You speak of this person as sort of an addiction. Your addicted to them and when you leave it's like withdrawals. I loved the line "Fingers designed for tragedie touch" I think it fits perfectly in wth what you are talking about. Great Job, I would however try not to make the reading so cluttered, It was a bit hard to read. Although I think the style is perfect, like your suffocating without them, and it is shown through your writting.
~Aradie
This is great. When I read it the first thing I thought was the loss of love so if that was the point then you got it! It kind of seems like the speaker was betrayed and expressing their feelings.
But all in all, I liked it. :)
You speak of this person as sort of an addiction. Your addicted to them and when you leave it's like withdrawals. I loved the line "Fingers designed for tragedie touch" I think it fits perfectly in wth what you are talking about. Great Job, I would however try not to make the reading so cluttered, It was a bit hard to read. Although I think the style is perfect, like your suffocating without them, and it is shown through your writting.
~Aradie
I love it!
One thing I don't get is the part where you say 'The pain in your heart, Has traveled to this pen, Fingers designed for tragedies to touch.'
I don't really see how that fits, but it's pretty early so maybe that's why.
Other than all of that, I loved it.
One of the best I've read from you. (so far)
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