Haiku: Dreams

They're MINE.

My dreams

Mine alone, and not for sale;

Happiness can't be paid.

Reviews

[Forever Hidden]

Zainab, I just want to point out a few things.

The first line is suppose to have 5 syllables
Second line is great
Third line has to be cut down by 1 syllable

I hope this helped!

[Zainab UF]

I know that haiku usually follow the 5-7-5 form, but I find that haiku in English do not necessarily keep to this structure as long as the total number of syllables remain under 17.

Thanks for pointing it out, though. I appreciate your taking the time to read and review my work. :)

[Aehr]

wow, true words here!

I certainly love it! The topic of dreams is something I'm very fascinated with. And I love the way you said 'Happiness can't be paid' I like your possessiveness for your dreams. Trust me - I feel the same. :P A very nice haiku, soothing and simple...

Awesome write, in all!
Rhea

[Zainab UF]

Thank you, Rhea! :)

[Aehr]

my pleasure :)