…ONCE UPON A TIME…

…ONCE UPON A TIME…

A Poem by zaisham9393


…ONCE UPON A TIME…








I trusted every word you said

Just like a meaningless song stuck in my head

The stories you read to me

Not even one turned out to be true

I was never scared

I just wish I was prepared

What a pity 

You can’t trust me

I can’t let you win

Putting my trust in you was a sin

Even roses hurt

I feel betrayed by you

I bet you feel the same too

Dear life…

You should have warned me

Before I stepped in…

That there is no such thing as…

A fairy-tale ending!










© 2017 zaisham9393



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Nicely put. Simple yet strong.
I look at it as a person wanting to do well in life but then life turns into a fairy tail "full of twists and turns". That life is not going the way the person wished that it would have gone. How they had a path, a life, a set of goals, but life had other plans for them. They felt cheated.
That my take on it... how'd I do? 100/100 from me.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

3 Months Ago

OMG!Your every review is truly amazing!
your thoughtful reviews and suggestions were very hel.. read more



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Made me wonder if perhaps the joy of fairy tale endings sets us all up to fail. Your words are so powerfully moving, dark and deep, like a beautiful, bittersweet song.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)!
I love your work so much :)!
An owl on the moon

7 Months Ago

Your work is amazing! :)
Yeah. I feel the same when we are young we are filled with those mad thoughts of fairytales and happy endings and love etc. While we grow up and face the hardships of life and when our eyes open with a heartbreak we tend to realise then that there is so such thing as a happy ending. Life is really not a bed of roses. I truly loved this poem it had emotion it had truth. I would be at loss if I wouldn't have read it. Thank you so much for sharing. Please feel free to send me read requests I look forward to them I totally love your every poem even though I've read few. Thank you so much I enjoyed reading this I am glad I came across this poem. Truly well written. It touched my heart.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this review.That's very kind of you :)!
Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

You're welcome
"Putting my trust in you was a sin"
i like it.
My mom always told me to not trust anyone, even your best friends,if the tell you a secret, protect it like it was your own, but don't ever give your secrets to anyone at all. trust no one and always be prepared.
Thank you for sharing XD

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

6 Months Ago


First of all, what I meant here was more in a figuratively rather than literal. It’s just .. read more
Cara

6 Months Ago

from where i see it, be a trustworthy but never expect the other side to be. you can love and have r.. read more
zaisham9393

6 Months Ago

I agree Cara.Thank you :)!
The first mistake
A band of soldiers finds diplomacy in the dreg forest comes with consequences.
Andrew Nelson Stewart Andrew Nelson Stewart
In poetry and to find answers of who we are while walking the ephemeral road upon cracks of pain signs leading you.
Love this! I read the last line as fairy tale end because it rhymed but fairy tale ending works too! I'm a rhyming fool, but you knew that!
Great passionate piece! I wish I new this before life hit me! But all well that ends well!
Well done! Tabby

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much Tabby :)!
I like the comparison with the rose: even beautiful things can hurt. This poem relays very well the idea and experience of heartbreak.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much Clfford :)!
Nice emotional depth and a good moral as well, fairy tales exist on paper not in real life. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)!
Great writing about life, and so true. You feel the disappointment.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

7 Months Ago

Thank you Hebe :)!

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