Oklahoma's Finest Forum Reviews?

 Hello. So I recently posted the prologue of my book on this site and I was wondering if perhaps some of you guys could check it out and tell me what you think. The book is called "The Beginning of the Blood Wars", it's kind of a dark fantasy/adventure/horror type. Any feedback you have would be greatly appreciated. Also, I will review any of your work, just post the title in the comments section and I will look it up.