The Dark Ones Forum Vampire story - looking for cr..

Hello all ^.^

I'm looking for some constructive criticism on my ongoing story, Fangs and Blood. I've gotten quite a few reviews on the first chapter and 2 on each other chapter, but I was looking for more suggestions. Any and all constructive criticism is welcomed, as well as things you like about the storyline/plot/wording. You can post here, or message me, or review - however you'd like to tell me ^.^

Thanks,
Raven


Links to all chapters so you don't have to search:
Prologue & Ch 1 - The Vampire
Ch. 2 - Newly Embraced
Ch. 3 - Idea
Ch. 4 - Planning
Ch. 5 - The Elders' Decision
Ch. 6. - Beryldesdomna

What type of suggestions are you looking for?

AJ

Suggestions to improve the story and details, anything that doesn't make sense or things you think don't fit well, etc. I don't want to change around the plot too much though. Also, things you especialy like so that I'll know to work with that style throughout the story. And anything else you'd like to add ^.^

You have vampire criticism in your inbox.

AJ

^.^ Thanks much. It was really quite helpful. I've got a lot of editing ahead of me though, now ::tongue::

I will look over the story in a bit but I think when you do longer stories they shouldn't be online but made print only. I've been trying to make my longer stories either a pdf or print only (the pdf ones apply to AuthorsDen.com)