Not Me

Not Me

A by Floating on the feathers of a dandelion

A hollow deep inside,

Difficult to scrape out, now is a part of me,

Growing everyday,

I wonder is it hollow within,

Or diving am I in the waterless sea.

 

Hollow and shallow,

Is what I am now,

In search for a soul,

Within and outside me,

 

A soulful soul, a fancy me,

Nevermind, even if its not me!

 

 


© 2009 Floating on the feathers of a dandelion



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I really like the absence of complete thoughts, just fragments here and there, it reflects the emptiness you are trying to describe. I do have two suggestions though, perhaps drop the letter "A" from the beginning and start it with "Hollow" instead and the second is adding an apostrophe in the last line, "it's" instead of "its"

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