Unfamiliar Faces (Introduction)

I am sitting in a gloomy stationery cupboard, hiding from the people I thought were my closest friends. I do not entirely understand how this has happened. Last week, we were sharing all of our darkest, deepest secrets amongst each other. This week, all of my secrets seem to be weapons that are being used against me. The secrets I hold close to me, no longer belong to me; they belong to the whole School. I have been exposed, my secrets broadcasted, now they are public knowledge.

Every time I scuff through the corridors, with my head buried into my neck, I feel claustrophobic from all the burning stares, the haunting whispers and the spine-chilling laughter. I want to go back to last week, when I felt happier and accepted. I do not want to feel like this, a reject, disowned, cast aside. I thought I had been a good friend, I never spoke of their secrets, I treated them as my own. What did I do so terribly wrong to deserve being made to feel like an outcast?

I can hear them banging on the sturdy cupboard door that I sit behind. They are yelling through the door, every drip of venom they spit, poisons me from inside, the toxicity slowly dissolving the person I once was. I am the shadow of my original confident self.

I am not opening this door and leaving my safe-haven, to become confronted with, what once were familiar faces. I do not recognise these snakes anymore, they are not who I thought they were. 

Author's Note

A start to either a new short story, or book.

Reviews

[K. Estep]

Reading this, I can't help but sympathize with this character. Your use of imagery really captures the feelings of one who has been embarrassed and betrayed. It pulls me in and makes me wonder which secrets have been exposed, and for what purpose. Great start!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you very much for your review. It has made me want to write more of this and hopefully I will be able to continue to make the reader wonder about her secrets and be intrigued.

[KaylasPoetryBook]

Wow, this was very well written and also really easy for me to relate to. I think most people have been through this or something similar. Great job! (:

[Acucena G.]

kkkk you know that I love the topic and the poem , if it was a song I would ask you for us to sing together, great write.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you, but you wouldn't want to hear me sing, haha.

[Prritiy]

great going, when friends or anyone whom we believed in deceives it hurts more for the fact that we were deceived than what came in open.
best wishes

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Very true. I have had my fair share of 'friends', each one seems to deceive me, I don't know why, but my Mother thinks it's because I am too forgiving and caring.

[Prritiy]

I think they didn't understand what friendship is so they didn't know how to, they were not worthy of being cared.

I Pray you do have some real friends in life. :)

[Mary Effing Trexler]

Great start! A few grammatical errors, but the story is thick and otherwise well written.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you, could you point out the errors for me, please? I know school should start with a lowercase 's', but it would be great if you could let me know so I can change them.

[Mary Effing Trexler]

The lowercase s was one I noticed...seems to be an excessive amount of comma usage..personally I would suggest utilizing semi colons or hyphens. For example: " I do not want to feel like this-a reject, disowned, cast aside." or " I thought I had been a good friend; I never spoke of their secrets, I treated them as my own."
Just makes the statements stronger and eliminated the run-on sentences.
:)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you very much, that is very helpful. I will revise some of my sentences later. :)

[Mary Effing Trexler]

:) Glad I could help!

[NITHIN PURPLE]

nice work,,to reveal the story...dn't try to expose,it will flirt you!!,nice ya..writing style

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thanks for your review, the story isn't revealed just yet :) still plenty of ideas.

[minnie:)]

Wow, you have me eager to want to read chapter 1. I want to know what secret the character is talking about. Read request me chapter 1 if you don't mind please :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

That is great news, thanks for your nice review. Once I have written Chapter 1, I will send you a read request, but I don't think the secrets will be revealed just yet, so you will have to wait :P

[minnie:)]

darn :/ okay, thanks :)