Why me, mommy?

Why me, mommy, why me?

I never did you any harm

I’m a good girl

Why do you always call me bad

 

I try so hard to make you happy

But you never seem to give a care

So why me, mommy, why me?

What did I do to deserve this

 

I know I cry too often

I know I’m not a perfect girl

But mommy, can’t you see

I just want you to love me

 

Why me, mommy, why me?

It hurts to breathe sometimes

To know that I come home to this

I just want to die

 

Reviews

[Carole]

Kat, I really like this. This pulls on heart strings, because it is something that I am sure many a child has asked a parent. The first stanza hit me right away:

Why me, mommy, why me?

I never did you any harm

I'm a good girl

Why do you always call me bad

I wonder how many children are unable to separate their actions from who they are? Telling a child they are good or bad can send a mixed message. Just because they have a bad day and make mistakes (like any of us) does not label them a bad person.) I always tried to praise my kids for who they were and not for what they did or did not do for that very reason.

All of us need approval-especially children. Again, these lines caught me immediately:

I try so hard to make you happy

But you never seem to give a care

Kids need security-to be loved, to have our approval, and again, to be praised for who they are apart from what they do. Every parent (including me) has fallen prey to praising a child for what they do, making little perfectionists out of them, causing them to get on the striving wheel.

Wow-I am so glad you took the time to write this one. It sends a strong message to every parent. Thank you. It just may be a wake up call for someone. Well done. XO Carole

[D. Nelson]

i agree with the others about not punctuating the lines, its not exactly a magnificant peice of work but then again it isnt supposed to be and i think it was well done, very sad, makes me think of a few people i know.

[Undone1]

I like the lack of punctuation on the last line of each stanza. It makes it seem more child-like. As the others, I like the repetition of the "Why, Mommy, why."

[ganymeder]

Very sad. Nicely written.

[Poetic Injustice]

Deep emotion. Heart-wrenching. Well written.

[Thomas James Martin]

Strong writing! Thanks for sharing your emotions.

Tom

[jakelsen]

Wow, this is powerful. To feel like this about the one place and person that should make you feel safe and loved is so very sad.

Good job.

[Christina Ann Banana Ha..]

This is very sad, but I feel like I've read this before.

[Jet Lag]

home should be the safe place, and all too often it just isn't.
nice job with a sad topic.
like the repeating lines.

[Kevon]

wow, this is powerful....the question comes in sadness, it make me a little sad too. That makes it a goo write then...when can effect the emotions of the reader