Consideration Corner Forum Please help me! I'm so confuse..

Firstly, should any teacher be using the word "crap" when a student is present? And what kind of example does that set?

Well, maybe your teacher thinks that this poem needed to be deeper because of the serious theme. But perhaps it should be shortened, lol! Then again, why not just divide it into seperate verses? That way, it would probably make more sense and help to hold the reader's interest.

To be honest, I very much doubt that being "deep" is always a good thing, you know?

I also doubt that the teacher really wanted you to confuse the reader. Perhaps this was your teacher's way of saying that the poem needs to make the reader think more? You know, kind of thought-provoking? But even if I'm right about that, what use is a deep poem, if it simply confuses the reader? Surely, that would make the "deep" poem rather a bad one, don't you think, lol? 

Don't lose confidence though. I quite liked this poem. If you don't mind me asking, is it coincidence that your poem starts and finishes with the number "thirteen"? And although we tend to associate this number with bad luck, it's not strictly linked with evil. Well, that's my impression, lol! One of the strengths of this poem, is that it does seem to cover the motives for murder rather effectively. After all, that must have been at least one of your intentions?

Lastly, I'm just hoping that my advice will be of some help, lol! And it's great that you accepted my invite to join this group.

P.S. Don't tell teacher, lol!