I Want

I want every inch of your love
Every fragment of your touch
The soft feelings of your lips
I yearn for no lust

I want your undying love
The key to your heart
In exchange you'll get mine
Because your gods work of art

I want to hold hands
Under the moon lit stars
To always be oh so close together
even though we are oh so far

I want you to cry tears
So i can wipe them dry
With just one kiss
Ill dry your eyes

I want you in my life
But its not what it seems
Because Im unable to love you
The girl in my dreams

 

Reviews

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

so full of passion and excellant use of graphic terms. a excellant repreentation

[Ember]

I think the imagery in this work is stunning, really. Much like many of your others, this has such a nice rythm to it and a lot of depth. Excellent word formation here, and again, the emotion is easily read, you convey it well. A job extremely well done!

[Steffi]

Really nice. The imagery really painted the scene and the emotions really nicely.
I like how in the end it said
"I want you in my life
But its not what it seems
Because Im unable to love you
The girl in my dreams"

[JC Fox]

Again and if I were the lucky girl I'd be all over you like white on rice because this poem is simply stunning.

[justjenn_2u]

The girl of your dreams may read this poem one day. This poem conveys the love that you are willing to give when the right girl comes along. Very good write!!!

[Jazmyne]

i have to say that i dont know many guys who would pour their feeling out and let everyone read them! the way you had passion for this gave a sense of journey to your thoughts. there is one part that i didnt really understand
"I want you to cry tears
So i can wipe them dry
With just one kiss
Ill dry your eyes" the poem had a great flow but maybe because a word was used twice. i dont know it kind of threw off the rythem. dont get me wrong i loved this. but maybe changin it up or not!

[Liz]

Oh my I love this poem it really reminds me how I think of love and that is how the guy of my dreams would treat me. I really love this one it really struck me maybe you'll find that one. I don't know but I hope that you do...... Keep writing!
Lizzie

[PhoeniX]

oooh...love it!

something about guys writing poems like this melts me. since most guys i know dont like to show emotion that much or what-not its nice to read what and how they would feel when they show the emotion of love.

truely enjoyed every word of this one. keep it up! the way you write has struck my interest. ;-)

don't stop.

[Lydia Shutter]

Fantastic imagery in this one. The longing is palpable and the fantasy flows beautifully. Lydia