Horror Writer's Forum Pseudopod.org and The Shadows

Reviews of my latest piece, The Shadows, will be greatly appreciated. I am looking to submit it to an online podcast horror site, Pseudopod, and would like as many suggestions and opinions as I can get before submitting.

Three things to look at above all else:
* How does it read aloud, as it is hopefully going to be presented as a podcast?
* How is the horror? Not looking for splatterpunk but is there a significant amount of gore and grissle or does it need more?
* HELP HELP HELP with the title. I am terrible at titles and especially hate this one.

If you want, send me an email with a link to a piece you want me to take a look at. Reviews will be rewarded with reviews.