Chapter 5

Chapter 5

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

All of them lunged forward as Kevin hit the brakes and the Chevy screeched to a halt, nearly crashing into the car in front of them.


“Hey man! Watch it!” Drake shouted. “Now’s not a good time to start collecting tickets, alright!


Julian watched Drake’s menacing expression from the back view mirror as he told Kevin off.


"It's cool! What's drivin' without a bit of fun, eh?" Kevin sniggered, but at the same time managed a puppy dog face as he looked back at Drake.


"Yeah, and that fun could cost you little more than a few bucks than you could manage! Just hold that fun for until we're on the plane. You can have all the fun you want there!"Drake winked back at the guys through the back mirror.


"Guys, stop playing around and get real for once!" Julian said, a little exasperated.


"Okay, okay, get going!" Drake sounded apologetic for once. Julian mused.


"Do we have everything? Sure we're not missing anything out here?" Drake cast a hawk's eye inside the truck as he abruptly changed his voice business like.


"Don't fret, Drake! We have it all. I double checked it." Julian's voice seeped with confidence.


“Well, good for us that you did that.” Drake said, gruffly.


The back door opened and all of them climbed out of it.


"What will happen to this?" Kevin pointed at the truck. "Will we be able to get it back from here?"


He was looking so wistfully at the truck that Julian couldn't help feel sorry. The truck was after all Kevin's most prized possession. He'd dedicated much of his life to his van. Spending tireless hours on it, at any given time.


"'Course we will!" He clapped his hand on his back, reassuring him. He observed the men Drake had brought with him. They seemed devoid of any emotion as they walked silently beside them. They'd uttered no word up till now. Turning to him, he saw Drake was already watching him.


"I know what you're thinking, Ju. They're good at what I brought them for. And let's face it, d'you really wanna be pals with 'em?" He said in an undertone, smirking.



Julian shrugged and pressed on the important issue.


"Before we go in, we need to strategize here on how we're going to take in the stewards."



He led them to a secluded corner of the parking lot and faced them.


"Now then. we're five of us; all of us need to get to the men's room to change into our disguises. The man said that's where the stewards are gonna be about this time. Just grab hold of them and," he took out a bottle of chloroform which he had bought earlier, "this will do the rest." He shook the bottle in front of them, smiling grimly.


“Is it powerful enough?” Drake asked, submissively.


“Yup, it’s powerful enough to render them subconscious for a good eight hours or more so they don’t blab on us.” Julian was on the verge of keeping it all smooth and more intent on reassuring himself than the others as he voiced those words.


"Dude, it's not just chloroform, it's mixed with something else." Julian said, his expression smug. "All you guys need to know is what's contained in this bottle is enough chemical mixture to knock any human being out cold for the next few hours, leaving us uninterrupted and to be able to get on with the job in hand."


“Come on now, enough of the pep talk! Let’s get it over with!” Drake growled.




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



My Review

Would you like to review this Chapter?
Login | Register




Featured Review

The first sentence - Take out either screech or screeeched because to have both is unnecassary.

Regarding the sentence beginning with 'Guts stop goofing' - change the word 'goofing' - the reason why I say this is because of the serious nature of the story, 'goofing'doesn't fit.

With this sentence....“Well, good for us that you did that. Drake said, gruffly.”- take out the quotation marks and put them after the word 'that'

Take out the first or second 'them' in the following sentence -The back door opened all them of them climbed out.

There are a couple of other things, but you have given the reader a great idea of what was going on and what is yet to come.I think its going to be a lot of fun when the guys board the plance. Interesting times are ahead.

Mark.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you for the suggestions here, Mark. I'll get to them. I'm glad it's keeping your interest 😊
matrixmark

8 Months Ago

Just trying to help.

Mark.



Reviews

Kebin is a dare devil! I knew they were spies. Desguises!?

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

They're not spies 😎😑 just some cute guys doing someone else's dirty work lol 😛😉
.. read more
The first sentence - Take out either screech or screeeched because to have both is unnecassary.

Regarding the sentence beginning with 'Guts stop goofing' - change the word 'goofing' - the reason why I say this is because of the serious nature of the story, 'goofing'doesn't fit.

With this sentence....“Well, good for us that you did that. Drake said, gruffly.”- take out the quotation marks and put them after the word 'that'

Take out the first or second 'them' in the following sentence -The back door opened all them of them climbed out.

There are a couple of other things, but you have given the reader a great idea of what was going on and what is yet to come.I think its going to be a lot of fun when the guys board the plance. Interesting times are ahead.

Mark.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you for the suggestions here, Mark. I'll get to them. I'm glad it's keeping your interest 😊
matrixmark

8 Months Ago

Just trying to help.

Mark.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

175 Views
2 Reviews
Rating
Added on March 17, 2017
Last Updated on April 25, 2017


Author

Dr. YumnaKay
Dr. YumnaKay

Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



About
~ In search of a new me ~ more..

Writing
Tenterhooks Tenterhooks

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay