when i needed someone

 

when i was alone...

i always needed someone...

to talk with..to share with..

when i needed someone...

my world was without colours...

no one was around..

when i needed someone...

crowded road also seemed alone..

it was so lonely...

when i needed someone...

you were the only one to be with me

standing besides me all through...

when i needed someone...

you held me up...walked with me

without caring for this world..

when i needed someone...

you felt my pain...when i was sad

you were always around...

when i needed someone...

you understood me the best...

i was so glad...

when i needed someone...

you cried when i was weeping..

b'coz you cared so much..

when i needed someone...

you were the one holding me ..

i love you....but its so unspoken..!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

dedicated to my best friend..she was always with me throughout in good or bad situation...worth of a person is known if he or she stands beside u in bad condition..

Reviews

[Curiosity and Black Ang..]

I like the topic of this poem. But it does seem to be written vaguely. I think there needs to be more emotion here. I suggest to further explore your relationship to your best friend. The thing every writer tries to do is instantly hook their reader in. Throughout the poem I looked for that hook. If you find that hook, then the poem will be exceptional.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

You have a pure raw talent here.. I feel the emotions quite well through your path.. for being 15 you are such an aspiring soul! You also note that one truth that takes many awhile to figure out and that is finding out who your true friends are in the bad conditions as you have placed in your bottom note! You mention you love your friend but not if they are a boy or girl.. I think maybe boy because as you mention it is unspoken.. later on you never know.. if it is a he.. he just might be your true one! Love your writing.. I really sense lonliness.. you have friends here too!!! =)

[We are young.]

This reminds me of my best friend! she is always there. this was great made me happy

[Jera]

I agree with Bhavya but i thought it was great either way.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A beautiful poetic tribute to your friend. Beautifully penned.

[Voice]

This is such an emotional and beautiful poem...

Voice

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I liked this piece of writing, there were few instances in the poem which really are very well penned!
But there is just one thing which I always wanted to say while reviewing your work , and that is about grammar.
You still need to work upon that! :)

But indeed I enjoyed this piece of writing,
the repetition of the line "when i needed someone..." , could have been avoided....it is making it more like a song lyric than a poem...
Even though this poem stands in your special work!
Great write!