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A Poem by xlunalovex
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This is what I wrote during math class XD

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The crow sitting on my shoulder
Shows you that I am the holder
Death is near
Keep grasp on that beer

Your eyes grow wide
As your mom slaps your hide
You were always rude
Always used

I hate you with a passion
It's time for a bashin'
I am your killer
It's time for your thriller

I grasp the knife tighter
Your faces grow whiter
I drop it to the ground
Maybe I will just release the hound

I rethink the moments
I rethink our life
What the hell
I return to the knife

© 2010 xlunalovex


Author's Note

xlunalovex
I was just kind of venting and releasing my sadness. I kinda freestyled. XP

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I like the emotion in this as well. We are lucky to have pen and paper to listen to us and no judge us like others around us. We know that our words are safe and understood when released onto paper. It's always good to talk out your problems, but if no one to talk to, talk to paper...write on paper with that emotion pen and just talk, talk, talk. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the emotion in this as well. We are lucky to have pen and paper to listen to us and no judge us like others around us. We know that our words are safe and understood when released onto paper. It's always good to talk out your problems, but if no one to talk to, talk to paper...write on paper with that emotion pen and just talk, talk, talk. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great write, i like to freestyle too :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Good poem, but don't use the knife. Lol.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Ima
okay!!!
i just LOVED the ending =P
you did a great job!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Love the last stanza. Nicely done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i loved it

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lol I loved the last part;
"I rethink the moments
I rethink our life
What the hell
I return to the knife"
Idk y but it made me smile even though the poem is filled with anger. This was an amazing poem. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a great poem, I l ove the anger in your words, my favorite
"I rethink our moments
I rethink our life
What the hell
I return the knife"

(: I love the poem. Great write!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good flow and definately sense anger. Math class must not have went well. :o)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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xlunalovex
xlunalovex

Philly, PA



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Hey. So about me? I am basically a shy, smart girl. I am in all honor classes which means during the school year I will be on writer's cafe once in a while. I usually write about darkness and rain. Lo.. more..

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