False Pretences and Loss

False Pretences and Loss

A Poem by sivan

Stock exchange of this heart,

The markets fell

And you

Were a part of it all.

Calculated methodically

Balanced equations,

Frantically forced reactions

Catalyzed conveniently by the victim-

Me.

 

Sent out in rough seas on an empty tip

And now the captain must sink with the ship.

© 2011 sivan


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I love the metaphore

Posted 12 Years Ago


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. ah, this by far is the most innovative deployment of the "stock exchange" message ... and it's effective ... making this piece powerful ... and the last two lines ... add a surprise image ... the use of the word "must" is high impact ... all of it is brilliantly expressed ...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beauty definitely has a hold on these words you so elegantly pen. I am forced to take a second look as your spell weaves over my eyes and promotes another close read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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sivan
sivan

Durban, South Africa



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I am a student of computer engineering... very technical yes but i like to get lost in the creativity of poetry and writing. Im an out and proud lesbian and if anyone doesn't like that well then that .. more..

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