Am I alone?

Wrote this about a year ago

There are places to be,

but such little time to go.

I have dreams to be patient for,

I can't let go.

I must stride through,

until the very end.

Until then, I wait here,

with the excitement of a future

to be awakened.

It's like a song,

 that will be sung;

It's like a book,

that will be written;

A child, that will be born.

So many paths to choose from...

Are they dark?

Or are they light?

I need you to guide me through these places

that await me.

Will you help me follow my stars?

Or am I completely alone?

Reviews

[David Marsden]

Yet another verse with meaning. I like the story. Someone calling out for guidance, I think we all need that. We ask our friends, our family, God, for help along the way. It's a lonely path on your own.
This brings the phrase to mind, 'seek and you shall find.' Thankfully we are never alone all the time.
see how much emotion you've stired in me. Get out the hammer and chisel.

[Neytri]

Its such a beautiful piece dear poetess.
Regards.
Neytri

[Annie Nicole]

Thank you!

[TigerSpirit]

If I may suggest, turning "I can't let go" to "I can't let it go" although this may change the meaning slightly, so won't blame you if you choose to ignore this.

Other changes I would suggest...

"until the end."

"Until then, I wait here," (remove comma after 'then')

"with the excitement of the future"

"A child, that will be born." (remove comma after 'child')

By doing these little changes, I'm confident the poem will read a lot smoother.

Other than that, a truly beautiful sweet poem, well done.

Hope I didn't offend :)

[Annie Nicole]

Thank you for your time spent editing my writings, although i will definitely look over your suggestions, I cannot say for sure that I will change them. Just because I may look at my poems totally different from you and be happy about the way it follows through. I'm not saying this to be rude or anything, I am just being honest with you.
Thank you though, i very much appreciate it!

[TigerSpirit]

Don't worry, I never take offense. Like you, although I accept others critiques of my own writings, I don't always take onboard their suggestions, so am never offended when my suggestions aren't taken onboard as I understand I could have misinterpreted your intentions. I'm just glad I didn't offend. :)

[A hare off]

Such a nice poem of longing for that special someone to walk along with you.

[Annie Nicole]

I never truly understand my own poems sometimes and you made me look at it in a whole new way, so thank you! : )

[David Marsden]

Sometimes words come to you in a flash, like a message, and you write them down before you forget, then later you read them over and think, wow I like this. It is then written in stone.