Chapter 4

Chapter 4

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

She was sweating and breathing heavily when she woke up from her nap. That face. Why did she have to see that face now? She thought with anguish. It had been nearly 4 years now but still she’d not been able to forget him. Four years of agony and trying to be normal.


She remembered the first time she’d met him at her sophomore year. He’d walked in with ease and sat down beside her without even asking. She’d raised her eyebrows questioningly at him but said nothing.


“Hey, I’m Julian… and you are?” He asked, introducing himself in a friendly tone.


“I’m Jane.” She said in an offhand voice, as if offended that he hadn’t known her name.


He smiled, “I see. Nice to meet you, Jane.” He seemed keen to carry on the conversation but luckily their teacher entered the classroom and he was forced to face the front.


Throughout the day and during lessons they didn't talk, but she could tell he was desperate to communicate with her. He even tagged alongside her during break times. Even though she felt flattered, she felt a little flustered too. She took a deep breath and decided to confront him.


“Look,” she said with a hint of menace in her voice, “I don’t know what your problem is but why don’t you stop tagging behind me and leave me alone?”


“What?” He said with a look of confusion etched on his face


“I’m not your type, okay?” She said, softening her tone a bit.


His expression changed "I'm sorry, I didn't mean to alarm you, that’s not my intention. I just noticed how you don't sit with the other girls and thought you could do with a little company. I thought we could be friends, that's all. Anyway, I'll let you get on with your day." He shrugged his shoulders and started to walk away.


Instantly feeling remorseful, she fell in steps behind. After all, it wouldn't hurt if she got a friend for a change. She touched his arm and attempted to re-engage in conversation.

 

"Hey, look I'm sorry.." 

 

Julian turned and could see the look of sorrow in Jane's eyes.

 

Jane continued trying to bring things back to normal "So what were you saying?"

 

Julian laughed and right then and there she fell in love with the sound of it.


That was the start of a new beautiful era for Jane. She liked his company and whenever she was with him, she laughed and smiled more than she had ever in her entire life.


Until their senior year came, he’d finally proposed to her and they’d been dating. They’d decided to take admission in college together too. It was a coincidence that they were both interested in studying law but in a strange way it made her happy.


Everything had been fine and going smooth until the day when she came to find out that horrible fact which ruined not her life but the prospect of a happy life with Julian in future.


She shuddered. Think positive now. She told herself. It’s all over. Thinking about it won’t help.


She looked up as the steward came to ask her for drinks.




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Aloha Yumna, that was a nice bit of back story. I had been wondering how a connection would be made. It seems like Jane and Julian are destined to cross paths again. Would love to know what it was that ruined their relationship. Just thinking of how Jane being on the flight could possibly affect Julian's plan & the hi-jacking... Izzy

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Ahh well there lies the twist and that is explained in the next chapters as well. Yes, they will cro.. read more
Island Hippy

6 Months Ago

I agree it's not focal point at this stage but planting intrigue is a great skill I think :)



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This is good background & now we get to see more of the connection between the guys in the last 2 chapters, & Jane from chapter 1. I was hoping you'd get back to Jane becuz the first chapter left me wanting to know a lot more about her. Here's the part I didn't find believable. Here's this guy that hanging around seeming creepy to Jane, but just becuz she hears his laugh, then everything turns into roses & rainbows suddenly. This does not feel like real life. It would be more believable if their backstory included some realistic tensions, as well as the lovey-dovey part of the story.

Another thing . . . I'm not seeing where this is happening until the final sentence . . . oh, she's in the airplane! At the beginning when she awakens from her dream, it would be good to have some description of her surroundings so we know she's in the airplane right off, rather than waiting until the last sentence.

Hopefully my observations are helpful. I know you must know I very much like your writing & I may not be telling you that for every chapter, becuz I'm focusing on possibilities for improvement. But believe me, I would never dive into a book unless it was good compelling writing! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Aloha Yumna, that was a nice bit of back story. I had been wondering how a connection would be made. It seems like Jane and Julian are destined to cross paths again. Would love to know what it was that ruined their relationship. Just thinking of how Jane being on the flight could possibly affect Julian's plan & the hi-jacking... Izzy

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Ahh well there lies the twist and that is explained in the next chapters as well. Yes, they will cro.. read more
Island Hippy

6 Months Ago

I agree it's not focal point at this stage but planting intrigue is a great skill I think :)
Oooh! Jane's past love was Julian, the hijacker!
And they might meet again on the plane...
Woah! This story's getting intense chapter by chapter Yumna!
Amazing job!!! I'm really engaged! :)
I found some mistakes...
I think it should be "he" then "her" in this sentence... "as if offended that he hadn’t known his name." :)
And...
"“I don’t know what you problem is but why don’t you stop tagging behind me and leave me alone?”
Change the "you" to "your" :)
I'm going to be reading the next chapter tomorrow hopefully :)



Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

I seem to remember having seen these mistakes but being lazy I didn't get to them lol :p thank you f.. read more
Im not your type!!?? What!? LOL

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Grrr are you even reading it all? 😎😛

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