Mosh

I find mosh pits to be liberating; the conscious decision to release your safety into the hands of strangers releases my regret and timid habits.

Boiling; the intensity

Intensely

Increases

Building

Resentment

Thrown into the pit; slightly

Empty in understanding as to the danger at

The mercy of the

Thrashing; the

Throng swallows the frame of a

Painting not quite yet

Completed

Begging to be

Spattered with the

Sweat of the

Masses

Blood of the

Fearless

Traced with the uncertainty of

Pain; the promise of such

Well composed blooming

Bruises; on the limbs of

The fighter

As he proves his

Paintbrush

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I am too old to know the experience of a mosh pit, but I do understand the breaking free of inhibition and the need to do something wild and daring. I think you have captured that feeling well. Your use of the theme of a painting throughout is unexpected and original.

[GamingGal]

Wow, I never would have thought I would see a poem about a mosh pit! They can be quite fun, but dangerous at the same time, which you capture exquisitely.

I must say your writing reminds me of Ellen Hopkins and her books. Have you ever read those? You should if you haven't. Perhaps you'll see what I'm talking about :)

[Heather Clayton]

Well, as an old-timer mosher you wrote it beautifully, very artistic with the words...