More Than Once I've Fallen

They can go however slow they want.

I take your hands in mine,

And pull you close to me,

When all I need and want

Is just some sympathy.

 

Your kindred heart erases

Every bit of sorrow

That I've conjured inside,

Giving no tomorrow.

 

Your arms wrap around me,

Protecting me from harm,

You've become my knight

Without any alarm.

 

Quickly I fall for you

With every new embrace,

Knowing that you're mine,

And our love has no haste.

Author's Note

I wrote this in class today because it was the only interesting I could do other than watch the video.

Let me know what you honestly think as usual...

Reviews

[Chloe]

It's reality, and its about love. Simply artistic and beautiful. Loved it and ate it all up, like many you have fallen, like I have many times, keep up the great work, your brilliantly talented and obviously you need to be rewarded. I love how you wrote this in class. I am a senior in high school and write all the time in class too, all the time.

[Constance]

I write at work from time to time, too. I work in a school, so in a way it's "in class". I like this.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

P.S. LOVE the title. :P

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I've read this, and I'm pretty sure I already told you that I love it, but in case I didn't, LOVE it. We've already picked bones about rhytm, so I guess I don't have to repeat myself, but overall, WONDY-FUL ;P You're a darling poet.
KH

[Jeff]

This was a very good piece, thank you for sharing! I would've liked more, but I think that maybe more wouldn't be beneficial to the feeling of this piece. I wouldn't change it.

However, there are a few minor spelling/grammar issues:
In the title, there's a slash that shouldn't be
and
"Knowing that your mine," - should be you're

Other than that, great write! I look forward to reading more of your works!

[.]

Aww, man, that was so beautiful :) Two hearts woven together by love to make one solid bond that's truthfully everlasting :) Awesome! And the very cool animated picture so goes with it too!!

Mikey

[Brenda Sue]

Beautiful. Do you know Jack and me? It is parallel to our song. I mean these are exactly the words I would say to him. I love it. Wonderful write.