SHE RISES...

SHE RISES...

A Poem by zaisham9393

SHE RISES

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She told things he thought would never hear

Maybe, he underestimated her all those years


She poured out her heart

And he always ripped it apart

The darkness surrounded

As the poison of love suffocated her

Her dreams crumbled down

She sat by the door

Waiting to hear no more


He said, she let him down

But soon realized

It was the other way around

She was more than a pretty face

She had the key to win this race

She was the reason he was alive

She was heaven in his nightmare


When he realized, as he opened his eyes

How much he needed her

How he missed the way they once were

He hated himself for what he said to her

He needed her to face the light as much as to escape death

She gave him a choice

Cold words, but familiar voice


Find a way to lit the spark

Before the poison grows in this dark

As together they played with their disguises

his time to fall

makes you wonder...


ain't life full of shocking surprises

He fades as she rises.





© 2017 zaisham9393



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zaisham9393
Hope you liked this one :D!
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Thank you :)!

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I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. It was beautiful

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


The story told. Took my breath away. Thank you...

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


"He fades as she rises"
i should probably say you put the beauty in poetry - but then you you'll probably roll your eyes and sigh: 'what a line'.
your poetry truly is beautiful, and simple - also a tad melancholic (who gives a f*** right?) - and likeable. Nice :)


Posted 1 Month Ago


zaisham9393

1 Month Ago

I agree :D!
Ego destroys all! and this verse expresses it clearly. A lesson to be learnt here! Good job.

Posted 1 Month Ago


zaisham9393

1 Month Ago

More than ego, selsfishness and taking someone for granted is to blame !
thank you for review.. read more
Powerful use of description. You made the scene come alive for the reader. I enjoyed the tale and the proper ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


Reads like a familiar tale but oh, so well expressed. That is exactly how it happens.
"ain't life full of shocking surprises", aye, so it is... Nicely penned, Z (:

Posted 2 Months Ago


zaisham9393

2 Months Ago

Not more than you Dr.! you and your work are awesome :)!Thank you for reading :)!
The poem has a strong essence. Love is a strong message and souls. The idea that his death is the real antidote for her reborn gives the reader creeps and an interest in what will happen next.

She is special and she tried to wake him up, but he was buried in his own ignorance. After some time, he woke up, but it was too late. He was dead already and she born as a higher entity, touching the divinity's secrets.

"She told things he thought would never hear

Maybe, he underestimated her all those years"

Those two lines represent the climax of the entire poem. You choose them very well.

In conclusion, your dramatic story stitched a very cute flower on someone's fresh brain.

Congratulations!

100/100

Posted 2 Months Ago


zaisham9393

2 Months Ago

Thank you Jes :)!
This is a fine example of what happens often. This poem expresses reality and I like that the most about poetry.

Posted 2 Months Ago


zaisham9393

2 Months Ago

Thank you :)!
Najam Us Saher

2 Months Ago

You're welcome :)
A beautiful write! Love the description you used, and the story it told! Very well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)!

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