Sometimes

Sometimes

A Chapter by Closed

Sometimes I wish 
you were here 
To hold my hand, 
make me cheer 

Sometimes I wish 
I could disappear 
From the face of earth 
having nothing to fear 

Sometimes I wish 
To not feel the urges 
Which make my heart 
Tremble with desire 

Sometimes I wish 
I had someone to hold on to 
For all my emotions to rely upon 

Then I realize: 
"If wishes were horses 
Beggars would ride"



© 2017 Closed



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Introspection can be an amazing thing, as well as a pain in the unmentionables, as we look at where we are and where we thought we would be, wondering if there is a short cut to our own state of happiness. I think your last line answers this perfectly, that it wouldn't be worth having if it were easy. Nicely captured.

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Thank you for your insight here! And I agree, somethings are better off being wishes..



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If wishes came true, you wouldnt want to have them in the first place. This is why we dont wish at all

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Some wishes do come true.. you never know which but they do and that's what keep us wishing..
Introspection can be an amazing thing, as well as a pain in the unmentionables, as we look at where we are and where we thought we would be, wondering if there is a short cut to our own state of happiness. I think your last line answers this perfectly, that it wouldn't be worth having if it were easy. Nicely captured.

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Thank you for your insight here! And I agree, somethings are better off being wishes..
Well you also can't ride two horses with one a*s.
The Ice queen sometimes wants to be held and to hold. You ever try holding ice - it burns man!! lol
Then it melts and looks like youve wet your pants.

Key my friend. This seems a little clunky -
"Sometimes I wish
I had someone to hold on
For all my emotions to rely upon " - the 'on' ending of the two lines isn't as polished as the rest. Perhaps 'someone to hold on to' ?

Hey you're leaving us today :((
You'll be missed!!
xxx

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Hey, Tony! Thanks man! For the correction.. I re read it and you're right!
I'm not leaving t.. read more
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome Key.
:)
A delightful write indeed & just like my immediate predecessor, I have to agree, the last few lines are really quite something. Oh' by the way my new found literary friend, I am INFJ

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Hey thanks alot for liking and reviewing....
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Powerful and profound closing lines!

Raw honest expression that is passion filled. Starz

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Thank you Starzy, for liking and reviewing ☺
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You're very welcome I hope to spend more time visiting your work
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Yeah feel free ☺
"If wishes were horses
Beggars would ride"

I love that line as a conclusion to this. You seem to have a way with capturing emotions that we all feel eventually, but in your own unique way -- in your own distinct voice. I love that. :)

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Thank you for the appreciation Sante!! It means a lot :)
Asante

1 Year Ago

Without worry! Just calling it how I see it. :)
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1 Year Ago

Thanks again😂😉

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Added on November 22, 2016
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