...OPEN YOUR EYES WIDE...

...OPEN YOUR EYES WIDE...

A Poem by zaisham9393

 OPEN YOUR EYES WIDE

 

I have things to say

Do you have the time to listen?

I have questions to ask

Cause…

I’ve lost it all but you can’t see what’s missin’

 

 

Vacant spaces

No use even if I fill them with love

They will turn to poison and dust

Won’t get anything back

I am tired of trying and breaking

I am tired of love, accused of lying

I am tired of the abuse, but I keep trying

 

Your questions on my intentions

The way you treat, the way you mention

The way you portray me

But I forget, forgive and give

I forget, forgive and give

All those confrontations and interventions

All the love and pure intentions

Left unacknowledged, you don’t even pay attention


 

All I want is to live in peace

And it's time for you to leave

Won’t let your big mouth damage my self-esteem

Won’t let your nightmare ruin my dream

Don’t think I’ll be your little clown

Honey, don’t force me to drag you down

All of us eventually break down

And you could end up in a ghost town


 

Better heed some advice

So just leave, leave and leave

But since I have a big heart

I won’t let you leave empty

Sometimes, it's better to give than receive

Good luck with whatever you’re trying to achieve

Don’t think people don’t get tired

With that attitude of yours

You’ll get fired before you are even hired

 

If you don’t respect someone’s story

Won’t take your apologies, I’m sorry

We break the patterns that lead to destruction

Call it a solution or an evolution.

 


© 2017 zaisham9393



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A perfect score of 100 in my opinion. I loved the strength portrayed in this poem, the determination not to let this person discourage you from pursuing your dreams. A round of applause to you for sharing this amazing poem with us and being an absolute inspiration. Excellent job!

Posted 4 Months Ago


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A tougher perspective. I read it. I am wondering the last, conclusive line, do those choice of words represent the only range of options? A tough presentation put forth. A little forceful or presumptuous. You are thoughtful, yes. But this leave me a tiny bit perplexed. Keep writing.
neurostar :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


This is a powerful write! An overcomer from an abused relationship this is very relatable to someone who is stuck and can't get out! I love how your pieces always seem to hold the emotion and strife of a real situation! Well penned!
So many women suffer in silence for fear no one believes them or becasue they have no self esteem left. A man of this caliber uses his words and hands far too much for strength to grow in a woman. It can be done as in this case, but there are some who don't get out unscathed.
Well penned!

Posted 4 Months Ago


This was extremely powerful. I love the last line!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Wow this is so powerful. Thank you so much for sharing

Posted 4 Months Ago


This read like it could have been done as a spoken word. I like the emotion here and it leaves a great message.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Drop kicking the negative to the curb. Powerful stuff. Well done

Posted 4 Months Ago


Great logic and thoughts in the poetry.
"If you don’t respect someone’s story
Won’t take your apologies, I’m sorry
We break the patterns that lead to destruction
Call it a solution or an evolution."
I did like the above lines a lot. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

If you don’t respect someone’s story Won’t take your apologies, I’m sorry We break the patterns that lead to destruction Call it a solution or an evolution.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Man, this was FANTASTIC!!! I felt and related to every single line. Don't have a single critique. Very very nice.

Posted 4 Months Ago


You did a really good job here! I enjoyed this piece. Lovely style! Keep it up

Posted 4 Months Ago



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Hi, I am Zaisha. Well, I would start by saying that writing is one of my passions, and a way to cope with feeling overwhelmed. Also, I have been working on improving my writing skills and this woul.. more..

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