Fading Nights, and Silent Sighs

splaying her fingers in tune with the wind, shadows slowly traverse gentle curves...and slowly the coming dawn brings with it the remnants of the interaction through the silent echoing sighs.

Passing below the veiled moon,
a lithe body dances, within cream light

Soft skin,  the color of White roses,
becomes illuminated...
and beneath her feet, the water

Navy, blue ripples...
splaying her fingers in tune with the wind
foxgloves-pale purple- sway..

and in time the shadows, traverse the waves
slowly crawling upon gentle curves,
and sweet amber locks, 

which melt like caramel upon, obsidian darkness

hard, and fast, her pulse races
as the moon sets,
and the dawn brings a soft pink glow...

The shadowy hands recede,
and she falls softly, into navy waters...

White, Rose on blue Lakes...dissipate

and petals dance, with her fading sighs...

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

I really like the feel of the poem. I seemed to have slid into the words and loved the way they wrapped around my soul.

Regards,
Al

[ranscan]

"splaying her fingers in tune with the wind, shadows slowly traverse gentle curves...and slowly the coming dawn brings with it the remnants of the interaction through the silent echoing sighs"
I found this breathtaking, then found its bones strewn within the caressing lines of verse, terse and yet languid flowing imagery, a deep pulse urging one onward.

[songstress]

Thanks for the review. I appreciate the amount of thought and time you took into reading my piece.

[V]

I really like your choice of words, very picturesque yet a tad opaque but still adorable. The tone of your poem reads like a sigh somehow, something smooth and effortless weaved into your writing that makes it easy for the reader to follow.

[songstress]

Thank you for the review. I've never had anyone say my writing is opaque before, and I rather like it...I mean some of the best moments in life come from the unexpected, right? well, thank you for the review I appreciate it.

[V]

You're welcome. It's opque because the pictures are so intense and vivid that my mind struggles to find a sort of leitmotif, something to grasp to create an even image yet I don't mean it in a negative way, it's just something I noticed.

[songstress]

oh, no, I never took it in a negative light. I just meant that I liked it, really I liked the comment. And that it was a first. I really do like the use of the word opaque.

[V]

Ok. Then you're welcome again.

[William Liston]

Where have you been all this time!? I have no idea why I haven't read/reviewed your poetry before. This is simply amazing. I loved your imagery and vocabulary. There isn't a thing about this that I can critique. Lovely work, I'm almost speechless.

-William Liston

[songstress]

Thank you for being so kind in your words. I appreciate the thought.