Do You See Me?

Do You See Me?

A Poem by ~ Czarina Iris ~

I see you
Standing behind the counter,
You're hair in your face.
Do you see me
Staring across the room,
My face hidden behind a hard cover book?
You seem busy
I am afraid to disturb you, to call out your name
but I know I have nothing to fear.
You would not hear me...
It seems you never do anymore.

I see you
Hiding your face from the world outside,
Consumed with your work.
Do you see me
Moving farther away than I ever want
To be from you?

Do you see the way
My face lightens as you walk into the room?
Do you see how my eyes
Start to sparkle when they see you?
Do you hear the way
My heart jumps when I hear your voice?

Don't you see?
Do you even care?
...
Do you see me at all?

© 2010 ~ Czarina Iris ~


Author's Note

~ Czarina Iris ~
I'm sure this is becoming a habit..
Comment, critique. Not my best piece I'm sure, but it is twenty to eleven so...

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i would say this piece makes a nice read...nothing very flashy or deep about it...however a smooth flow holds the interest of the reader...the simplicity of the piece and describing a complex state of mind are to me the mainstay of this write.

good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I liked this piece too. I really thought you did a great job. I loved the message within this piece as well. It has great flow. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really liked this piece it had a very strong emotion that i can relate to. Great work of art.

Posted 10 Years Ago


very nicely penned.
sweet and simple makes for some of the best work.
youe emotion transfers well from you to "paper" to the reader.

well done, keep it up :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


You show how a simple "counter" and "hair in the face" can really show a great divide between two people-- a faraway admirer who's really not that faraway at all. Really felt the weight of longing here-- Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i would say this piece makes a nice read...nothing very flashy or deep about it...however a smooth flow holds the interest of the reader...the simplicity of the piece and describing a complex state of mind are to me the mainstay of this write.

good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful writing. Really feels like heavy emotion. Well done. I felt it. Cheers!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on December 11, 2010
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Tags: I, do, you, see, me, love, deny, yearn, yearning, care, caring, eva mace

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~ Czarina Iris ~
~ Czarina Iris ~

Where the sea meets the sky, Canada



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