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A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Attempt at writing lyrics

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The mere thought of you
Bein' happy 
Yet so far away from me 
You are happy 
Without me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
Watching the wind caress your hair 
You infront of me 
Yet so far away from me 
You found someone else 
Better than me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not 
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
Maybe you're just 
Enclosed in a shell 
And you don't wanna share 
What you actually feel 
With me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not 
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
I'm breaking down 
slowly
slowly 
Coz 
I'm never gonna be
okay with it..



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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This is really well done. Catchy lyrics, I would certainly listen to this if it was a song!
The words are very easy to relate to and portray that emotion really well. Pretending to be okay, wearing a mask, when it really isn't okay...
Great work!

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you for your words here, Nerissa! Glad you like it (:
Sinbulvinter

2 Months Ago

I love good lyricists, especially seeing how in mainstream american music - there really aren't many.. read more



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mou
it is so emotional and through your words "And I'm okay with it
I'm okay with it
Maybe I'm not
But I will be
Sometime soon
Okay with it " , it is quite vivid that how much pain is there..not only the mentioned person but you also don't want to share your actual depth of pain! but unfortunately , in this world these true feelings and tears have no value..beautiful write

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, mou! These words have come to be some sort of a chant for me to get alongwith lif.. read more
mou

9 Months Ago

yes very true.... and it is my pleasure :)
I Love this! It makes me want to sing it, I don't know why. Good flow.

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey thank you so much! I wish I could compose music for this one..
I'm glad you liked it ☺
You gave me great imagery with the wind caressing hair. Very well written. I could relate 1000 percent to this and I know the struggle. Keep writing girl! You're fantastic. xx

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Posted 9 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! ☺
They definitely work as lyrics. I've been trying to write some myself and it's not straightforward so well done :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey thank you so much! This was my first attempt but I'll keep trying ☺
And I'll be sure to.. read more
I think it's good that you're trying new things, Yumna! Who knows, maybe you'll be a famous songwriter in the future ;)

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Haha I wanted to be a singer 😉 but yeah songwriter ain't that bad either 😛
Thank you f.. read more
I felt the verses contained some words that might not be best for a song - but that's the poet-you in mid-mode. That's fine (for now lol)
But the shining edge to this is the refrain YumnaKay.
I'm picturing Coldplay, I'm picturing Fall Out Boy, I'm picturing Bruno Mars. Meaningful lyrics with a sincere tragic-ness to them.
Go you !
:))

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Posted 9 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hahaha I've yet to master the mixing material thingy 😂
Well um I think both 😛😉
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

YumnaTodd. lol
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Todd? 😯😯😯
Ah, bittersweet love. I love it. A bit melancholic but she will be okay eventually. Pretty damn fine piece of poetry. It has just the right amount of repetitiveness, which I like. Good job.

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you! This wasn't exactly love but based on the loss of a dear friend..
I'm glad you lik.. read more

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