Pile of Garbage

A refrigerator's monologue. Set after the extinction of men, when everything is just a pile of garbage.

You deduced 

your immortality

when time 

didn’t break 

you

God can you hear

You are useless

and still 

you refuse to 

die

One could 

admire That

Loving  

too much

Are you there

You, metallic

linear

industrial monument

Of such substance 

enormous things 

are made of

Should I speak louder

You used to hug things 

with your gut

and keep them cold

but you can’t do that

while covered

in dirt

God? Please?

Times and times

It feels like waves

Everything passes

You have stood

Can I ask you something

Most of it’s dead

Nothing but nature 

moves anymore

You’ve been still 

for most of your 

times now

A favor please

You’ve tried everything, 

but nothing has happened

You just stand

and look for

the time to come

but the time 

hasn’t come

so you wait 

and lay 

and wish 

and wait

and try

and think

and wait

God when will you kill me

Reviews

[Robert Francis Callaci]

'God can you hear
Are you there
Should I speak louder
God? Please?
Can I ask you something
a favor please
God when will you kill me'

Very clever, a poem within a poem. One a rant, an angry tongue lashing at an absent and uncaring God. The other a plea, a hope that he is listening or even exists- a tortured soul asking god to end his suffering but only the wind hears his plea.

Excellent poetry- The structure for me is a little cluttered. I understand why you presented it that way , a continuous string, it's effective but I would have added line breaks -

You deduced
your immortality
when time
didn’t break
you

God can you hear

You are useless
and still
you refuse to
die
One could
admire That
Loving
too much

Are you there

You, metallic
linear
industrial monument
Of such substance
enormous things
are made of

Should I speak louder

You used to hug things
with your gut
and keep them cold
but you can’t do that
while covered
in dirt

God? Please?

Times and times
It feels like waves
Everything passes
You have stood

Can I ask you something

Most of it’s dead
Nothing but nature
moves anymore
You’ve been still
for most of your
times now

A favor please

You’ve tried everything,
but nothing has happened
You just stand
and look for
the time to come
but the time
hasn’t come
so you wait
and lay
and wish
and wait
and try
and think
and wait

God when will you kill me


warmest
bob

[Sebastian Romero]

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