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New & is in need of Review for Review..

10 Years Ago


Hi,
I'm new and just posted:
1. a chapter for my novel writing,
2. a few poems.

I would be very appreciative of the reviews, feed backs/critiques. 
I am in need of great and honest suggestions, advice, reviews/critiques that could help me better my writing.  It may sound like every other plot but it's not, and most of the events and situations have actually took place.  Please feel free to assist me and i assure you i will return the reviews and feed backs - just let me know on which piece of work you'd like the feed back and i will be sure to take a read :D

Thanks in Advance.
(P.S. Feel free to add me and be my friend, i look forward to creating long lasting friendships.)


Just a little touch......

Smile, make them think you're happy Lie and say that things are fine And hide that empty longing that you feel Don't ever show it, just keep your heart concealed Why are the days so lonely? I wonder where, where can a heart go free? And who will dry the tears that no one sees? There must be someone to share your silent dreams Caught like a leaf in the wind Looking for a friend, where can you turn?   ⃰⃰⃰⃰    ⃰    ⃰    ⃰   August 2013   It was a wonderful sunny day; the weather was bright, with soft, white, fluffy clouds that lazily flirt across the clear blue sky.  A gentle breeze could be felt while it filtered through the tree branches and leaves.  The sun was a blazing ball of heat in the sky that heated up the atmosphere, while the ocean lay calm and inviting, also reflecting the beauty of the clear blue sky above.   It was such a peaceful and warm Friday afternoon.  The sounds of the birds singing and the ocean waves crashing against the dock or sea boulders in the distance was quite calming to her nerves and tortured soul.   Steffie was sitting in the Botanical Gardens thinking about her life and what had happen to her to change it in the last two months.   The Botanical Gardens, was a large park with various big trees and lush green grass that stretched across from one point to the other.  There were a few flowers along the park which were cut in a way that made it mesmerizing.    The Gardens were quite peaceful with children’s laughter while playing, and a few people sitting or walking around.  Occasionally, a vehicle diving through the Gardens spoiled the tranquility.   How could I have been so dense?  She asked herself over and over again.   Steffie had met Jake six months ago, but knew him for about two years before.  He’d came to her like a wolf in sheep’s clothing, pretending to be good, caring and very charming.  
  

Read the rest on my profile. Thanks in advance for taking the time to check out my story, i will return the critique/review, Promise!!!

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