My humble warning

Woe is he who in

temples do stray

in search of honeyed gold

treasure left by the slain.

Pick carefully through

dark jungles at night

as tentacled fingers

pull unwary aside.

The beast in the

'rena snarls down at its prey.

This man who'd attempted

to triumph today.

Heed careful my warning

I humbly do give.

Some monsters are round you,

Some sleep deep within.

Reviews

[Jane Dougherty]

I like this too. It has a nicely archaic tone that sits well with the subject. I'm no grammar specialist, but I think that in the second line technically it should be does not do. Or if you want to keep it in archaic mode you could have doth.

[Marie]

I think this is prtty good, especially the last two lines. We need to walk caefully through this life.

I think you mean "prey" instead of "pray".

[Claire Chitty]

Thank you, that's very encouraging. Yes I did mean prey. Thank you for spotting that, I have now amended.