my little snow flake

my little snow flake

perfect snow freshly falls,

Floating down out of the sky,

So beautiful and delicately refine. 

Intricate in it's natural design,

A touch from a single flake,

be the softest touch that you relate,

revealing true beauty is divine. 

drift in the wind and find your way home, 

upon warming cheek,

your beauty imprints it shall never be lost,

ever part forever part of me.

Like a Caterpillar to a butterfly so shall a snow flake to a drop of rain.

so evaporate an be reborn my love my little snow flake,

 

find your natural place,

apart of a grate lake an other snow flake,

body of a new life, a tear of loved one.

A dancer a poet, a singer a painter  

but always find your way back to me,

my love,

my little snow flake. 

Reviews

[Mariam]

it's really very sweet)

[Sarah Redigan]

This is very creatively beautiful

[N!LoC]

hihihi so sweet and cute and airy like little twinkies .. i love it :-)

[ElizabethRaine]

This is such a beautiful poem. The way you compare the *Caterpillar to a butterfly and a snow flake to a drop of rain. I really enjoyed this.

[Michael Soul]

thank you for your time on my written art's

[ElizabethRaine]

You're very welcome.

[Violet Dreams...]

"Like a catapiler to a butterfly so shall a snow flake to a drop of rain."
I hav never seen this angle of a snowflake. Its beautiful

[TheAdamBryant]

nice poem

[JuniperPearl]

I loved this!!! I supposed it is because I love snow so very much. I think that you have encapsulated all of my thoughts and feelings for the snow in this.

I have one thought in terms of constructive criticism:
I love the simile of caterpillar to butterfly / snow to rain (great visual and also a mental gyration because normally I think of rain to snow / warm to cold not vice versa, so it makes you think). However, something about it doesn't seem right about the wording. It could flow better.
Maybe just the structuring, so that if "so shall a snow flake to drop of rain" were on the same line it would work better. This is a great piece of the poem, yet it really threw me off at first.
Don't mean to be a pain, just wanted to point that out.

[Michael Soul]

thank you your right i sat with that line most the night then thought just put it in maybe i'll see how it should work x x truly x

[Soulfulbubbles]

very beautiful poem very sweet to read i really enjoyed where it took me..

great write keep writing
:)

-kas

[Michael Soul]

many thanks im trying to move away from the dome and gloom of my passed stuff thank you

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This is hauntingly romantic. The delicate snowflake, unique, soft and pure.

[Michael Soul]

thank you for your kind words

[The Refined Poet]

simply lovely... I enjoyed it greatly. Especially liked the line "Like a catapiler to a butterfly so shall a snow flake, to a drop of rain." nicely done

[Michael Soul]

thanks i just wrote the tonight i just finished it and i seen your comment thank you

[JuniperPearl]

I loved that simile as well.
...Just wrote it? Is it snowing already in where you are, if so I'm so very jealous, I love the snow.

[Michael Soul]

no I love the snow as well, i was commenting on some ones work and from reading their work i thought of this!!! im not good at saying if some ones work is good and what could be better so i write what comes to my mind i spent so long not being able to read or write so when im reading your works i probably write in your comment box what your words give to me
and if i cant get it out my mind and if you don't won't to use it ur self i'll work something out !!!

[JuniperPearl]

I've done that....read something so inspiring to me that I ended up creating my own piece. That just might be the highest form of a compliment, I think.
Writing comes slow for me as well. It's all up there in my head...stewing away, yet getting it out sometimes takes me a little minute. I have found this site to be a huge help. Especially the commenting part. It has made the words come easier and helped me to be more critical of my own work..which is good, I think.

[Michael Soul]

i find it hard to be critical of how words read as im dyslexic im not as bad as i was when i first come on writers café but the little things still slip by like words that have the same sound to them

[JuniperPearl]

I understand. I'm very dyslexic as well; lines don't always match up, letters get all out of sorts, and forget about numbers, I get them all jumbled up. I hope I didn't offend...I'm always hesitant to be critical. That line just didn't sit right with me and I felt it was such a good thought I had to say something.

[Michael Soul]

no not at all thank you I like it helps me more than just thats cool you know.

[JuniperPearl]

Then I'll keep it coming....my grandmother was an English teacher and I feel like I inherited her little red marking pen sometimes, lol.