The Heart

it beats (everything)

Why does this happen 

 It always happens eventually

Theres no stopping it

Here comes the pain

Everything goes black

Running will not help

Anything that could help

Will not come to you 

Away it travels

Yearning for safety

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Giving up won't help

Running is no option,

Obviously, we must fight

With all our strength

Strength that is within us

The strength in our hearts

Rules our actions

Ominous thoughts defeated

Nothing can beat it

Give it a chance your heart will win....

Author's Note

WITHER AWAY ~ GROW STRONG

Reviews

[K. D. Kromminga]

Love Conquers all, true courage is facing our fears and beating them. So much of what makes us human beings comes from the heart. Its very important when we face struggle in life to realize the inner strength that we can tap from within to overcome every obstacle that may at first seem impossible for us to overcome. Very good points made in a few lines, powerful subtext that some may miss if they don't think about it while they are reading it through. Good job.

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

To be honest I didn't particularly like this poem. It's not that it's no good or written poorly, it just seems sort of bland, nearly like it's lacking heart. You mention thoughts and pain but don't delve into the emotions. The repetition you have used is more annoying than useful in poetic context.

I hope you my opinion doesn't put you off writing or anything like that. I'm just being honest and honestly I think you have definitely written better.

*Edit

It's more clever than I initially thought, I guess after reading it the first time and not liking it that much and me wanting to get 30 read reviews done had a bit of an impact on missing the real divide in your poetry.

Thanks for pointing it out.

Wither away, Grow strong!!! Nice :D

[Snow412]

Sweet poem with a great flow to it.

"Strength that is within us
The strength in our hearts
Rules our actions
Ominous thoughts defeated
Nothing can beat it
Give it a chance your heart will win...."----This was a beautiful wrap with truth painting every word. Really pretty poem. :D

[deeps]

i really enjoy this write. it's profound.
Very well written and expressed.

[MusicMartyrs]

"Give it a chance your heart will win...." it's a nice concept, optimistic, encouraging

[thatbryngirl]

nice and simple... easy to read because the words bounce off of each other. you can't run away from things but fight it, because its like you take so much energy in just running away and it doesn't even work. so you have no choice but to face your problems and face your fears. i liked the last half of it the most:) nice poem:)

[Ashley.M.E]

a pretty simple, but nice flowing poem, well done.