Keep It Safe

A poem i wrote for my best friend on her birthday

Your another year older
and another year ahead
"maybe when your older"
is what our parents always said

but now your finally there
and as much as it hurts
your gonna have to controll
all those meaningless flirts

now the boys will look
in a way that wasnt before
and theyll try to get to you
like your some kind of w***e...

they wont mean a thing
that comes out of there mouth
they only want what youve got
and they want your 'south'

but once in a while
a good guy comes along
to buy you teddy bears
and even sing you songs

keep him with you forever
hold on to him tight
dont ever let him go
without a hell of a fight

jst dont gve it up
till youre sure about who
the guy you know is right
for you and only you

trust me when i say this
youll never regret the past
as long as you wait
and dont move too fast

i say this because i care
and i dont want you to fall
for the wrong guy
and give him your all

we once made a deal
wait till at least sixteen
your one year closer
now your fifteen

now im begging you please
wait a few more years
it seems my surroudings
have caused all these fears

i see it all happen
and i wonder why
all these girls loose it so fast
and then realize the lie

i know its tempting
and i know its hard too
but when it comes down to it.
remeber i love you!

Author's Note

This is kinda long and sappy.

Reviews

[Li Li]

It's great to see somebody use words in a meaningful way such as this. You made many validated points that our younger generations should pay attention to. When boys/girls are young, they don't understand the true value of relations. It's just something sloppily thrown around as a game. And later, the girl does become the w***e.

I think the only correction I need to point out is the "Y" that's left out in the very first ling on "our".

Other than that, great message!

Bless!

[These Haunted Hallways]

Not sappy at all, love :) This was very beautiful!! I totally agree with everything you've said here. Extremely well points u make here. The line that stood out for me was: "I say this because i care and i dont want you to fall for the wrong guy and give him your all." That line was greatly said. U dont want to go too fast in anything. Ur absolutely right, cause i see these young girls pushin' strollers at such a young age, and some of them have such sad faces on them, and it's just a sad sight to see them like that. But, i guess we live and learn the hard way. I know i have. I agree with you that people should wait until the time is very very right, with the very very right person. All we need is love in everything we do. But we should always wait for True Love, and then later it shall come true ;) Cool poem!

B.A.

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

Not sappy at all, hon. It's great. I think a poem should hold some sort of lesson to be learned. This has done just that. Kudos to you. It's wonderful. I know a few people I'd love to have read this.

[wizthom]

when to give it up,when to hold on,when to let go,,question of life,,loved it wizthom

[Bleeding Ink Anthology]

this is really good. i like it. very smart too!

[Chistie]

awww, thats so sweet! I love it!! Good job!!