  Olivia is running as fast as she can
               down the street.  She runs into a forested area several
               houses down and continues running, not daring to slow down
               even a little.  Tears are streaming down her face as she
               pushes herself to keep going.

               Olivia emerges on the other end of the forest onto another
               street.  Without looking back, she runs down the sidewalk.

               Another block passes by and then another and another.

               Another park on the right.  Olivia cuts through it, running
               past parents pushing their children on swing sets, and a
               family walking their dog.

               She emerges on the other side of the park and continues on.
               Another block passes, and another.

               Finally, Olivia's legs give out and she collapses awkwardly
               onto the sidewalk.  Her eyes are still open, but they begin
               to slowly close.

               OLIVIA'S POV

               The world is just a bright, shining abyss.  As she passes
               out, it fades into darkness.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. OLD LADY'S HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS

               An old lady is watering her plants by the window, while the
               THEME SONG from a popular soap opera is playing on the TV.

                                     ACTOR #1
                               (O.S.)
                         I need to leave.  I need to leave
                         here right now and I'm taking the
                         baby with me

               The old lady turns to the TV with a look of shock on her
               face, her mouth wide open.

               CLOSE ON TV

                                     ACTOR #2
                         Don't you dare take my son from
                         me!

               BACK TO SCENE

               The old woman shakes her head in disbelief and then
               continues watering her plants.

               She looks up and sees Olivia lying motionless on the
               sidewalk in front of her house.

                                     OLD LADY
                         Oh my God!

               The old lady rushes to the phone and dials 9-1-1.


               EXT. OLD LADY'S HOUSE - AERIAL SHOT - CONTINUOUS

               Olivia lies motionless on the sidewalk while curious
               passers-by crowd around her.

                                                       FADE TO WHITE.


               INT. GROCERY STORE - DAY

               Julia is bagging groceries.  She appears older and more
               frail than when we last saw her.  Her hair is streaked with
               gray and her face is lined with creases.

               She smiles at her elderly customer as she rings through her
               purchases.

               Julia's CELL PHONE RINGS.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         That will be $37.80.

               She quickly peeks at the call display and brings the phone
               up to her ear while the old woman is fumbling for change.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Kev, you know I can't talk while
                         I'm --

               A LOUD VOICE can be heard on the other end of the line.

               Julia's mouth opens wide, and she covers it with both hands.
                She drops the PHONE, which bounces as it SMACKS against the
               floor.

               CLOSE ON JULIA'S EYES

               Her eyes roll up into her head.

               RETURN TO SCENE

               Julia collapses behind her checkout station.

               The cashier in the next aisle looks over in horror as Julia
               hits the floor and she immediately runs over to help.  She
               kneels down in front of Julia and then looks frantically
               around the store.

                                     CASHIER
                         Somebody call for help!


               INT. HOSPITAL - OLIVIA'S ROOM - DAY

               CLOSE ON BLINKING LIGHTS AND TUBES

               CLOSE ON MEDICAL GEAR

               The MEDICAL GEAR pumps and rotates, blinks and WHIRS.

               CLOSE ON TUBES

               The tubes are hooked into Olivia's nose and around her face.
                Her eyes are closed and her mouth is slightly ajar.

               Suddenly, the door to the room bursts open and a noticeably
               older Kevin Rose enters the room, his wife in hand.  Kevin's
               grey hair is thinning and he looks gaunt.  His once youthful
               face is now creased from years of stress. Julia is sobbing
               even before she sees her daughter.

               Julia breaks free of Kevin and runs toward her daughter's
               bed.

               Julia is crying hysterically, holding Olivia in her arms.  A
               NURSE approaches to readjust the medical equipment that
               Julia has disrupted.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (sobbing)
                         Oh, baby.  Baby, you're... who did
                         this... oh God... my baby girl.

               Kevin walks over to his wife and kneels down, putting his
               arm around her.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                               (to the Nurse)
                         Can she hear us?

                                     NURSE
                         No, not likely, she's been out
                         cold for a few hours now.  She's a
                         little weak, I'm afraid.  Looks
                         like she hasn't been eating a
                         whole lot.  I have to say though,
                         all things considered, she's in
                         really good shape.  No serious
                         health issues from what we've seen
                         so far.

               Julia turns to the nurse, her eyes puffy and pink.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Who did this?

                                     NURSE
                         I'm sorry, I don't know much about
                         the investigation.  The police are
                         here, though.  They wanted to
                         brief you as soon as possible.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Is there anything we can do,
                         anything at all?

                                     NURSE
                         Nothing just yet, Mr. Rose,
                         someone will be in to see you
                         shortly.  From what I've been
                         told, all the preliminaries were
                         dealt with when she arrived. She
                         was given a rape kit and scrubbed
                         for DNA.  I don't know the
                         specifics I'm afraid.

               Julia looks at the nurse, horrified.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         A rape kit?

               Kevin stares at the floor with a somber look.

                                     NURSE
                         I'll let the detectives know
                         you've arrived.

               The nurse leaves the room.

               Julia cradles Olivia in her arms.


               INT. HOSPITAL - OFFICE - LATER

               Two detectives in police uniforms are sitting at a desk
               staring forward, solemnly.  The man on the left is RICHARD
               MATTHEWS, an officer in his forties with broad shoulders, a
               thick moustache and thinning, grey hair.  The man on the
               right is SEAN O'BRIEN.  A younger man than his partner, Sean
               is in his mid-thirties, thin, with a head full of orange
               hair.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         First off, Mrs. Rose, and Mr.
                         Rose, I... we both wanted to say
                         just how happy we are for you
                         folks.  It's truly a miracle.

               Julia and her husband are seated across from the officers,
               staring at the desk in front of them.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (calmly)
                         I want to know who did this.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         We're making that a priority, Mrs.
                         Rose.  Unfortunately, the crime
                         scene itself gives us little to go
                         on, other than the general area in
                         which she might have been held.
                         Rest assured though, processes are
                         being followed and in due time,
                         we'll have an answer for you.

               Julia looks up at Detective O'Brien, making eye contact with
               him.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         In due time?  What does that mean?
                          He's still out there!  The
                         monster that did this to my baby
                         girl is still out there, God only
                         knows what --

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Ma'am... Julia.  I'm a father
                         myself.  I've got a four year old
                         and an eight year old at home. One
                         boy, one girl.  I can't even
                         imagine how I would feel if I was
                         in your position. One thing that I
                         would know for sure, though, is
                         that my department would be doing
                         everything they could do bring
                         those responsible to justice.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         You've had eight years to bring
                         him to justice.  Eight years, and
                         what kind of evidence did you get?
                          Nothing!  That's what.  Not a
                         single lead. So excuse me,
                         detective, if I have very little
                         faith in your department.

               Kevin puts his hand on his wife's shoulder.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Julia, please --

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         No, Kevin, NO!  Don't turn this
                         around on me.  I know you feel the
                         exact same way.

               Julia turns to the officers.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         You find the person that did this
                         and you do it soon, or I will. And
                         so help me God, I'll make him beg
                         for mercy before I'm finished.

               The officers nod in understanding.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         We'll keep you posted, ma'am. Sir.


               INT. HOSPITAL - OLIVIA'S ROOM - LATER

               A nurse is tending to Olivia, checking her status and taking
               her blood pressure.  When she's done, she brushes Olivia's
               hair back from her face and stares at her with a smile.

               The CREAK of a DOOR.  The nurse turns to look.

               Elena is staring at Olivia, cautiously.  She looks like a
               healthier version of her sister.  She glances from Olivia,
               to the Nurse, and then back to Olivia.

                                     NURSE
                         It's OK, sweetie.  She's sleeping
                         right now, but you can come in.

               Elena inches closer to Olivia, a look of trepidation on her
               face.

               Suddenly Olivia opens her eyes.  She locks eyes with her
               sister.

               Elena chokes back her tears and runs over to her sister,
               wrapping her in a huge hug.

               There's a long silence where no one speaks.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         I thought you were gone.

               Olivia gives her sister a weak smile.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               EXT. ROSE HOME - EVENING

               News vans and reporters are swarming the cul-de-sac that
               Olivia's family calls home.

               A news reporter is standing in the street with the Rose home
               in the background, fixing her hair. A hand comes INTO FRAME
               from the right and counts down from three.

                                     NEWS REPORTER
                               (speaking to
                               camera)
                         It's now been one week since
                         Olivia Rose, a girl that many
                         thought would quite simply never
                         be found, was discovered in a
                         residential area of Scottsdale.
                         Behind me is the Rose family home,
                         where Olivia is now resting after
                         being released from hospital care.
                          So far, information on this story
                         has been very scarce, but we do
                         hope to have an exclusive
                         interview with a member of the
                         immediate family in the very near
                         future.


               INT. ROSE HOME - CONTINUOUS

               KITCHEN

               The family, minus Olivia, are gathered around the kitchen
               table looking tired but happy.

               Kevin is flipping through channels on the living room TV.
               Nearly every single channel is talking about Olivia.

               Kevin shakes his head in disbelief.

               The DOORBELL RINGS.

               FRONT DOOR

               Kevin walks towards the door and peers out the window. He
               spots several news reporters with microphones at the ready.

               Kevin opens the door a crack.

               All of the reporters speak at once.  Nothing specific can be
               clearly heard, just noise.

               As soon as Kevin opens his mouth to speak, they all go
               silent.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Please, folks, my family needs
                         some space.  We've been
                         interviewed more times than I can
                         count today.  My daughter needs
                         time to recover from this, and we
                         all just need time to adjust.
                         Thanks.

               The noise starts up again as microphones are shoved towards
               Kevin.  He closes the door on the noise.

               KITCHEN

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Is everything OK?

               Kevin has his head in his hands, rubbing his eyes.  He puts
               his hands back down at his side and walks towards the
               kitchen, forcing a smile.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Everything's fine.  Just more
                         reporters.

               Suddenly the TV grabs the family's attention.

               CLOSE ON TV

                                     OLD LADY
                         Well, like I said, I was just
                         watching my stories and minding my
                         own business when I happened to
                         look outside and see someone just
                         lying there on the sidewalk. Now,
                         I know sometimes the kids in this
                         neighbourhood, they like to play
                         around and do all sorts of strange
                         things.  I thought maybe she
                         was... what's the term...
                         planking?   I think that's what my
                         grandson calls it.  She was lying
                         so still, though.  I rushed out
                         and found this girl, this...
                         Olivia, she was just lying there
                         and she looked just awful, like
                         she hadn't had a good meal in
                         weeks.  So that's when I called
                         9-1-1.

                                     NEWS REPORTER
                               (O.S.)
                         And had you ever heard of Olivia
                         Rose before?

                                     OLD LADY
                         You know, the name... the name was
                         familiar to me.  It was familiar.
                         It's been so long though, my
                         goodness, I never thought they
                         would find her... alive.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Julia turns the TV off.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I'm sorry, I just... I can't watch
                         any more.

               A beat.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         How come she hasn't spoken yet,
                         dad?

               Kevin looks at his daughter with a sorrowful look.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         She's been through an unbelievable
                         ordeal, sweetie. We're gonna get
                         her the best help, though.  I've
                         already spoken to a few
                         therapists.  Don't worry, she'll
                         come around.

               The DOORBELL RINGS again and Kevin walks over to answer it.

               FRONT DOOR

               A young man is standing at the doorstep, hands in his
               pockets.  The throng of reporters stand behind him.  As soon
               as the door is opened, they begin clamouring for an
               interview.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Alex, come on in, son.

               ALEX KAPLAN slips inside.  Alex is now 16 years old and
               nearly as tall as Kevin.  He's slimmer than he was as a
               child, and wears glasses.  Thin wisps of facial hair
               struggle to make their way across his chin and cheeks.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         It's a circus out there.

               Kevin shakes his head.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         It's unbelievable.  I think
                         they're gonna start pitching tents
                         soon.

               A beat.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         How is she?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         She's good.  It's going to take
                         some time, but... she's doing
                         well.  She's up in her room
                         resting right now.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Oh, hey... I should come back
                         later then, I don't wanna --

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         No, no.  I think it would be good
                         for her to see you.  Come on in.

               Julia looks around the corner to see who it is.  When she
               realizes it's Alex, she scurries over and wraps him in a
               huge hug, her red, puffy, tear-streaked face pressed against
               his.

               Julia takes a step back and looks him over.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         You got so big!

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I guess so.  It's been a long
                         time, Mrs. Rose.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         It really has.

               A beat.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         You go ahead son.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Still the room at the end of the
                         hall?

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Exactly as she left it.

               Alex moves to the stairs and spots Elena sitting at the
               table.  He waves at her and she waves back with a friendly
               smile.

               SECOND FLOOR HALLWAY

               Alex makes his way up the dark staircase and towards the end
               of the hall.  There's a quiet MOANING NOISE coming from
               Olivia's room.

               Alex approaches the door and knocks lightly on it.  He gets
               no response.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Liv?

               Silence.

               OLIVIA'S BEDROOM

               Alex pushes the door open lightly and finds Olivia curled up
               on the floor in the corner of the dark room in the fetal
               position, making low, guttural noises as she rocks slowly
               back and forth.

               Alex stares at her in amazement for several moments.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Hey, Liv.

               He stares at Olivia as she rocks back and forth.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                               (quietly)
                         Do you remember me?

               Alex moves slowly across the room to Olivia.  He sits down
               on the edge of the bed and stares at her, and then looks
               around the room.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         It's just like I remember it.

               Olivia moans to herself and continues rocking back and
               forth.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         This is... I can't believe...

               Alex chokes back tears.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I was really messed up, you know?
                         For a long time, Liv.  Ever since
                         you...

               Olivia stops rocking, but continues staring at the floor.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I knew you'd come home.

               Alex shoves himself lightly off the edge of the bed and
               moves closer to Olivia.  He extends his arm out towards her
               and touches her shoulder very lightly.

               OLIVIA'S POV

               Out of the shadows of her bedroom, The Stranger reaches out
               towards Olivia's face.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia suddenly becomes extremely agitated.  She screams
               loudly and lashes out at Alex, clawing at his cheek and
               knocking him over.  She curls up into a protective ball,
               covering her face.

               Olivia's parents run into the room to find Alex on his side
               with deep scratches on his face and Olivia cowering in the
               corner.

               Julia runs back down the hallway after seeing Alex's face
               and Kevin strides into the room.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Oh my God.  Alex, I'm sorry, son.

               Alex gets to his feet and makes eye contact with Kevin. They
               share a sorrowful look.  Alex nods and walks towards the
               door.  Kevin puts his hand on Alex's shoulder as Alex walks
               by.

               As Alex walks into the hallway, Julia puts a towel to his
               face to clean up the blood.

               Olivia is moaning again, rubbing her wrists as she rocks
               back and forth.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Liv, sweetie?  Do you want to try
                         to get some rest now?  Do you want
                         me to help you into bed?

               No response other than more moaning.

               Julia starts crying and Kevin walks over to her and holds
               her.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                               (to Olivia)
                         Try to get some rest, sweetie.
                         I'll check in on you later.

               Kevin and Julia walk out of the room, Kevin with his arm
               around his wife.

               Once she's alone, the moaning gets louder, but she never
               stops staring at the floor.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. ROSE HOME - ESTABLISHING SHOT - MORNING

               The moon sinks behind the house, replaced shortly by the
               sun, which rises high into the sky and over the Rose Home,
               showing the passage of time.


               INT. ROSE HOME - OLIVIA'S BEDROOM - DAY

               The bedroom door is pushed open.  Olivia is curled up in the
               corner of the room.  Julia stares longingly at her daughter.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Liv, sweetie.  It's almost two.
                         Would you like to come downstairs
                         with me? There's a visitor here to
                         see you.

               No response.

               Julia slowly walks away.  MUFFLED VOICES can be heard in the
               hallway and then Detective Matthews steps INTO FRAME.  Julia
               hands him a laptop computer with stickers plastered all over
               the lid, presumably belonging to Elena.  He mouths 'thank
               you' and enters Olivia's room.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Hello, Olivia.

               Olivia glances at the man and then continues staring at the
               floor.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         I've been looking forward to
                         meeting you for many years.  I
                         hoped we could have met sooner.
                         I'm so sorry, I...
                         (a beat)
                         I'm glad you're home.

               Matthews waits for a reaction but gets nothing in return. He
               walks over to where Olivia is sitting and sits down next to
               her on the floor.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         I was hoping that maybe we could
                         have a chat.  Would that be OK
                         with you?

               No reaction.

               Matthews glances over at Julia with a smile.

               Olivia glances at Matthews, but doesn't respond.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         No one should ever have to go
                         through what you've did, Olivia.
                         None of it, I mean NONE of it was
                         your fault.  It was a horrible
                         thing that that man did.  I
                         promise you, we're going to find
                         him for you.  He can't hide
                         forever, it's only a matter of
                         time now.  It was a man, wasn't
                         it?

               Olivia is staring at the floor in silence.

               Matthews looks up at Julia again and nods his head.  Julia
               bites her lip and leaves the room.

               Matthews opens the laptop, types a few words and turns the
               laptop around to face Olivia.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         I'm going to show you some faces
                         now.  I know this is hard, but the
                         sooner we do this, the better
                         chance we have of finding him.  Or
                         her.  Can you nod your head for me
                         if you understand?

               Olivia remains motionless.

               Ignoring Olivia's lack of response, Matthews moves the
               laptop closer to Olivia.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Now you just tell me if anyone
                         here looks familiar, OK?  Even if
                         you're not sure, don't be shy.

               Matthews waits several moments until Olivia looks at the
               screen, and then begins to slowly scroll through the list of
               names.

               CLOSE ON LAPTOP

               Beside each name is a large, clear picture of a man.  The
               names read: Nathan Fillmore, Dillan Miller, Enrique Sanchez,
               Fernando Oliver, Terry Richardson...

               RETURN TO SCENE

               Olivia's eyes are fixed on the screen.  Matthews glances
               back and forth between the screen and Olivia, hoping for a
               reaction.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Do you recognize anyone?  Anyone
                         at all?

               Olivia shakes her head.

               Matthews keeps scrolling through the images.

               CLOSE ON LAPTOP

               The descriptions next to the names describe the reason for
               their arrest.  Sexual contact with a minor,  sodomy and rape
               are among the terms.

               RETURN TO SCENE

               When he reaches the bottom of the list, he glances back at
               Olivia. Olivia looks away and shakes her head again.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         OK.  That's fine.  You did well,
                         Olivia, thank you very much.  This
                         is a good start. When you feel up
                         to talking, we can narrow things
                         down a bit more.

               A beat.

               Matthews stands up with the laptop in hand.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Welcome home, Olivia.

               Matthews places the laptop on the dresser next to the door
               and then walks out of the room, glancing back at Olivia one
               last time before closing the door behind him.

               Olivia rocks back and forth, holding her wrist.

               CLOSE ON OLIVIA'S WRIST

               It's raw and red.  She rubs it gently.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. ROSE HOME - ESTABLISHING SHOT - EVENING

               The full moon rises in the night sky, illuminating the Rose
               home in a white glow.


               INT. ROSE HOME - OLIVIA'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS

               Olivia is sitting motionless on the floor.  She rubs her
               wrist and glances up.  Her sister's laptop is sitting on the
               dresser where Matthews left it.

               Olivia slowly stands up and steadies herself against the
               wall. Moving very carefully, she makes her way across the
               bedroom to the dresser.  She takes the laptop and crosses
               back to her spot on the floor.

               Olivia opens the lid of the laptop.  Bright light
               illuminates her face.

               CLOSE ON LAPTOP

               The sex offender registry is still open in the web browser.

               BACK TO SCENE

               She hits the down key, scanning the faces one by one.  A
               look of anger and disgust is on her face as she makes her
               way down the list. When she reaches the end of the list, she
               scrolls back up to the top and looks through them all again,
               frantically scanning the pictures, squinting her eyes,
               trying desperately to find someone familiar.

               CLOSE ON LAPTOP

               The pictures flash across the screen.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Tears well up in her eyes as she reaches the end of the list
               a second time.  A shrill cry escapes her lips and she covers
               her face.  Olivia closes the laptop lid and allows herself a
               moment to cry, her face covered to muffle the noise.

               After a moment of silence, she slowly opens the lid again.
               She scrolls back to the top of the page.

               CLOSE ON LAPTOP

               The first name on the list is Nathan Fillmore.  She clicks
               on his name and his profile pops up on the screen.  The
               report states that he was convicted of child molestation
               five years ago.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia studies his picture carefully.  After a moment, she
               grabs a pen her side table and looks for a piece of paper to
               write on.  Not finding any, she stands up and makes her way
               across the room to her dresser, opening each drawer.  In the
               bottom drawer she finds a stack of 'missing' posters with
               her face on them. She stares at them for a moment and then
               grabs one.

               CLOSE ON PAPER

               Olivia writes down "Nathan Fillmore" and beside the name,
               "49 Sycamore Ave".

               Other names and addresses are quickly scrawled all the way
               down to the bottom of the page.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Once all of the names are on the list, she puts it on her
               side table, makes her way across the floor and puts the
               laptop back on the dresser.

               CLOSE ON LIST

               The final name on the list isn't a name at all.  Beside the
               number 19 is a row of question marks.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. ROSE HOME - OLIVIA'S BEDROOM - MORNING

               Julia opens Olivia's bedroom door the next morning to find
               her daughter asleep in her bed.

               A shocked look washes over Julia's face.  After several
               moments of watching her daughter sleep peacefully in her own
               bed, she closes the DOOR and it CREAKS.  Olivia stirs.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I'm sorry sweetheart, I didn't
                         mean to wake you, I just... it's
                         good to see you sleeping in your
                         bed again.

               Olivia doesn't look at her mother

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I need to go out for a little bit,
                         but I should be back in a few
                         hours, sweetie.

               Julia stares at her daughter for a moment longer, before
               closing the door.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Ellie's downstairs if you need
                         her...

               Olivia is staring wide-eyed out the window.  The sky is blue
               and the sun is shining.

               After several moments, she glances over at the door.  Her
               mother is gone.  She then gets out of bed and walks quietly
               to her dresser.  She puts on a pair of jeans and a t-shirt.

               Olivia grabs the list from the side table, folds it in four,
               and shoves it in her pocket.

               Olivia walks over to the window and unlocks it.  Her mother
               is down below in the driveway, walking through a crowd of
               reporters.  She gets in her car and drives off.  Olivia
               lifts up the WINDOW slowly, trying not to make a sound.  It
               CREAKS and GROANS despite her efforts.


               EXT. ROSE HOME - CONTINUOUS

               ROOFTOP

               Olivia carefully steps outside onto the roof.  She walks
               carefully, her back pressed up against the house, out of
               sight of the crowd below, until she finds a strong tree
               branch that touches the side of the house.

               She very carefully grabs hold of the branch and lowers
               herself down, branch by branch, until her feet are on the
               grass.

               SIDE YARD/BACKYARD

               Olivia peers around the corner of the house.  Reporters are
               still lined up and down the cul-de-sac.

               Olivia walks down the side yard, pushes open the gate to the
               backyard and walks into the garden shed.  She takes a wooden
               ladder and props it up against the fence to her neighbour's
               yard.

               She climbs the ladder, peers over the fence to make sure no
               one's watching, and then jumps down.

               NEIGHBOUR'S FRONT LAWN

               Olivia cuts across several front lawns.  News trucks are
               lined up and down the street behind her.  She walks towards
               the CAMERA, OUT OF FRAME with a look of determination on her
               face.


               EXT. RESIDENTIAL NEIGHBOURHOOD - DAY

               Detective Matthews is standing on the front porch of a small
               residential home speaking with the home owner, MRS.
               DONOWITZ.  She is an elderly woman in her late seventies.

                                     MRS. DONOWITZ
                         It's just awful, isn't it?  Just
                         AWFUL.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Yes Ma'am, it certainly is.  We're
                         glad to see her back home safe and
                         sound.  You've lived here for how
                         long, Mrs...

               Matthews flips through the papers on the clipboard that he's
               holding.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Donowitz?

                                     MRS. DONOWITZ
                         Oh goodness, it must be... forty
                         years.  Is that right?  Let's see,
                         we moved in in 76... or was it 72?
                         I remember that goddamn crook
                         resigned right after we moved in
                         here...

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         That would have been 1974, Ma'am.

                                     MRS. DONOWITZ
                         Yes.  Yes, that makes sense.  Such
                         an awful thing to happen.  Have
                         you found the person that did this
                         yet?

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Well, no ma'am, that's why I'm
                         here.  Have you ever seen anything
                         suspicious happening in this
                         neighbourhood?  What I mean by
                         that is people coming and going at
                         late hours of the night, or
                         strange noises coming from one of
                         the houses on the street. Anything
                         like that?

               A TEA KETTLE begins to SCREAM inside the house.  Mrs.
               Donowitz looks over her shoulder, startled by the noise.

                                     MRS. DONOWITZ
                         Oh!  Oh dear me.  Would you excuse
                         me for just one moment, young man?

               Matthew nods, looking frustrated.

               Mrs. Donowitz hobbles away and Matthews looks around
               impatiently, TAPPING his PEN on the clipboard.

               Across the street, Detective O'Brien is walking down the
               driveway of one home and up the driveway of the next.

               O'Brien looks at the clipboard in front of him as he walks
               up the stairs to the house.

               CLOSE ON CLIPBOARD

               The name reads "Jaime Mendes".

               RETURN TO SCENE

               He rings the doorbell and waits for a response.

               The CAMERA FOCUSES on the window and a familiar face comes
               INO FOCUS.  The face disappears and a moment later, the door
               swings open.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Mr. Mendes, how are you doing this
                         afternoon?

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Good.  I'm good.  How are you?

               Jaime smiles awkwardly.

               O'Brien raises an eyebrow at Jaime.  Jaime's hair is a mess
               and his eyes are bloodshot.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Mr. Mendes, we're investigating a
                         child abduction in the
                         neighbourhood.  Are you aware that
                         a missing girl was found a few
                         blocks from here on Thursday?

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Yes... of course, yes, it's all
                         over the news, it's just... such a
                         tragedy.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         I couldn't agree more.  Which is
                         why we're going door to door here,
                         trying to get an understanding of
                         anything suspicious going on in
                         the neighbourhood.  Have you seen
                         or heard anything in the last
                         little while?  Are there any
                         neighbours that don't get out
                         much?  Anything out of the
                         ordinary at all.

               Jaime pretends to think and shakes his head.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         No... not that I can think of.
                         Sorry.

               O'Brien studies Jaime's face carefully.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Is everything all right, sir?  You
                         look a bit...

               Jaime rubs his face and eyes.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         It's been a rough week, with all
                         of this going on... I haven't
                         slept a whole lot.  I probably
                         look like death, don't I?

               Detective O'Brien hands Jaime his card.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Try to get some sleep.  And if you
                         think of anything, anything at
                         all... don't hesitate to call that
                         number.

               Jaime nods and closes the door as O'Brien walks away.

               CLOSE ON CLIPBOARD

               O'Brien crosses off "Jaime Mendes" from his list of names.

               SQUAD CAR

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Anything?

               Matthews shakes his head.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Me either.  No one's seen or heard
                         anything.  You think the kid's
                         gonna talk soon?

               Matthews looks out the window at the houses that line the
               streets.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Where have you been hiding,
                         Olivia?

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. NATHAN'S HOUSE - DAY

               Olivia approaches a small red brick house in a suburban
               neighbourhood.

               For a moment she hesitates, standing in front of the house,
               unsure of how to proceed.  She looks around, nervously.

               Across the street, an old man is bent over, gardening.  He
               doesn't seem to notice her.

               She takes a deep breath and walks up to the front door of
               the house.  She RINGS the DOORBELL.

               No answer.

               She RINGS it again.

               Again, no answer.

               She peers in the front window.  A couch and a small TV can
               be seen.  Nothing out of the ordinary.

               She walks around the side of the house, peering in windows
               as she goes.  There is no car in the driveway.

               There's a small rock garden at the back of the house.  She
               takes a large rock and walks up to the back door.  She TAPS
               lightly at the GLASS, trying to break it quietly.  Finally,
               it SHATTERS, making a noise that's louder than she expected.
               She holds her breath and looks around. None of the
               neighbours are around to notice.

               Carefully, she reaches inside and unlocks the door.


               INT. NATHAN'S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS

               LIVING ROOM

               Olivia walks casually around the living room.  She glances
               at a framed photo of two men fishing.

               CLOSE ON FRAMED PHOTO

               One of the men in the photo is in his mid-30s with a thin
               build, wearing glasses and a baseball cap.  His appearance
               matches that of Nathan Fillmore.  The other is much older,
               probably the man's father.

               KITCHEN

               Olivia walks into the kitchen and glances around, focusing
               her attention at something OUT OF FRAME.

               CLOSE ON KNIFE BLOCK


               INT. NATHAN'S CAR - MOMENTS LATER

               The song "Your Time Is Gonna Come" by Led Zeppelin is
               playing on the radio.

               NATHAN FILMORE, a dweeby-looking man in his mid-thirties is
               tapping his hands on the dashboard of his car as he drives
               down a busy city street.

               The car turns down a side street into a quiet suburban
               neighbourhood.

                                     NATHAN FILMORE
                               (singing quietly
                               along to the song)
                         "You'll look for me but baby, I'll
                         be gone.
                         This is all I gotta say to you
                         woman:
                         Your time is gonna come..."

               Nathan makes a series of turns and pulls into his driveway.


               EXT. NATHAN'S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS

               Nathan turns off the ignition, gets out of the car and opens
               the trunk to grab three bags of groceries.  He SLAMS the
               TRUNK closed and walks up to the front door of his home,
               still humming the song.

               He fumbles with the keys but eventually finds the right one.
                Nathan opens the door and enters his house.


               INT. NATHAN'S HOME - CONTINUOUS

               KITCHEN

               Nathan begins unloading groceries, still humming the song.

               The CAMERA PANS past him, down the length of the kitchen and
               into the hallway, right through a slatted closet door.
               Olivia is staring through the slats, breathing heavily.

               Nathan produces a bag of coffee beans from the grocery bag.
               He opens it and takes a big whiff.

                                     NATHAN FILMORE
                         Mmm.

               Nathan pours some beans into a coffee maker that's sitting
               on the counter.  With the press of a button, the MACHINE
               starts GRINDING the beans, making an awfully loud noise.

               INSIDE CLOSET - OLIVIA'S POV

               Nathan takes off his jacket and moves quickly to the very
               closet that Olivia is hiding in.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Nathan flings open the closet doors and Olivia presses
               herself against the side of the closet wall.  Nathan puts
               his jacket on a hanger and closes the door.

               INSIDE CLOSET

               Olivia lets out a heavy sigh of relief.  As she moves back
               into position, the KNIFE gets stuck on a piece of cloth and
               it releases itself from her grip, CLATTERING to the floor.

               KITCHEN

               Nathan stops dead in his tracks and listens for the source
               of the noise.

               INSIDE CLOSET

               Olivia has a pained look on her face as she bends down to
               pick the knife up off the floor.

               KITCHEN

               Nathan shrugs and continues putting the groceries away.

               HALLWAY

               As the BEANS GRIND away, Olivia slowly opens the closet door
               and moves toward the kitchen, gripping the knife in her hand
               tightly.

               KITCHEN

               Nathan is pulling groceries out of a plastic bag.  He pauses
               to read the back of a cereal box.

               Suddenly, the grinding noise stops.  Olivia stops dead in
               her tracks, holding her breath.

                                     NATHAN FILMORE
                         Aw, f**k.

               Nathan presses a button on the COFFEE MAKER, but nothing
               happens.  He unplugs it and plugs it back in.  He presses
               the button again, and the GRINDING NOISE continues.

               Olivia takes a deep breath and continues inching forward.
               She's right behind him with the knife raised.  Suddenly,
               Nathan pauses.

               NATHAN'S POV

               Olivia's reflection is in the coffee pot.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Nathan turns around just in time to dodge the incoming
               knife.  Olivia stumbles forward and lunges into the counter.

                                     NATHAN FILMORE
                         What the f**k?!

               Nathan lunges toward Olivia while her back is still to him
               and grabs hold of the arm still grasping the knife.  He
               slams it down against the counter.

               Olivia screams out in pain and drops the KNIFE.  It CLATTERS
               onto the countertop.

               Olivia grabs the nearest item - a bag of coffee beans - with
               her undamaged arm and swings it at his face.  He stumbles
               backwards, beans flying everywhere across the kitchen.

               Olivia lunges at him, knocking him down onto the floor. She
               punches him in the face, over and over, as hard as she can.
               The man is dazed and can barely react.

               Olivia begins to strangle him, but the man regains his
               composure and smacks her in the side of the head, sending
               her flying across the room.  She SLAMS into the COUNTER and
               the KNIFE falls from above, CLATTERING to the tiled floor
               between her legs.

               Nathan crawls forward for the knife, but Olivia kicks him in
               the face.  She grabs the knife and lunges forward.  A look
               of fright comes into Nathan's eyes and he retreats into the
               hallway.

               HALLWAY

               Olivia follows after him, slowly and cautiously.  The
               hallway is empty.  The SOUND of the COFFEE GRINDER drowns
               out any indication of where he might be hiding.

               Olivia is trembling as she stares down the hallway inching
               her way down.  Her hand is shaking as she grips the knife
               tightly.

               As she approaches a half-closed door on her left, she slowly
               extends her hand and pushes it open.  There is a bed and a
               dresser inside, but it's otherwise empty.

               Suddenly, the grinding noise stops and the COFFEE MAKER
               makes a loud DING. Nathan comes flying out of the room to
               her right, swinging a baseball bat.

               Olivia puts her hands over her head and drops to the floor,
               dropping the knife in the process.  Nathan's BASEBALL BAT
               SMASHES into the wall above her, making a sizeable dent in
               the wall.  Olivia grabs the knife again and drives it into
               Nathan's foot.

               He drops to the floor, howling in pain.

               Olivia grabs the BAT and throws it down the hallway.  It
               CLATTERS against the hardwood floor and rolls to a stop near
               the kitchen.

               Olivia is breathing heavily.  She removes the knife from the
               man's foot.  She crawls up over top of him and raises the
               knife above her head.  She hesitates, a look of
               adrenaline-fueled madness in her eyes.

               The man suddenly forgets the pain in his foot and grabs
               Olivia by the leg.  She falls to the floor and the man is
               suddenly on top of her.  He prepares to swing a big meaty
               fist at her face when suddenly, all the wind is knocked from
               his lungs.

               Nathan's eyes go wide and he lets out a weak gasp.

               He falls on top of Olivia, his body limp and lifeless.

               Olivia rolls out from underneath the man, the knife
               protruding from his chest.  She props herself up against the
               wall across from him.  It only takes a moment before she
               loses consciousness.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. DREAM SEQUENCE - NEIGHBOURHOOD STREET - AFTERNOON

               The rain is coming down hard.  Olivia is standing on the
               sidewalk.  She looks around confused.  THUNDER RUMBLES in
               the distance.  Suddenly, her captor's car rounds the corner,
               WHEELS SCREECHING.

               Olivia lets out a gasp and runs forward, only to find that
               her legs are tied together with a plastic zip tie.  She hits
               the pavement hard.  A gash appears on her forehead from
               where she hit the ground and blood gushes out, quickly
               washed away by the rain.

               Olivia grunts, trying to get up.  She looks behind her and a
               shadow approaches through the rain.  She gets to her knees
               but falls again.

               She glances behind her once again, a terrified look in her
               eyes.  The shadow approaches and grabs her by the hair,
               jerking her head back violently.


               INT. NATHAN'S HOUSE - DAY

               HALLWAY

               Olivia screams as she wakes from her dream, lunging forward
               with the knife already in her hand.  She plunges it deep
               into the man lying on the floor in front of her.

               The man doesn't react.  He's long since expired.  Olivia
               suddenly realizes where she is and what she's done.  Blood
               is pooled all over the hardwood floor, and she's been lying
               in it herself.  Her shirt and pants are both stained dark
               red.

               SHOWER

               OVERHEAD SHOT of Olivia showering off the blood.  She
               squeezes her hair and a large amount of blood pours down to
               the bottom of the tub.

               CLOSE ON DRAIN

               The blood swirls down the slightly clogged drain in a
               clockwise motion, resembling a blood-red tornado.

               BEDROOM

               Olivia opens a closet door to find a large array of shirts
               and jeans to choose from.

               HALLWAY

               Now fully dressed in jeans and a t-shirt a few sizes too
               large, Olivia, bags up her clothes, as well as the knife in
               a large black garbage bag.

               She stares at the man lying motionless on the floor before
               walking away.


               EXT. DOWNTOWN SCOTTSDALE - LATER

               Olivia walks past a restaurant.  In the alley beside it is a
               large dumpster.  She casually walks over to it and throws
               the bag inside of it.


               INT. CITY BUS - LATER

               Olivia stares out the window of the bus.  In the reflection,
               she sees her face on a newspaper.  She turns around to see a
               middle-aged man reading the paper.  On the page that she can
               see, the headline reads "Kidnapping victim is in recovery".

               The man reading the paper flips to the next page.  He
               glances at Olivia.  Olivia looks away and continues staring
               out the window.  She studies her reflection and a small
               smile creeps onto her lips.


               EXT. ROSE HOME - DAY

               Two news vans still line the curb next to the Rose home.
               Julia pulls up to the house.  She grabs the bag of groceries
               next to her, opens her door and exits the car.  A news
               reporter eagerly runs over to her.

                                     NEWS REPORTER
                         Mrs. Rose, how is Olivia doing?

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Not right now, thank you.

               Julia starts walking towards her front door.

                                     NEWS REPORTER
                         When do you think we'll get a
                         statement from her?

               Julia stops in her tracks and stares forward.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (quietly)
                         I don't know.


               INT. ROSE HOME - MOMENTS LATER

               OLIVIA'S BEDROOM

               Julia opens the door to Olivia's room and peers in.  She has
               the brown paper bag full of groceries in one arm.  She
               stares at her daughter as she lies sleeping.

               She begins to close the door when she hears something that
               she hasn't heard in eight long years...

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Mom?

               Julia's jaw drops open.  She drops the GROCERIES on the
               floor with a loud THUNK and runs over to her daughter.

               Olivia rolls over and looks her mother in the eye.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (sobbing)
                         Hi, sweetie.

               Julia hugs her daughter and she hugs her back.

               FRONT DOOR

               Elena and Kevin are just coming in the door, when her mother
               and Olivia walk downstairs together.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Liv?!

               Olivia smiles at her sister and her father.

               Elena and her father rush over and hug her, and Julia joins
               in.  The four of them embrace in the hallway.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Is anyone else really hungry?

               KITCHEN

               Olivia is hungrily eating a slice of pizza while the other
               three stare at her in amazement.

               Kevin smiles as he watches Olivia eat.  He glances at his
               wife and they share a smile between them.

               Olivia smiles with a mouth full of pizza.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         Do you think Olivia's going to be
                         able to come back to school now?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         It's too soon to be thinking about
                         that, hun.  Someday, though.  I
                         promise.

               Elena gets up from the table and walks over to Olivia,
               hugging her from behind.

                                     ELENA ROSE
                         I'm glad you're feeling better.

               Elena walks to the kitchen sink to wash the dishes.

               Olivia finishes her slice of pizza and washes it down with a
               can of pop.  She lets out a quiet burp.

               A beat.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I need to talk to the police.
                         Tonight.

               Julia and Kevin look surprised.  They exchange a glance.

               Julia nods her head.

               Kevin gets up and grabs the phone.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Uh...Detective Matthews please.

               Olivia looks at her Mom with a hesitant smile.

               Julia smiles back, tears in her eyes.


               INT. ROSE HOME - LIVING ROOM - EVENING

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No, no facial hair.  He was always
                         clean-shaven.  He always had
                         really short hair, too.  Like he
                         got a haircut every week.  Short,
                         brown hair.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         OK, Olivia, I think that gives us
                         a really good place to start. It's
                         good to see you're doing well,
                         sweetie.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         We're truly blessed.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         There's actually something else we
                         wanted to discuss with you.  The
                         DNA tests have so far been...
                         inconclusive.  Which is puzzling
                         to say the least. Olivia, this
                         might be difficult to talk
                         about...

               O'Brien glances at Julia and then Elena, in turn. Julia
               takes the meaning and nods.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Ellie, why don't you go work on
                         your homework, OK?

               Elena nods and smiles worryingly at her sister as she
               leaves.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Olivia, you don't have to answer
                         this just yet if you don't feel
                         comfortable.  For the sake of our
                         investigation, though, it would
                         help us tremendously.  Did he
                         ever... hurt you?  In any way?

               Olivia is staring at the floor, her hands between her knees.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Did he ever touch you, or... or,
                         make you do anything that you --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         He never laid a finger on me.

               The officers look at her with a puzzled look on their face.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I know you probably think I'm
                         lying, but it's the truth.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                               (quietly to
                               O'Brien)
                         Emotional relationship, seems
                         like.  Family member or close
                         friend?

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                               (nodding)
                         Could be...

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         You think this could be someone we
                         know?!

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         It's hard to say, Mrs. Rose.  I
                         know you've been asked these same
                         questions over and over for years,
                         but is there anyone, anyone at all
                         that you know that would be
                         capable of this?  I believe Olivia
                         when she says that she wasn't
                         harmed.  There's no sign of trauma
                         at all.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         No.  No, there's no one.  No one
                         we know would ever do something
                         like this.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         You know, it's sometimes the
                         person you least suspect,
                         sometimes it's just --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         He called me Rachel.

               Matthews begins writing feverishly on his note pad.  O'Brien
               stares in silence.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Rachel?

               Olivia nods.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I don't understand, who's Rachel?

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         I promise you, ma'am,  that's
                         exactly what we're going to find
                         out.


               INT. ROSE HOME - OLIVIA'S BEDROOM - LATER

               Olivia is lying in bed staring at the ceiling.

               The CAMERA MOVES IN from the ceiling all the way down to her
               face.  A smile forms on her lips.

               Olivia reaches in her bedside table and pulls out her list
               of names.

               CLOSE ON LIST

               The first name is crossed out and reads "Nathan Fillmore".
               The second name reads "Dillan Miller".

               BACK TO SCENE

               She runs down the list of names, studying them carefully.

               CLOSE ON LIST

               Number 19.  A row of question marks.

               BACK TO SCENE

               The smile fades from Olivia's face.  She folds up the list
               of names and puts it under her pillow.  She lays her head
               back down on the pillow and stares wide-eyed out into the
               darkness of her bedroom.

                                                       CUT TO BLACK.


               EXT. CITY PARK - DAY

               ESTABLISHING.  Families are walking together and pushing
               their children around in strollers. Children are swinging
               happily on the swing set.

               Olivia and Alex are walking slowly together in the park,
               side by side.  Both have their hands in their pockets.  Alex
               has red marks on his face from when Olivia hit him.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         I'm glad you're feeling better.
                         You look better too.

               Olivia looks at Alex.  She focuses on the marks on his cheek
               and she looks away.

               She stares at something OUT OF FRAME.

               OLIVIA'S POV

               Children are swinging on a swing set, laughing and giggling
               to one another.

               OLIVIA

               is staring at them with a sad look in her eyes.

               Alex looks at the children on the swings and then back at
               Olivia.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Hey, come here.

               Alex walks out in front of Olivia and waves his hand at her
               to follow.

               Olivia hesitantly follows behind him.

               They approach the swing set.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Sit down.

               Olivia sits down and nervously holds onto the chains on
               either side.

               Alex gives her a light push.  The swing lurches forward.

               Olivia closes her eyes tightly.

               CLOSE ON OLIVIA'S FIST

               Her fist is closed tightly around the chain.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Alex pushes again, a little harder this time.

               CLOSE ON OLIVIA'S FACE

               Olivia opens her eyes.  She looks frightened but that look
               slowly fades.  A smile forms on her lips.

               OLIVIA'S POV

               The ground rushes up under her and turns into the bright
               blue sky above.  She comes back down, rushing past the green
               grass.  When she swings back up again, there's a shrouded
               figure standing in the trees just ahead.  The Stranger is
               staring at her.

               Olivia's eyes go wide and she lets go of the swing set.

               Alex runs over to her, dodging the swing, as Olivia tumbles
               onto the grass.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Liv, are you OK?  What's wrong?

               Olivia looks up into the forest.  What was The Stranger is
               revealed to be just another tree.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         It's nothing, I... I thought I saw
                         someone.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Who?

               Olivia glances at Alex.  The claw marks she left on his face
               are still very red and inflamed.  She glances away and
               stares at the ground.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'm sorry that I hit you.

               Alex touches his face lightly.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         It's fine.

               Alex notices that Olivia isn't looking at him.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Seriously, Liv.  I'm fine.  Who
                         did you see?

               a beat.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Him.

               Alex looks around frantically.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Him? What do you mean?  Where is
                         he?

               Olivia shakes her head and stares at the ground.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         He's everywhere I go.  In my
                         house, here in the park, my
                         nightmares...

               A beat.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Are they any closer to catching
                         this guy yet?  You told the cops
                         everything you knew, right?

               Olivia stands up and dusts herself off.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Nothing yet.

               Olivia puts her hands to her face, clearly upset.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't want to talk about this.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Yeah, no, that's cool.

               The two of them walk away from the swing set.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               EXT. CITY PARK - MOMENTS LATER

               Alex and Olivia are now well away from everyone else in the
               park.  They approach a wooden bench on their right.  Alex
               looks at Olivia and notices her knee is scraped up from the
               fall.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Hey, you scraped yourself up
                         pretty good.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         It doesn't hurt.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Sit down for a sec.

               The two of them take a seat on the bench.  Alex looks
               through his pocket and finds an unused napkin.

               Alex presses the napkin down onto Olivia's knee.  She takes
               it from him and holds it in place.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Thanks.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         Remember when we were kids and we
                         used to ride our bikes all up and
                         down this park?  Remember those
                         nature trails in the forest back
                         there?

               Olivia looks at him and shakes her head no.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         What about the Proctor brothers?
                         They used to think they owned this
                         place.  Remember, they used to
                         always try to get us to leave, but
                         they'd never do anything about it
                         because you were a girl?  If it
                         was me and Paul they would kick
                         our asses if we didn't get out of
                         here but when it was you and me
                         they'd leave us alone.

               Olivia has a sad look on her face as she listens to Alex
               talk.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                         You really don't remember, do you?

               Olivia shakes her head.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I feel like I should know what
                         you're talking about, but it all
                         just seems like... a dream I may
                         have had once.  Nothing real.

               A beat.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Alex... the girl you knew, whoever
                         you think she was... she's dead.
                         And she's never coming back.

               Alex and Olivia both stare at the ground awkwardly, neither
               one saying a word.


               INT. DILLAN'S HOUSE - DAY

               CLOSE ON DILLAN'S FACE

               Dillan's face is bruised and bloody.

               RETURN TO SCENE

               Outside, the rain has died down.  The sun is peeking through
               the clouds, casting rays of light through the window behind
               Olivia.

               Olivia is sitting on a chair in the middle of the kitchen.
               The crowbar is leaning up against it.  She reaches into her
               pocket and pulls out the list of names.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Do you have a pen?

               Dillan gives Olivia a weary glance.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Over on the counter.

               Olivia leans over the counter and looks around for the pen.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         By the toaster.  To your left.

               Olivia finds the pen and grabs it.  Something about it
               catches her attention and she does a double-take.

               CLOSE ON PEN

               "Miller Daycare - Where kids are #1!"

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia scoffs.  She lays the paper out flat on the counter
               and carefully strokes off Dillan's name.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         In my bedroom, under the bed...

               Dillan shifts uncomfortably.

               CLOSE ON DILLAN'S HANDS

               The zip ties are digging into his skin, which is reddening
               around them.

               RETURN TO SCENE

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Under the bed, there's a safe.
                         You're welcome to everything
                         that's inside.  Untie me and I'll
                         give you the combination.

               Olivia turns around and gives the man a confused look.

               Olivia throws the pen hard at Dillan.  It bounces off of his
               forehead.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         F**k!

               Olivia walks over to Dillan and kneels down in front of his
               face.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't think you've been paying
                         attention.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         I have a good idea!  if you let me
                         go, I'll hope you look for him.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No you won't.  I'll find him
                         myself and I'll kill him myself.
                         Just like I'm about to kill you.

               Olivia turns around with the CROWBAR in her hands and rushes
               over to the man, slamming the metal tool into his arm,
               producing a sickening CRUNCH.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                         Ahhhh!! F**k!  You broke my
                         f*****g arm!

               Dillan collapses onto his good arm and screams in pain.

               Olivia raises the crowbar above her head.

                                     DILLAN MILLER
                               (sobbing and
                               stuttering)
                         No, no I don't want to die,
                         please, I'll do anything.  I'm not
                         like him, I would never do what he
                         did!

               HALLWAY

               Blood suddenly sprays against the wall and Dillan's screams
               are silenced instantly.

               Dillan's body slumps into the hallway.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         How am I feeling?  Much better,
                         actually.


               INT. SAMANTHA'S OFFICE - EVENING

               Olivia is sitting in a large, bright office with credentials
               littering the walls around her.  Her face is scratched and
               red from her encounter with Dillan.

               Sitting across from her is her therapist, SAMANTHA LANDRY, a
               thin, neatly dressed woman in her mid-forties.

               Samantha stares at Olivia with a slight smile on her face.

               Olivia stares back, shifting uncomfortably in her seat.  She
               glances around the room.

               Samantha writes something on the piece of paper in front of
               her and continues the staring contest.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         How are you sleeping?  Any dreams
                         you'd like to share?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Fine.  I sleep just fine.

               Samantha smiles at Olivia.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         I'm glad we're finally getting the
                         chance to meet.  Your father
                         called me the day you were found.
                         Your family truly cares about you,
                         you're a very lucky girl.

               A beat.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         May I ask what happened?

               Olivia locks eyes with Samantha, looking genuinely confused.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What do you mean?

               Samantha motions to her own face and touches her forehead
               and cheeks.

               In realization, Olivia touches her own face lightly.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Oh.  I fell.

               Samantha stares at her, waiting for the rest of the story.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         My friend... he was pushing me on
                         the swing and I fell off.  I fell
                         into some twigs... that's all.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         I see.  It looks awfully painful.

               Olivia looks down at her feet.  There's a dark red streak of
               blood on her white socks.  She pulls her jeans down to cover
               the blood up.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         I think your father mentioned him.
                          Alex, is it?

               Olivia nods.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         How long have you known Alex?

               Olivia crosses her arms in front of her chest and shifts
               uncomfortably in her seat.

               Samantha jots something down quickly.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         Olivia, are you at all familiar
                         with the concept of writing
                         therapy?

               Olivia shakes her head.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         It's a form of expressive therapy,
                         I've used it before on several
                         patients and it's actually been a
                         very useful tool to help with
                         communication.  This sort of
                         therapy could be just what you
                         need.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What would I want to write about?

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         Anything that you want to get off
                         your chest.  Your experiences over
                         the last eight years would be --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Experiences?  You mean the time I
                         spent tied to a rusty pipe for
                         eight years?  Those experiences?

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         I understand it may be difficult
                         to relive those memories, but
                         that's what expressive therapy is
                         all about, Olivia.  I'd be here to
                         help you every step of the way. In
                         fact, you wouldn't even have to
                         lift a pencil.  I could do the
                         writing for you through these
                         sessions together.  What do you
                         think about that?

               Olivia looks away from Samantha and begins to stare out the
               window.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (quietly)
                         I think you're full of s**t.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         Pardon?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I said you're full of s**t.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         And why do you think that?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         You have no idea who I am.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         You're right, I don't.  I need you
                         to tell me.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         And what am I supposed to tell
                         you?  None of this will ever make
                         sense to me, no matter much how
                         you analyze it.  I'm dealing with
                         this on my own terms and so far, I
                         have to say, it's working.

                                     SAMANTHA LANDRY
                         Olivia, I only want what's best --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What you want is the story of the
                         week!  You want the book deal. The
                         episode of Dateline.  The truth is
                         no matter how long I sit here
                         telling you what a terrible life I
                         have, I'll just be wasting my
                         breath.  You can find someone else
                         to get rich off of.

               Olivia gets up from her CHAIR so fast that she knocks it
               backward onto the floor with a CRASH.  She storms out of the
               room.

               Samantha looks down at her desk, disappointed.  She shakes
               her head and closes the file folder on Olivia that she has
               open in front of her.

               LOBBY

               On her way out of the office, Olivia storms past her father,
               who is reading a magazine.  He does a double-take when he
               sees his daughter leaving.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Liv!  Hey!  What happened?


               EXT. SAMANTHA'S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS

               Olivia storms out of the office and runs down the street,
               tears welling in her eyes.  Her father runs out behind her.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Olivia, come back!

               Kevin runs after his daughter and quickly catches up to her.
                He extends his arm to her shoulder and his daughter stops
               and turns around.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't want to do this! She's not
                         helping me!

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Honey, I think what's best is that
                         you give it more time.  This was
                         only your first session, she's
                         only trying to help you --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't NEED her help, Dad.

               Kevin hugs his daughter and holds her close.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         OK.  OK, it's OK.

               They continue to hug for a moment.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Come on, let's go somewhere warm
                         and talk it over.


               INT. COFFEE SHOP - LATER

               Olivia is seated in a booth of a coffee shop with a cup of
               hot chocolate in front of her.  She's shaking as she lifts
               the cup to her mouth.

               Olivia glances quickly at her father, who is seated across
               from her.  Her eyes are swollen and red.

               Kevin extends his hands across the table and takes hers in
               his.  She flinches but allows him to hold her.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         You've always loved a cup of
                         hot-cha.  Remember when you used
                         to call it that?  You used to say
                         "Daddy, can I have some hot-cha
                         with mallows?"

               Olivia shakes her head.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I don't really remember.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         It was a long time ago.

               A beat.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                               (pointing to his
                               face)
                         Does it still sting?

               Olivia shakes her head.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         My poor girl... you've been
                         through so much and then a tree
                         picks a fight with you.

               Kevin's PHONE BEEPS.  He looks at it and sighs.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What's wrong?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Just work stuff.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         The store?

               Kevin looks up from his phone and makes eye contact with
               Olivia.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         I don't work there any more,
                         sweetie.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         What do you mean?  Why not?

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         We sold it.  A long time ago. Not
                         long after...

               Olivia looks at her father in confusion.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         It just wasn't working out.

               Kevin looks away awkwardly.

               A beat.

               Kevin makes eye contact with Olivia again.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         It wasn't that business was
                         slow... I mean, it was, but... it
                         was just too much.  Going through
                         everything we were going
                         through... I barely slept, I
                         couldn't concentrate on what I
                         needed to to keep it running.  I
                         just wasn't the right person to
                         run it any more.  It's in good
                         hands now, though.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Dad.

               Kevin looks at his daughter.  She has tears in her eyes.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'm sorry.

               The words hit Kevin like a bowling ball to the gut.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         No.  No, you can't be sorry.
                         Never.  This wasn't your fault.

               Kevin switches seats and slides into Olivia's booth and
               holds her close.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Don't you ever be sorry about
                         anything.  I'm just fine, your
                         mother and I are both just fine.
                         I've got a really good job now.
                         It's a night shift.  The
                         sanitation yard.  It's been
                         working out better for me.  At
                         night's when I do most of my
                         thinking.

               A beat.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Everything's gonna be all right
                         from now on.

               Kevin holds his daughter close.


               INT. KEVIN'S CAR - LATER

               Olivia and her father are sitting in silence in the car
               while driving down a dark city street.

               Kevin turns on the radio and flips through a few stations
               before landing on a talk news channel.

                                     NEWS REPORTER
                               (V.O.)
                         Another man was found murdered in
                         his own home today in Scottsdale,
                         apparently beaten to death in a
                         similar fashion to yesterday's
                         victim.  Police have stated that
                         the two incidents are potentially
                         connected in ways not previously
                         considered.  Our investigative
                         reporter, Annette Stone, has more.

               Olivia shifts uncomfortably in her chair.  Her eyes go to
               the radio.  She glances at her father, who is concentrating
               on the road.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         That's terrible...

                                     ANNETTE STONE
                               (V.O.)
                         That's right, Sandy, I'm outside
                         the home of Dillan Miller on
                         Glenashton Road here in
                         Scottsdale, where Mr. Miller was
                         found brutally beaten to death in
                         his own home.  This is the second
                         murder in as many days in this
                         normally quiet community.  Police
                         Commissioner Aaron Jones, says
                         that these murders are possibly
                         connected.

                                     POLICE COMMISSIONER
                               (V.O.)
                         At this point in the
                         investigation, there's still a lot
                         of evidence that we need to go
                         through.  We need to make sure we
                         do our due diligence before
                         revealing too much, but what I can
                         tell you is that the victims in
                         these incidents are both
                         registered sex offenders.  Now,
                         we're not sure if this is just a
                         coincidence at this point in time,
                         or if they are being targeted by
                         someone in the community, but
                         we're actively working on...

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Let's listen to something more
                         upbeat, what do you say?

               Kevin hits a preset on his radio and "Stairway to Heaven"
               starts playing.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         There we go.  Stairway.  Can't get
                         any better than that.

               Olivia smiles nervously at her dad.  She then turns her head
               and looks out the window of the car with a concerned look on
               her face.  The street lights bounce across her face as they
               drive down the city street.

               A CELL PHONE RINGS.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                               (O.S.)
                         Hello?  Really?  Can't you get Jim
                         to come in early?

               A beat.

               Kevin lets out a long sigh.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         OK, I'll be down in a little
                         while, I'm with my daughter right
                         now. All right, bye.

               Kevin curses and puts his phone away.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         I need to go into work early. Your
                         mom's done work in ten minutes,
                         I'll drop you off there and she'll
                         take you home, OK?

               Olivia is still staring out the window.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         OK.

               Kevin reaches over and rubs his daughter's head lovingly.


               INT. GROCERY STORE - LATER

               ENTRANCE

               The DOOR to the grocery store DINGS as Olivia enters.  She's
               hunched over and looks tired as she trudges by the cash
               registers.

               FROZEN FOOD SECTION

               Olivia walks to the back of the store and spots her mom
               putting cartons of milk onto the refrigerated shelving.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Liv!  Sweetie, I thought you were
                         with your father?

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I was but he had to go to work.

               Julia smiles and nods her head.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         He's been keeping busy.

               Julia gives her daughter a sympathetic look and extends her
               arms to hug Olivia.  Olivia walks into her mother's embrace.

               A beat.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         It's been a long day.  Listen, I'm
                         just going to go punch out and
                         then we'll go home, OK?  You want
                         some ice cream?  Pick one out and
                         we'll have some when we get home.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         OK, Mom.

               Julia hands her daughter a twenty dollar bill and smiles at
               her.

               Olivia smiles back.

               Julia walks off, taking off her smock as she goes.  Olivia
               begins browsing the ice cream flavours.  Vanilla, Chocolate,
               Neapolitan, Cherry.  Olivia grabs a tub of Chocolate and a
               bottle of chocolate syrup.

               CASH REGISTER

               Olivia is at the cash register with her purchases.  The girl
               ringing her through is in her late teens with short blond
               hair.  She is wearing a trainee badge. The name AMANDA is
               printed on a temporary sticker on the front of the badge.

               Amanda scans the ice cream twice by mistake.

                                     AMANDA HUNTER
                         Oops.

               Amanda struggles with the cash register, trying to erase one
               of the scans.  She gets stressed out and pounds on the keys.

                                     AMANDA HUNTER
                         F**k.

               Amanda looks up at Olivia.

                                     AMANDA HUNTER
                         Sorry.

               She eventually figures out how to cancel the order and she
               re-scans Olivia's items.

                                     AMANDA HUNTER
                         That'll be... $8.42.

               Olivia hands her the twenty dollar bill.  Amanda opens the
               till and gives Olivia her change.  Olivia takes her
               groceries and begins to leaf through a magazine across from
               the till.

                                     AMANDA HUNTER
                               (O.S.)
                         Jaime, I'm going home now, can you
                         take over?

               CLOSE ON BOX OF ORGANIC BROWN RICE

               The box is moving from left to right, down a conveyor belt.
               A hand reaches down and grabs it from the conveyor belt and
               scans it.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia is still leafing through her magazine, the man and
               his customer OUT OF FOCUS behind her.

                                     MAN
                               (O.S.)
                         That will be $4.55, ma'am.

               Olivia freezes.  She can't move. She turns her head slowly,
               in horror, to find her former captor, dressed in a green
               smock.  His forehead has a red mark from the door he took to
               the forehead not too long ago.

               CLOSE ON NAMETAG

               "Jaime"

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia's eyes are locked on Jaime.  Her body begins shaking.

               As Jaime's customer finishes his transaction, he looks up to
               see Olivia staring back at him.  He does a double-take when
               he realizes who she is.

               Olivia's eyes roll up in her head and she falls to the
               floor, unconscious.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         Oh my God!  Are you OK?  Young
                         man! Young man, help, this girl
                         just fainted!

               Jaime runs over to meet the customer with a look of fear in
               his eyes.

               Jaime kneels down with his face in his hands and pauses.
               When he removes his hands from his face, his expression
               instantly turns calm.

                                     JAIME MENDES (MAN)
                         It's OK, this happens to her
                         sometimes.  I'll take care of her.

               The customer looks confused.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         You know her?

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         She's my niece.  She probably
                         forgot to take her medication
                         today.  Her parents always forget
                         to remind her.

               The customer picks up her cell phone and dials 9-1-1.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         What are you doing?

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         I'm calling 9-1-1, she needs help.
                          I think she hit her head on the
                         way down.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         I'll tell you what... I'll take
                         her home to her mom.  She has her
                         medication there, we've been
                         dealing with this all her life. It
                         comes and goes...

               Jaime glances around the store.

               JAIME'S POV

               The office door where Julia went to punch out is still
               closed.

               BACK TO SCENE

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         Are you sure?  I still think we
                         should call...

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         No!  I don't want her mom getting
                         worried about her.  She has
                         anxiety attacks, it's better if I
                         take her home.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         OK, if you say so.  It's your
                         call.

               The customer walks away and leaves the store, looking back
               over her shoulder as she walks out the door.

               Jaime looks around nervously.

               JAIME'S POV

               The store is empty.

               JAIME

               glances at the office door again.

               JAIME'S POV

               The door is still closed.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               INT. GROCERY STORE - MOMENTS LATER

               Julia locks the office door behind her and walks out into
               the quiet store.  There are no customers.  Jaime is standing
               at his till, straightening some magazines.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Time to call it a night.  Thanks
                         for your help today.  Amanda's a
                         bit of a handful, I know.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         She's getting better.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         I hope so.  Oh!  By the way, do
                         you know what next Tuesday is?

               Jaime looks confused.  He shakes his head.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         What?

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         That, my friend, is your ten year
                         anniversary.  Hard to believe,
                         isn't it?

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Wow, yeah.  Time flies.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         We should go out for a drink or
                         something.  Really whoop it up.

               Julia smiles at Jaime.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         God knows I could use a drink.
                         How's your head?  It's looking
                         better.

               Jaime touches his forehead instinctively.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         It's uh... it's better.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         It looks better.  What were you
                         carrying again?  A treadmill?

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         No, um... an elliptical machine.
                         One of the arms came untied and...

               Jaime mimics something hitting him in the head.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Well, I think your buddy owes you
                         an apology.  You were the one
                         helping HIM move.  Try Neosporin.
                         It'll clear that right up.

               Julia glances around the store.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                               (yelling)
                         Ready, Liv?

               Silence.

               Julia looks confused and walks across the length of the
               store, looking down each aisle.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Olivia!

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Oh, she said she'd meet you at
                         home.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         What?  At home?  Why?  What do you
                         mean?

               Jaime shrugs.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         She seemed like she didn't want to
                         wait around.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         Why the hell didn't you stop her,
                         Jaime?  Jesus Christ, you know
                         what she's gone through, she
                         shouldn't be out there alone.

               Julia rushes to the door, throwing her jacket on as she
               goes.

               Jaime stares with an emotionless glare at Julia as she
               leaves the store.


               EXT. GROCERY STORE - CONTINUOUS

               Julia glances frantically around the dark parking lot.

                                     JULIA ROSE
                         OLIVIA!!

               Julia runs over to her car, jumps in the front seat, slams
               the door shut and speeds out of the parking lot.

               The CAMERA PANS slowly across the parking lot.  As we get
               further and further away from the store, a MUFFLED NOISE can
               be heard.  It gets louder and louder until finally the trunk
               of a car comes INTO FRAME.

               A moment of silence and then...

               A loud, muffled SCREAM and the car shakes from side to side.

                                                       CUT TO BLACK.


               EXT. DREAM SEQUENCE - CITY PARK - POND - DAY

               Olivia is treading water in a pond.  She looks up at the
               bright summer sky.  Dark, billowing clouds are rolling in
               faster than nature would ever permit.

               Olivia is seemingly alone in the park.  Everywhere she
               looks, no one can be seen.  She turns herself around and
               spots a large brick building.

               Olivia squints and sees her family in the distance, through
               a window on the side of the building.  They are having
               dinner together. Olivia sees herself sitting with them,
               right beside her twin sister.  Everyone is laughing.  Olivia
               and her sister are talking quietly to one another.

               Olivia suddenly feels a tug at her feet.  She dips below the
               water's surface briefly, before quickly bobbing back up.
               Startled, she gasps for air as she breaks the surface.

               She starts to swim to the side of the pond, but is again
               pulled under, more violently this time.

               UNDERWATER

               Olivia is being pulled down by an unknown force, deeper and
               deeper, the water is getting darker and darker.  Olivia
               struggles with whatever is pulling her down.

               The CAMERA PANS DOWN to reveal a hand pulling her down by
               her ankle.  She pounds on it but it doesn't let go.
               Frantically, she hits it over and over, prying at the
               fingers.  Air bubbles are escaping from her nose and mouth.
               Over and over she pounds on the hand until finally, she runs
               out of energy.  Her body goes limp.

               The hand releases her and she floats slowly to the water's
               surface.

               ABOVE WATER

               She bobs above the surface and gasps for air.  Horrified,
               she realizes that the pool is now filled with blood. Looking
               around, she sees the bodies of the men on her list.  They
               are floating lifeless, face up toward the cloudy sky.

               With a look of sheer terror, she swims for the edge of the
               pond, now only a few feet away.

               As her fingers touch the grass at the edge of the water,
               Olivia spots Jaime Mendes, on the other side of a chain-link
               fence staring at her with an emotionless glare.  Slowly, the
               glare turns to a smile.

               The bodies in the water open their eyes and start to swim
               towards Olivia, leaving trails of dark blood in their wake.

               Olivia grasps for the edge of the pond, but every time she
               takes hold of the ground, it gives way beneath her and
               collapses down into the pond.  Over and over, she attempts
               to climb onto the surface, but each time her attempt is
               thwarted.

               She glances behind her to find the outstretched, bloody arm
               of Dillan Miller reaching for her.  His face is twisted into
               an image of pure evil, his bloated skin hanging lifelessly
               onto his face.

               She winces, and as the hand touches her face, she screams
               and suddenly awakens from the dream, to an even more
               horrible reality.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               INT. JAIME'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - EVENING

               Jaime is tapping Olivia on the shoulder.  As Olivia comes
               back to consciousness and screams, Jaime jumps back in
               fright.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Are you OK?

               Olivia looks around her frantically, realizing instantly
               where she is.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No, no, no, no, no.

               Both of Olivia's hands are tied behind her back. She
               struggles but her efforts are fruitless.  She's sobbing as
               she attempts to free herself.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         You shouldn't have left me,
                         Rachel.  I missed you.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No!  No!  No!

               Olivia frantically moves her hands back and forth, hitting
               them against the metal pipe that she's tied to.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (sobbing)
                         Don't do this, don't you do this
                         again.  Don't do this.  Let me go,
                         don't you dare... don't you...

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Why did you...

               Jaime swallows hard.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Why did you leave me?  It's not
                         safe for you out there, didn't I
                         tell you that already?  It's not
                         safe for you anywhere but here. If
                         he ever found you again, I don't
                         know what I'd do.

               Olivia stops struggling and leans back against the metal
               pipe.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Kill me.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         What?  What are you talking about,
                         I --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Just do it.  Let me go or kill me.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Rachel, I --

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'M NOT RACHEL!!


               EXT. SUBURBAN NEIGHBOURHOOD - NIGHT

               A police car is driving down a quiet suburban neighbourhood.
                It passes another police car going in the opposite
               direction.

               On another street, several police cars are lined up on the
               side of the road, gumballs lighting up the otherwise quiet
               neighbourhood.

               A car is pulled over and an officer shows the driver a
               photograph of Olivia.  The man shakes his head as he looks
               at the image.


               INT. ROSE HOME - EVENING

               KITCHEN (MOS)

               Julia is screaming while Kevin holds her. Elena is talking
               to a police officer in the kitchen.

               Detective Matthews and O'Brien enter the front door.

               Kevin notices them and seats his wife in a chair.  He
               motions for Elena to come hold her.  Elena excuses herself
               from the officer and runs over to hold her distraught
               mother.

               Kevin runs over to the detectives that just entered.

               FRONT DOOR

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Did you find anything?

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         We checked the security tapes...

               Matthews sighs and glances at O'Brien.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         It looks like it's completely
                         blank.  We're having a technician
                         look at it, but from what I could
                         tell, the hard drive is corrupted.
                          Probably nobody's checked the
                         tapes in a while and it just went
                         unnoticed.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         Oh my God...

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         We're doing all we can, Mr. Rose.
                         We have stop-points all over town
                         looking for your girl.  We're
                         going to find her.

               The two detectives glance awkwardly at one another.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         ... And there's something else.

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         What is it?

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         We've been investigating two
                         homicides that took place here in
                         town this week.  This is hard to
                         say...

                                     KEVIN ROSE
                         What?

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Your daughter's fingerprints were
                         found at both crime scenes.

               Kevin stares bewildered at the two officers.


               INT. ELDERLY CUSTOMER'S HOUSE - EVENING

               CLOSE ON BOX OF ORGANIC BROWN RICE

               KITCHEN

               An elderly woman is humming a song to herself as she
               prepares a meal.

               She takes the rice and pours it into a pot of boiling water.
                She begins chopping some green peppers when she's
               interrupted by a woman's voice in another room.

                                     VOICE
                               (O.S.)
                         Mom, what channel is the news on?

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         You know I don't watch that junk.
                         If I want to hear bad news, I'll
                         just go see my Cardiologist.

                                     VOICE
                               (O.S.)
                         It's not all bad, mom.

               The old woman grunts in response.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER'S DAUGHTER
                               (O.S.)
                         Oh my God!

               The old woman looks up suddenly and scurries over into the
               living room, her wooden spoon in one hand.

               LIVING ROOM

               The old woman's daughter, along with a middle-aged man and
               an elderly man are all seated around a television set.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         What's wrong?

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER'S DAUGHTER
                         This Olivia Rose girl, she's gone
                         missing again.  That's so awful.

               The others in the room murmur to one another.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         Olivia who?

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER'S DAUGHTER
                         Mom, you seriously need to get out
                         more.  A little Brian Williams
                         wouldn't hurt you once in a while,
                         either.  Her, see?

               CLOSE ON TV

               A picture of Olivia is shown on the screen.

               BACK TO SCENE

               The old woman drops her wooden spoon.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER'S DAUGHTER
                         Mom, are you OK?

               The old woman puts one hand to her mouth and uses the other
               to steady herself against the wall.

                                     ELDERLY CUSTOMER
                         Oh my God.


               INT. JAIME'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - MOMENTS LATER

               CLOSE ON PILE OF GARBAGE

               An old hard drive is sitting on a pile of cardboard and
               garbage bags.

               BACK TO SCENE

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         I couldn't believe it when I saw
                         you just walking down the street,
                         walking to school just like you
                         always would.  Just the way I
                         remembered you.

               Jaime smiles to himself.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         I was right.  I never gave up
                         hope.  As soon as you give up
                         hope, there's nothing left to live
                         for.  I kept telling them that,
                         but they wouldn't listen.  Mom
                         would start crying and Dad would
                         smack me, saying it was my fault.
                         They were cowards.  How could they
                         give up on you like that?  You
                         were their daughter, parents are
                         supposed to be there for their
                         kids.  Two years, that's how long
                         they had hope for you.  That's it.
                          That's when they said it was time
                         to move on.

               Jaime slinks back against the wall with his head in his
               hands.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                               (angrily)
                         They almost had me committed.  Can
                         you believe that?  They were going
                         to send me away to some f*****g
                         nut house!  Maybe then they could
                         forget about me too.

               Olivia is watching Jaime with a look of anger and fear in
               her eyes.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'm not your sister.  My name is
                         Olivia Rose and you kidnapped me.
                         You're a sick piece of s**t and
                         you deserve to die.  As soon as I
                         get out of here, and I will get
                         out of here, I'm going to make you
                         wish your sister was never born.

               Jaime makes eye contact with Olivia.  His demeanour is calm.
                Suddenly, rage fills his eyes and he lunges at Olivia,
               choking her with his strong, powerful hands.

               Olivia flails her legs in front of her, kicking at him
               frantically.  Her efforts are useless.

               The veins in Olivia's forehead begin to bulge and her face
               turns a deep shade of purple as Jaime continues choking her.
                Suddenly she makes eye contact with him and stops
               struggling.  Jaime, seeing the pained expression on her
               face, releases his grip and flings himself away from her,
               crying wildly.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         You were supposed to come back to
                         me!   I waited for you for so
                         long!

               Olivia gasps for breath, coughing and hacking.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                               (sobbing)
                         I'm sorry.   I'm so sorry.  I made
                         a mistake.

               Jaime slowly stands up, using the wall behind him for
               support.  He slowly walks across the floor of the basement.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Where are you going?  Let me go!

               Jaime slowly turns around to face Olivia.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         I need to find my sister.  You
                         said it yourself.  I made a
                         mistake.  There was another...

               Jaime begins walking up the stairs.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Julia calls her Elena.

               Olivia's eyes go wide as saucers as the name is mentioned.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No!!  Don't you touch her!!

               Olivia pounds frantically against the pipe behind her,
               flailing her legs and screaming at the top of her lungs,
               incoherently.

               The lights are turned off and Olivia is left alone in
               darkness to scream in terror.


               INT. POLICE CAR - MOMENTS LATER

               Matthews and O'Brien are seated in a police car in the
               driveway of the Rose Home.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         What do you make of it?

               Matthews shakes his head.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Never seen anything like it.  They
                         ran the prints three times,
                         they're hers.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Maybe one of them was the perp?
                         Maybe both?  They had records...
                         makes sense.  Maybe she went after
                         a third?

               A CELL PHONE VIBRATES.  Matthews reaches to his hip and
               answers the call.

               INTERCUT TELEPHONE CONVERSATION.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Matthews.

                                     DETECTIVE SIBERT
                         This is Detective Sibert from SPD.
                          One of our 911 operators just got
                         a phone call about your missing
                         girl.  Apparently she fainted in a
                         grocery store last night and one
                         of the cashiers offered to take
                         her home.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         No s**t.  Did she get a name?

                                     DETECTIVE SIBERT
                         First name's Jaime.  I managed to
                         get the last name from company
                         records, it's Mendes.  I ran his
                         name, he's clean, but get this.
                         About twelve years ago, before he
                         moved out here, his kid sister was
                         nabbed outside of Pittsburgh.
                         Guess what her name was.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Rachel.

               Matthews starts the squad car and backs out of the driveway
               in a hurry, WHEELS SQUEELING.

                                     DETECTIVE SIBERT
                         Right as rain.  Two years after
                         that, they find her body in a
                         river and his parents wind up
                         dead. Shotgun wounds to the head.
                         Was ruled a suicide at the time.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         What's the address?


               INT. JAIME'S HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER

               BASEMENT

               Olivia is screaming at the top of her lungs. She works her
               tied hands slowly up the pole she's attached to and stands
               up.  She begins to tug desperately at the pole, trying to
               free herself in any way possible.

               Olivia BASHES her SHOULDER into the side of the pipe
               repeatedly.  Again and again and again.  The pipe begins to
               give way.  After several more bashes, she gives it all she
               has left in her.  There's a sickening CRUNCH as her ARM
               breaks at the shoulder and at the same time, the PIPE BREAKS
               near the middle, spraying water all over her.

               Olivia drops to the floor, screaming in pain.  She looks in
               horror at her arm, which hangs awkwardly at her side.

               Olivia hobbles over to the stairs, her left arm dangling.
               She makes her way up the stairs, quietly opening the door at
               the top of the staircase.

               FRONT DOOR

               CLOSE ON JAIME

               Jaime is putting his jacket on.

               Olivia is OUT OF FOCUS in the background, but when she spots
               him, she begins to run towards him as fast as she can.  The
               moment before impact, Jaime spins around as Olivia runs into
               him at full speed, sending him flying to the FLOOR with a
               CRASH.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Olivia screams and punches Jaime in the face with her one
               good hand, but she's too weak to do much damage.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         DON'T YOU TOUCH HER!! STAY AWAY
                         FROM HER!!

               Jaime, surprised more than anything, smacks Olivia in the
               face, just hard enough to get her off of him.

               Olivia rolls off of him and lands on her broken arm.  She
               screams in pain and her eyes roll back in her head.  She
               looks like she's about to pass out.

               Olivia is gasping for breath.  She drags herself along the
               floor, away from Jaime.  She's moving slowly, and behind her
               Jaime is now getting to his feet.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Son of a b***h...

               Jaime puts a hand to his head and looks at the blood.  His
               old wound has been reopened.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         That was your plan, huh?  Now
                         what?

               Olivia continues crawling along the floor, whimpering.  Her
               damaged arm drags at her side.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Come here.  I won't hurt you. Come
                         here.

               Jaime walks over to Olivia and stands over her.  She tries
               to continue crawling, but he grabs her by the back of her
               pants, holding her in place.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Olivia screams and kicks hard at
                         Jaime's ankle.  Jaime screams in
                         pain and falls to the ground,
                         holding his ankle tenderly.

               Olivia pulls herself back to her feet and moves to the front
               door of the house.  She struggles with the door and realizes
               that it's locked.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Rachel, no! No! Don't!

               Olivia struggles with the lock, but manages to open it.  She
               swings the door open, only to be greeted with a screen door.

               Jaime is getting to his feet and limping over to Olivia.

               Olivia pushes the handle, but it won't open.  She realizes
               too late that the screen door is also locked.  Jaime grabs
               her and drags her backwards, kicking and screaming.

               In her desperate flailing, Olivia accidentally knocks a
               framed photograph of Rachel off the wall, the GLASS from the
               frame SHATTERING across the side table and floor below it.

               She quickly sees an opportunity and while Jaime stops for a
               moment to close the door with his foot, Olivia uses both of
               her feet to grip a shattered piece of glass. With all of the
               strength she can muster, she drives it back behind her,
               straight into Jaime's  groin.

               Jaime immediately drops Olivia, who falls to the floor
               amongst the broken glass.

               Jaime looks down, horrified at the shard of glass sticking
               out of him.

               With a look of complete shock on his face, he pulls the
               glass out slowly, shaking as he does so.

               Dark shadows flit past the living room window.  Olivia
               doesn't notice, she's too busy watching Jaime writhe in pain
               on the floor.

               Olivia grabs another large shard of glass and moves quickly
               over to Jaime.  She holds it to his throat.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I want to look you in the eyes
                         when I do this.  Look at me!

               Jaime looks at Olivia.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Those others, they were just
                         practice.  I'm gonna make this
                         count.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                               (hysterical)
                         Don't, don't, don't do this,
                         please.  I'll let you go, Please,
                         don't, please...

               Jaime is shaking and weeping.  A dark spot forms near his
               crotch as he releases his bladder.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         You'd have me believe that,
                         wouldn't you?

               Olivia points at Rachel's photo, lying on the ground in
               front of them.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Say goodbye to your f*****g
                         sister!

               Suddenly, another series of dark shadows move across the
               curtained window of the living room.  Olivia and Jaime both
               follow the shadows with their eyes, momentarily forgetting
               their feud.

               Suddenly, there's a LOUD BANG and the FRONT DOOR of the
               house is kicked in by Detective O'Brien.  He and his partner
               both enter the house, shotguns drawn.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Drop the weapon!  Drop it now!

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         No...

               Olivia pushes the glass right up against Jaime's throat.  A
               trickle of blood flows down his neck.

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         Don't shoot her!  Please!

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         Shut up!

               Olivia looks from Jaime back to the officers.

               Suddenly, three more Officers appear behind them, guns
               raised.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         You're not going to take this away
                         from me!  Lower your weapons, or
                         I'll slit his neck from ear to
                         ear.

                                     DETECTIVE O'BRIEN
                         Put the weapon down, Olivia, we're
                         not here to harm you. Your family
                         is at home waiting for you to come
                         back to them.  They just want to
                         see you again. Please, lower the
                         weapon and come with us.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I... I can't do that.

               Olivia glances around the room, frantically.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I have to do this.  I have to.

                                     DETECTIVE MATTHEWS
                         Olivia, listen to me.  You have to
                         come with me.  They love you, they
                         just want you to come home safe.
                         Will you put the weapon down so I
                         can lead you out of here and
                         arrest Mr. Mendes? We'll make sure
                         he doesn't hurt you ever again.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                         I'm already making sure of that!

                                     JAIME MENDES
                         I would never hurt you, Rachel!

               Olivia presses the knife harder against Jaime's throat,
               causing him to gasp in fright.

               Olivia looks around her.  Officers have completely
               surrounded her, there's nowhere to run.

               Suddenly, something catches Olivia's eye. The necklace that
               Alex made for her so many years ago is hanging on the wall
               next to the spot where the picture of Rachel used to hang.

               Olivia's mouth opens in surprise and her eyes tear up.

               Olivia drops the GLASS and it CLATTERS on the floor.

               Jaime scurries away quickly.  Matthews and O'Brien rush over
               to detain Olivia and Jaime.

               Olivia stares at the necklace as she is being handcuffed.
               Tears flow down her cheeks as she remembers her childhood.

                                     ALEX KAPLAN
                               (V.O.)
                         I want you to have this.  Like a
                         present.  Just in case you don't
                         get your birthday party.

               Matthews speaks something inaudible into his walkie talkie
               and helps Olivia to her feet.

                                                       DISSOLVE TO:


               INT. FLASHBACK - SCHOOL - CLASSROOM - DAY

               Olivia smiles and takes the necklace, putting it around her
               neck.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (smiling)
                         Thank you.

               Olivia leans over and gives Alex a peck on the cheek.

               Alex blushes and looks away.

               Olivia smiles wide as she studies the necklace around her
               neck.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               INT. CITY BUS - DAY

               SUPER: "ONE YEAR LATER."

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         The Scottsdale Slayer is what they
                         called me.  It was all over the
                         news.  I hardly made a dent in my
                         list.  People like to blow things
                         out of proportion.

                                                       FADE IN

               A man is reading a newspaper on a city bus.

               CLOSE ON NEWSPAPER

               The article he is reading states "Scottsdale Slayer
               Apprehended".  Beneath the headline is a picture of Olivia.

               THE MAN

               shakes his head, incredulous to the news.


               EXT. DOWNTOWN SCOTTSDALE - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         Some people can't understand why I
                         would do such a thing.  I suppose
                         they thought I should just adjust
                         to the life that was thrust upon
                         me.  I suppose I did, but on my
                         own terms.

               A large group of people are marching down the street,
               holding signs. Among them are "Free Olivia", "Olivia the
               Saint", and "It's not her fault!".

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         Others praised me.  To them, I was
                         a champion.  I was the justice
                         that these men had escaped.  Some
                         people claimed that they would
                         have done the same thing.  I don't
                         know if that's true.  People can
                         say all kinds of crazy things when
                         they don't have to follow through.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         And yet, for every person that
                         praised my actions, a hundred
                         others showed me nothing but
                         contempt, calling me the devil,
                         claiming that my mind had been
                         destroyed beyond rescue.
                         Everyone's entitled to their own
                         opinion.


               INT. COURT ROOM - DAY

               Olivia is in court standing before a judge.  The judge is
               handing out her sentence, and Olivia is looking back at her
               with a solemn look in her eyes.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         As for the state of Arizona, the
                         only opinion that really truly
                         matters in the end, I was seen as
                         guilty of double homicide.  I was
                         tried as a minor and convicted in
                         very little time.  It was one of
                         the highest-profile cases in the
                         country.  If they didn't already
                         know my name, they certainly did
                         now.

               Olivia is being led out of the court room, handcuffed, after
               her sentence is passed down.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         They tried to get me to plead
                         insanity, but I don't think I was
                         insane.  I knew what I was doing.
                         I had a purpose, for the first
                         time in as long as I can remember,
                         my life had meaning again.  I
                         wasn't some helpless little rat
                         tied up to a metal pole in
                         someone's basement.  I was in
                         control.


               INT. PRISON - OLIVIA'S CELL - DAY

               Olivia is being led to a prison cell.  She's wearing orange
               prison garbs.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         And now I'm a prisoner again. I'll
                         be here for a long time.  In many
                         ways, it's ironic that I'm once
                         again a captive, and yet I've
                         never felt so free in my entire
                         life.


               INT. SCHOOL - CLASSROOM - DAY

               Olivia is standing at the front of a classroom talking to a
               room full of students.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         Once a month I'm allowed to travel
                         to schools all over the state and
                         talk to the kids about what I was
                         put through.  I'm supposed to just
                         tell people not to talk to
                         strangers.  I try not to go into
                         any of the gruesome details, but
                         they always seem to be the popular
                         questions.

               A young male student is shown asking a question and Olivia
               is shown answering by simulating a stabbing motion in the
               air.  A police officer rushes up on stage and stops her.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         And then of course, there's him.


               INT. FLASHBACK - JAIME'S HOUSE - BASEMENT - DAY

               Jaime is smiling at a young Olivia, handing her a slice of
               birthday cake on her birthday.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O)
                         Jaime Mendes was convicted of
                         kidnapping and child endangerment.


               EXT. PRISON - YARD - DAY

               Jaime is dressed in prison garb, being taunted by prison
               inmates.  They are shoving him around and making obscene
               gestures at him.

               A prisoner walks up behind Jaime with a shank and stabs
               Jaime repeatedly in the back.

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         People like him don't fare too
                         well in jail.  He only served one
                         day of his life sentence.  Oddly,
                         I didn't feel anything when I
                         heard that he'd been killed. Maybe
                         I just didn't know how I was
                         supposed to feel. I think that's a
                         good thing.

               Jaime lies motionless in the prison yard as prisoners walk
               casually away from him.


               INT. PRISON - OLIVIA'S CELL - DAY

                                     OLIVIA ROSE
                               (V.O.)
                         For the first time in as long as I
                         can remember, though, I have hope
                         in my life again.  Hope that my
                         life will one day return to
                         normal.  The kind of normal that
                         I've long forgotten exists.

               Olivia is writing out the words from her voiceover in a
               diary. She closes the book.  A PRISON GUARD RAPS on the BARS
               behind her and she turns around.

                                     PRISON GUARD
                         You have visitors.


               INT. PRISON - MEETING AREA - DAY

               Olivia walks down a hallway and into a large room where
               prisoners are talking to loved ones.  She spots her family
               standing with Alex at the far end of the room.  Alex waves
               and smiles.
               (a beat)
               Olivia waves and smiles back.  She walks towards the CAMERA,
               OUT OF FRAME.

                                                       FADE TO BLACK.


               EXT. ARIZONA DESERT - DAY

               A crumpled piece of paper drifts along the sandy, Arizona
               desert.

               It comes to rest in front of a cactus.  Next to the cactus
               is the corpse of a large rattlesnake, half decomposed.  The
               only identifiable markings are the word "MISSING", a row of
               question marks, and half of Olivia's face.  A gust of wind
               blows the crumpled paper away into the distance.

               A small round-tailed squirrel walks by the snake's corpse,
               sniffs it, and moves on.


                                                                  FADE OUT.

© 2014 ScottTheScreenwriter


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Since I'm here, I may as well. First off, good choice, choosing the mighty Led Zep. My conscience always told me to be wary of people who don't like Led Zeppelin.

Now the review, I liked the story that unfolded, but I can't quite help but feel that something was missing. If I was writing this, I would have added more content about Jaime and what happened with Rachel. You know, to give the reader "the reason why" behind his actions. I would have also focused a bit more on Olivia's transition from scared to angry and revenge driven; and maybe add a bit more about her time as a kidnapping victim (just to build sympathy because in the beginning she was acting like the kind of person I would punch if she pulled that kind of stuff with me- no patience for my age group, that's me).

In general, I would add more to the POVs. Take Alex and her parents for example, how badly were they affected by her disappearance? What did they do during her absence? In these types of situations, a mere "I missed you, I thought you were dead, etc" will only come off as weak. Which isn't what you want, trust me.

I don't know how this will all translate into a screenplay ('cause I'm thinking "it's a book, yep, a book", but when you're bored, you should try and add a few.

(Since I'm still here, I'll answer your question): No. I haven't rewrote the things I lost. I tried, but nothing is as good as the original. So, I thought about what you said and decided to erase everything off my laptop. (To write something new) But I had no spark to create anything new, so I also decided to just break from writing. I'll get back to it. Someday. Hopefully.

Anyways, and as usual, keep me posted with the contest (and Number Two Man). Cheers.

-L

P.S. You could've just emailed this to me. (But oh well, right?) Thoroughly enjoyed this regardless.

P.S.S If I was clear as mud in any of my above ramblings, just ask me to clarify. You know where to find me, under the clouds somewhere in the desert, sleeping...or you can just send me an email.



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Since I'm here, I may as well. First off, good choice, choosing the mighty Led Zep. My conscience always told me to be wary of people who don't like Led Zeppelin.

Now the review, I liked the story that unfolded, but I can't quite help but feel that something was missing. If I was writing this, I would have added more content about Jaime and what happened with Rachel. You know, to give the reader "the reason why" behind his actions. I would have also focused a bit more on Olivia's transition from scared to angry and revenge driven; and maybe add a bit more about her time as a kidnapping victim (just to build sympathy because in the beginning she was acting like the kind of person I would punch if she pulled that kind of stuff with me- no patience for my age group, that's me).

In general, I would add more to the POVs. Take Alex and her parents for example, how badly were they affected by her disappearance? What did they do during her absence? In these types of situations, a mere "I missed you, I thought you were dead, etc" will only come off as weak. Which isn't what you want, trust me.

I don't know how this will all translate into a screenplay ('cause I'm thinking "it's a book, yep, a book", but when you're bored, you should try and add a few.

(Since I'm still here, I'll answer your question): No. I haven't rewrote the things I lost. I tried, but nothing is as good as the original. So, I thought about what you said and decided to erase everything off my laptop. (To write something new) But I had no spark to create anything new, so I also decided to just break from writing. I'll get back to it. Someday. Hopefully.

Anyways, and as usual, keep me posted with the contest (and Number Two Man). Cheers.

-L

P.S. You could've just emailed this to me. (But oh well, right?) Thoroughly enjoyed this regardless.

P.S.S If I was clear as mud in any of my above ramblings, just ask me to clarify. You know where to find me, under the clouds somewhere in the desert, sleeping...or you can just send me an email.



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: Thriller, Drama, Murder, Revenge, Abduction, Childhood, Therapy

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