Gettin’ Over

..it's over..

Gettin’ Over

I’m down,

to the world I used to live.

I’m drowned,

                  With every stare breakin’ me apart,

I’m kicked,

                           of hopeless hopes I’ve prayed each night,

I’ve missed,

                  the chance to feel the so-called joy,

I go crazy,

                           Just to make my dream out of dreams.

I’m slaved,

                   by soulless rules of human reason,

yet I live,

                  wakin’ out’f awakening,

                        reachin’ beyond existence.

 

 

-musicfunk-

Reviews

[mhaie]

NICE!!

[Myra]

Great structure and individuality!

[CHRIS ANDES]

hm,thanks Myra
=]

[Chip]

The repetition is really good. There is so much emotion in it yet it's short. Well Done!

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks
;p

[astronaut]

I like the font you used because it added to the feel of the poem. Your poetry is great and neat. It doesn't seem like your work is forced and that is good because many people are too fixated on grammar and formating they don't realise the story is all that matters and editing comes last, even if it isn't perfect, and you do a neat job with that. Can't wait to read more of your work, it is very entertaining and unique! :)

[Fréyjä Helv..]

I sense deep sorrow and desperation... A good read. Nice work...

[....]

This has a lyrical feel to it, nicely done, but so sad.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thank you =]

[kc]

,

[Chris]

has a lyric-quality

[dan nacario]

so sad..yet a great piece..

[hopelessromantic]

nice:)