Regret

Don’t look at me

With eyes that want

Every particle of life

That I give off

When I breathe

And move and touch

 

We can’t be together

You and I both know

That the truth should

Be kept a secret

That if it should

Come to light

It would bring

Complete disaster

 

Oh how can I sleep

With your face

Invading my mind

How can I live

Without you by my side

How can I survive

When you’re not with me

To kiss and love forever

 

I’ll surely wonder the days ahead

What you became

And all that you said

I’ll regret the day we parted

And hope you feel the same

But in the end

Nothing will change

Reviews

[Flow]

Secret love always make for good poetry. This one is a great poem, I loved the flowing words and the feelings expressed.

[Travis Lawrence]

Absolutely breathless... From the first stanza, "Don't look at me / With eyes that want / Every particle of life / That I give off / When I breathe / And move and touch", I was taken back. And oh, I can very well relate to it all.

The second stanza is my favorite, though the almost entire piece is strong. The only two lines that I thought detract from the poem are "How can I live / Without you by my side", because it's cliche.

Regardless, this is a beautiful craft of words and emotion. Very well done.

Have a nice day!

[Insomniactive_Poet]

Such entangled emotions, ripping you apart from within. It's a gut-wrenching feeling. I really felt your pain with every word.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

This one is good. It flows, it is more prose with rhyming, i stick to a rhyming pattern the most. I liked it it is deep and heartfelt. i can tell you wrote it from the heart, and it was probably a past experience you grew from.

[quiet_nomad]

I read this and could feel the sorrow of your loss. I have found some of my writings to be similar, in the fact that I put my emotion there. You have strong emtions in the words you use. Nice piece.

[Avocations of Amber]

I've read all of your newest poems, but this is the one that I find most appealing. You seem to have a style that's all your own, without a definite pattern or rhyme and a voice that's far from passive. It also displays true human emotion, which envelopes the reader naturally. Kudos!

[RareRed]

Nicely worded....love that can't or shouldn't be but regret not knowing.