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Alpha: The God's song

9 Years Ago


Hey all, I currently have a Young Adult fantasy novel with six chapters posted, though chapters are posted almost daily.  I would love to get some feedback on it,  particularly about pacing and how effective the beginning is.  Here
s the pitch:

Billie has grown up in the rustlands,  a land for outcast "misfit"  magicians who've been expelled from the underworld magical realm for their inability to perform magic.  Except Billie's grown up with a power, a power she's hidden for fourteen years, until she loses control and nearly destroys someones house,  attracting the attention of the realm.  The offer her the opportunity to attend Alpha Academy, a prestigious magical school and learnt o control her abilities.  She agrees, only to discover that the realm is far from the fairy tale wonderland she imagined.   Old grievances between the seven magical races are stirring, pitting them against each other,  while Billie discover her powers are infinitely more complex that she imagined.  She can only she manages to reconcile her power before the tide washes over.